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The Candle's Flame

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RSEvans
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0 posted 05-09-2000 05:23 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RSEvans

Dancing light, which fills my night,
Give my fantasies flight
Burning wick, burning bright
Fill my eyes and give me sight.

By candle's light I seek the night
No sound of footsteps given flight
No creaks, nor moans, nor whispered words
The candle's burning solely heard.

A deadly quiet fills the room
A lonely heart sealed in the gloom
The darkness closing round the flame,
I and the candle much the same.

Quiet now, no shrieks or talk
Break through the stillness' gentle lock.
No restless spirits in the gloom
The room is quiet, like a womb.

No hideous laughter, haunting disdain
No cries of suffering or pain,
Nothing, in fact, in the silence thick,
Only the burning of the wick.

The flame dies slowly, it's light now gone
And the angels come with their holy song
To take me home, to my rest at last,
My life like the candle's light, has passed.


 Knowlege tempered by wisdom...Wisdom tamed by youth.

© Copyright 2000 Rob Evans - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 05-09-2000 05:35 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Worry not, though light has passed
Through your words your memory lasts
When we, as poets, lose this human skin
And death has stilled the aching heart within
Through rhyme and rhythm the beat quiets not
Yes gone we'll be, but not forgot

Sorry, I found this inspiring...and these days I take any inspiration I can get   Nice poem
poetFemmeFatale
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2 posted 05-09-2000 05:48 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh wow Robert, you don't write "dark" very often, but man when you do, you do!  This thing was eerie in a "closure" sort of way.  Fabulous idea with the candle and all.  Brravo big bro!  Hey, even that rhymed!  
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 05-09-2000 07:07 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Lovely metaphorical piece of writing, RS...you bring your reader into "your" poetic light with the sharing of these images and emotions. Beautiful illumination, to my way of thinking...

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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4 posted 05-09-2000 07:13 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

RSEvans~
A lovely render for certain.
~*Marge*~


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Poet deVine
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5 posted 05-09-2000 08:26 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Lovely poem! But I've got a match, I'll strike it against my computer and your flame will burn again!  
Denise
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6 posted 05-09-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful, Rob, in a sort of sad melancholy way. Very well done!

Denise
Marina
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7 posted 05-09-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Excellent writing Rob

When candle have fade
In ground we are layed
And returned where we were made

Marina


Brandyn Sand
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8 posted 05-10-2000 06:31 AM       View Profile for Brandyn Sand   Email Brandyn Sand   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Brandyn Sand's Home Page   View IP for Brandyn Sand

This left me feeling quite melancholy, yet it is so beautifully written.  The symbolism, likening the candle's flame to our own short and fleeting lifespan, was wonderful. *S*

 
RSEvans
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9 posted 05-10-2000 08:58 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Ruth:  I steal my inspiration to save the persperation, eh?  Thanks.

Pff:  Thanks sis  

Muse and Marge:  Thanks

PdV:  Fire...fire...heh heh...fire

Denise,Marina and Brandyn:  Thanks


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