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The Candle's Flame
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The Candle's Flame |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA 
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Dancing light, which fills my night, Give my fantasies flight Burning wick, burning bright Fill my eyes and give me sight. By candle's light I seek the night No sound of footsteps given flight No creaks, nor moans, nor whispered words The candle's burning solely heard. A deadly quiet fills the room A lonely heart sealed in the gloom The darkness closing round the flame, I and the candle much the same. Quiet now, no shrieks or talk Break through the stillness' gentle lock. No restless spirits in the gloom The room is quiet, like a womb. No hideous laughter, haunting disdain No cries of suffering or pain, Nothing, in fact, in the silence thick, Only the burning of the wick. The flame dies slowly, it's light now gone And the angels come with their holy song To take me home, to my rest at last, My life like the candle's light, has passed. Knowlege tempered by wisdom...Wisdom tamed by youth. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Worry not, though light has passed Through your words your memory lasts When we, as poets, lose this human skin And death has stilled the aching heart within Through rhyme and rhythm the beat quiets not Yes gone we'll be, but not forgot Sorry, I found this inspiring...and these days I take any inspiration I can get  Nice poem |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh wow Robert, you don't write "dark" very often, but man when you do, you do! This thing was eerie in a "closure" sort of way. Fabulous idea with the candle and all. Brravo big bro! Hey, even that rhymed!  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Lovely metaphorical piece of writing, RS...you bring your reader into "your" poetic light with the sharing of these images and emotions. Beautiful illumination, to my way of thinking... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RSEvans~ A lovely render for certain. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lovely poem! But I've got a match, I'll strike it against my computer and your flame will burn again!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Rob, in a sort of sad melancholy way. Very well done! Denise |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Excellent writing Rob When candle have fade In ground we are layed And returned where we were made Marina |
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Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC |
This left me feeling quite melancholy, yet it is so beautifully written. The symbolism, likening the candle's flame to our own short and fleeting lifespan, was wonderful. *S* |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Ruth: I steal my inspiration to save the persperation, eh? Thanks. Pff: Thanks sis Muse and Marge: Thanks PdV: Fire...fire...heh heh...fire Denise,Marina and Brandyn: Thanks |
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