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Tia
Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41
massachusetts

0 posted 2000-05-09 10:07 PM


Can you see it in his eyes?
the pain,
his lost emotions
that never go away?

Can you feel it in his touch?
his need for love,
for happiness...
that never seems to come.

Can you taste it in his tears
the salt,
the longing to be understood
to be someone...

Can you feel it?
do you want to feel it?
the endless pain,
that burns in his heart...


 I'd rather have someone hate me for who i am,than to have someone like me for who i'm pretending to be

© Copyright 2000 Tia - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-05-09 10:12 PM


~My reply is a two fold...First I'd like to say that your poem spoke to me more than most do.  I mean this.  I felt it,..it's like something I've seen before. Second,...uuummm, your signature thingy there...well...KIX!!! I love it,...it's great.
Tom26
Junior Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 30

2 posted 2000-05-09 10:16 PM


Tia-

Reading this poem was kinda of creepy. I felt as if you were talking about me and what I've felt for near four years now. You're a very talented poet indeed.

                     -Tom

 To know you can't have something makes it that much more desirable.

First__Knight
Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678

3 posted 2000-05-09 10:20 PM


This is very Moving..I l like it.....And welcome to passions....This is the first I have seen of your work and look forward to seeing more

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.



Rosemary J. Gwaltney
Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
4 posted 2000-05-09 11:33 PM


This is very haunting and poignant and sad.  I know these feelings much too well.  Good poem with a deep message.


Nagroc
New Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 4

5 posted 2000-05-09 11:38 PM


I love this poem...it's everything I've always wanted to say but what I keep hidden and what I could never write down.  Keep up the good work!

 

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