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First__Knight
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0 posted 2000-05-09 10:21 PM


Thoughts of my mind
~First Knight~


Deaf....
from the words that you've shared.
So now I sit and listen to the symphony of silence,
With a loss for words.

Thoughts....
have run their course,
Cutting in the path ways to my heart,
As you become the etchings on my soul.

Belonging....
Yes my heart is,
and always has been yours,
as long as you should so desire.

Time....
What does it matter?
Fifteen years or fifteen minutes?
With you time stands still,
except when you are not with me.

Memories....
More than I could say,
And more than I deserve of you,
But I will not scoff at my blessings in this.

Desires....
Hardly the right word,
for with you they seem more like needs.
And my desire is to continue to need.

Missing....
Yes missing is the self,
The self that was found in you.
For when you are not here...Nor am I




 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.



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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-05-09 10:38 PM


~Holy cow,...I love this.  I'm not usually in this room and this is actually the first of your poems I've read.  Wonderful expression.  "For when you are not here,...Nor am I"...wow,..that's powerful.  I'll be back for more of your work for sure.    
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
2 posted 2000-05-09 10:40 PM


First_knight a beatuiful well written
poem -----sigh

netswan

Tia
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since 2000-05-05
Posts 41
massachusetts
3 posted 2000-05-09 10:45 PM


this is a beautiful poem.it's sad .... i have felt that feeling too many times before , i know how it is... good luck in the future.

Tia

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-05-10 06:07 AM


David~
Your thoughts are beautifully displayed.
And a slice of your heart as well.
*HUGS* to you, sweetie.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
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5 posted 2000-05-10 06:13 AM


I loved the style of your writing First_Knight, and the depth and passion of your words. Wonderful verse!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Brandyn Sand
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since 2000-04-21
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Columbia, SC
6 posted 2000-05-10 07:01 AM


This is quite beautiful.  What a lucky woman to have such timeless words attributed to her. Very nice!

 

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
7 posted 2000-05-10 08:09 AM


David...Thoughts of your mind, but reflections of your heart. What a beautiful piece of poetry.
Hugs  

First__Knight
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 678

8 posted 2000-05-10 07:51 PM


Thank you so much Tia, SPitfire, Netswan.

Smiles to you Marge,

Thank you Kit and Brandyn

Maybe just reflections of you Ruth...

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.



Denise
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9 posted 2000-05-10 09:45 PM


This is a beautiful heartfelt expression, David. Very lovely!

Denise

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
10 posted 2000-05-10 09:49 PM


ahh David. Forever the romantic. Forver the dreamer. Just as long as when it comes it is forever my friend.  



 When you are old and grey and full of sleep,
And nodding by the fire, take down this book,
And slowly read, and dream of the soft look
Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep;

How many loved your moments of glad grace,
And loved your beauty with love false or true,
But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you,
And loved the sorrows of your changing face...

William Butler Yeats

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