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When I Look At You

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lorilockheart
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0 posted 05-09-2000 07:32 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for lorilockheart

I thought I needed a change - something sweet!


When I Look At You

Lori LockHeart

A single rose stands taller
Than the other few,
Without any thorns at all,
When I look at you.

The stars shine so brightly,
Twinkling all night through.
They never seem so far away,
When I look at you.

A single teardrop falls tenderly,
From the painful  midnight blue.
It doesn't really hurt so much,
When I look at you.

I see a love that's real,
One to last my whole life through.
It warms my heart and fills my soul,
When I look at you.


 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
© Copyright 2000 lorilockheart - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 05-09-2000 07:36 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh girl, I think you've got it bad, like I do!     Maybe we can share antidote, 'eh?  "When I look at you..."   aaahhh.  When it's love, that's all it takes!  You've done beautifully with this one!  If you're like me, you don't want "cured" of this anytime soon!     (throwing antidote over shoulder!)  
Kellsue
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2 posted 05-09-2000 08:01 PM       View Profile for Kellsue   Email Kellsue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kellsue

BEAUTIFUL!!  That's how love between two should be.  

~Kellsue




 Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill

Tom26
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3 posted 05-09-2000 08:42 PM       View Profile for Tom26   Email Tom26   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tom26

lori-

I had to stop reading this midway because it brought back so many memories I've had. Never stop writing.

             -tom

 To know you can't have something makes it that much more desirable.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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4 posted 05-09-2000 09:15 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Lori* This is written with beauty and grace, and from a heart that has felt love.  Thank you so much for sharing this side of your heart as well.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

JamesMichael
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5 posted 05-09-2000 09:21 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Soft and tender thoughts.  James
Aimster
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6 posted 05-09-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Lori--

This was so beautiful hon!! Written with a heart pure of love. Sweet sentiments indeed. Keep them coming, and i'll keep reading!

take care,
amy  



 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
redwriter1
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7 posted 05-09-2000 09:58 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

Excellent pictures.!..

Roses.. standing tall... mmmm

yup.. that's love alright!!
Janet Marie
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8 posted 05-10-2000 01:10 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

and sweet it tis...
love this little gem...
wonderful imagery
hey your pretty good at this poetry stuff  
later-lori gator
jm


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Sven
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9 posted 05-10-2000 01:14 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Really wondeful Lori!!

I can feel the feelings (?) of love in this one. . . simply beautiful!

Excellent, my friend. . .

-----------------------------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Rosebud1229
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10 posted 05-11-2000 10:55 PM       View Profile for Rosebud1229   Email Rosebud1229   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosebud1229

very beautiful, love is that way isn't it? all things fade in comparison.
jwesley
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11 posted 05-11-2000 11:03 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Now I really like that.  Beautiful piece. Well written.  I love the flow it has.  Love
IS wonderful, isn't it?

j.
WhiteNite
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12 posted 05-12-2000 04:11 PM       View Profile for WhiteNite   Email WhiteNite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhiteNite's Home Page   View IP for WhiteNite

Wow.  This is awesome!  Must be a great place to be.  It' been a while for me, but reading this porm almost made my heart flutter again. =)  Thanks.  --Dave

 "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment.
Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott




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REBECCA ALLYN
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13 posted 05-12-2000 04:16 PM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

Man girl are you good or what??!!
it seems true though, you do have it bad

LOTS of LUV,
Becky
CocoBaci
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14 posted 05-12-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

            
Gurl, you got it goin!
CocoBaci
LoveBug
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15 posted 05-12-2000 05:11 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Ah, I love this poem... so romantic. It's wonderful to find love. Good job!

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
Tuck
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16 posted 05-14-2000 04:05 PM       View Profile for Tuck   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tuck

oh, yea!  how beautiful! isn't it great to have angels in our lives?
Kit McCallum
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17 posted 05-14-2000 04:51 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I loved your tie-in line Lori.  This was beautifully done ... a wonderfully romantic verse ... sigh ...

Best wishes,
/Kit
HelmutB
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18 posted 05-15-2000 12:48 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

And when I look at you
I see poetic verse so true
Described feelings, in tenderness and love
Serene, like the flight of a dove above
The rose, my favourite for certain
I hope I can read more
What’s behind your poetic curtain
Thank you for brighten my night
Enlighten it with stary light



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

lorilockheart
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19 posted 05-15-2000 06:41 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

Thanks to all of you.  You don't know how much I appreciate all your wonderful comments.  It touches my heart!
Thanks!
Lori


 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Lone Wolf
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20 posted 05-15-2000 08:25 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Lori,
Wonderful...I can feel the love...so bright and true, my friend.  Excellent!!  
LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
jwesley
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21 posted 05-15-2000 10:46 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Lori, beautiful.  I, too, have a poem called
When I Look At You, written many years ago, and I'm only jealous that mine was no were near as pretty as yours.  Stay with it...


j.
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22 posted 05-16-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Well stop looking at me.....LOL  J/K  this is very lovely and drips with the sweetness of honey

 A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her.


vphantom
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23 posted 05-16-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for vphantom   Email vphantom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vphantom

Hi, I am new to the forum but I think your poems was absolutely beautiful.  Take care.

Vphantom
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