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danny
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0 posted 05-09-2000 04:17 PM       View Profile for danny   Email danny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for danny


              no title

as i lay here with no sight
she flys on wings of night
through the emotions of my heart
to bring them in her sight
she will ponder them then start

with my sanity shell tear
my strands of dignity she'll wear
as a feather on each wing
whilst my pride to her she'll bring
to rape and wallow in

my hopes and dreams she scatters
on the wind that from her shatters
my mind my heart my soul
for these are her true goal
whilst she flys thats all that matters

i hear her cry within my mind
and feel her screams of pain as mine
only when she's gone will i find peace
until then my pain wont cease
from only heartache comes her kind

when i wake she will have left
as for now she will not rest
she will fly and scream her name
her name of hurt her name of pain

for she is loneliness

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Marina
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1 posted 05-09-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Danny, Welcome to Passions!!!
i look forward to reading more of your work.

Marina
REBECCA ALLYN
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Lima,Ohio


2 posted 05-09-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for REBECCA ALLYN   Email REBECCA ALLYN   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for REBECCA ALLYN

I really like this poem
it gets right at you,
I can't wait to hear more!!

          Becky
Brandyn Sand
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3 posted 05-10-2000 06:40 AM       View Profile for Brandyn Sand   Email Brandyn Sand   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Brandyn Sand's Home Page   View IP for Brandyn Sand

I have a real weakness for poems that bring emotions to life as a tangible thing.    And I am so glad  I stumbled on to this.  You penned "lonliness" quite effectively. *whew!* Here's hoping you can come up with a title to match the outstanding content. GR8 Job!
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 05-10-2000 06:49 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"only when she's gone will i find peace"

This line is so beautiful when compared to your topic of loneliness Danny.  Very thought-provoking ... I enjoyed your poem a great deal, and look forward to more.

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-10-2000).]
 
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