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Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
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Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 2000-05-10 12:18 PM


The quiet corners call in barreness,
And echo memories from silent halls --
While shadowed ghosts at edge of sight confess
In hushe’d tones what once beheld these walls;
What laughter floated there --what passion burned --
And both with wild abandon there applied;
What haunting joy in nightly dreams returned
When what had spun their cloth long since had died;
Remembered thrill that met the merest kiss,
The scent that fades, but ne’er will truly go --
And nothing left to fill my thoughts but this,
That only you, and I, and walls, will know.
For though from house of dreams I may depart,
Its emptiness shall always fill my heart.




 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


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bsquirrel
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since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

1 posted 2000-05-10 01:45 AM


Skyfyre,
It may be emptiness -- but one infused with richness, sight and beauty. Awesome.

Mike

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-05-10 03:01 AM


In hushe’d tones what once beheld these walls;
What laughter floated there --what passion burned --
And both with wild abandon there applied;
What haunting joy in nightly dreams returned
When what had spun their cloth long since had died;
Remembered thrill that met the merest kiss,
The scent that fades, but ne’er will truly go --
And nothing left to fill my thoughts but this,
That only you, and I, and walls, will know.
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and if those walls could talk...
they would speak in poetic perfection...
man, you are just so good at this...*smile*
exceptional emotions in this piece.
take care,
jm...with PE..


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave



Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-05-10 09:44 AM


I know Wow! is not a good word to use to describe how this poem affected me..but it's so powerful, so emotional and so darn good!!! I love your work...never read anything of yours I didn't think was marvelous! Thank you for sharing this with us.  
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-05-10 09:48 AM


I loved this Skyfyre ... I've always felt that houses retain a certain warmth and qualities of those who have lived amongst them, and your poem brings this clearly to mind.  Wonderful work!

Best wishes,
/Kit

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
5 posted 2000-05-10 09:51 AM


well first of all what pdv said and second of all yuh sniff
David2
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 407

6 posted 2000-05-10 09:54 AM


Skyfyre,
    Your work is always amazing. You write as I wish I could. Great poem!
      David2

Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
7 posted 2000-05-11 12:23 PM


With mixed emotions rushing by
Preparing to depart.
To leave behind these ghostly walls.
To leave behind my heart.
The hallways drip with emptiness,
My footsteps echo loud
'Cross mem'ries of a simple life
Falls a somber shroud.
Another glance into the bedroom
Where we once acted love
Those walls saw so much happiness
Though now, nothing's left of
The laughter which once resounded
Twixt whispered forevers,
Gentle caresses in the night,
And promises to n'er
Let the other cross o'er the Earth
Alone, to face life's trials.
But promises made during times
O' joy, are just denial
Of the pain a broken heart brings
Preparing to depart
The empty halls of ghostly love
To face another start.


Sigh Kess. I must say that you've brought tears to my eyes. It is hard, lonely and I admit in a way a bit scary. I feel as if I've spent my whole life moving and moving and moving. I wonder sometimes if I'll ever find a place to call home, with someone to make it feel like such. Who knows? All I know, is that as long as I have friends like you, I will never be truly alone. Thank you, from the bottom of my heart.

Love,
Chris

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

8 posted 2000-05-12 08:13 PM


Sky, such beauty beneath the feelings you write...this is an exquisite poem.
CocoBaci

Denise
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Posts 22648

9 posted 2000-05-12 08:28 PM


This is very moving, Kess. I especially was touched by the closing couplet. Very well done!

Denise

Kellsue
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 210
Waukesha, WI USA
10 posted 2000-05-12 08:35 PM


Beautifully written Sky...just beautiful!  

~Kelly


 ~Kellsue

Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill



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