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0 posted 05-09-2000 12:02 PM       View Profile for danny   Email danny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for danny


raking the leaves of lifes gone past
drowning the tears in the crystal glass
drying the bones to lighten the task
raising the sail to strain the mast

giving the gold to obtain the lead
opening your hands to contain the spread
covering your mouth for what you said
brightening the room to go to bed

building the castle from shifting sand
raising the bet after folding your hand
digging the earth from where you stand
planting a rose in a dry parched land

saying youll miss her whilst waving goodbye
admitting its over before you have tried
knowing the answer but still asking why
saving your money for the day that you die

reading the words without taking them in
praying to god then committing a sin
worrying over stress that you put yourself in
saying youll lose when you know that youll win

[This message has been edited by danny (edited 05-09-2000).]
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brian madden
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1 posted 05-09-2000 12:39 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Danny, wow there was some beautiful images in the poem as well as a natural rhymth. Great piece, gives one a lot to think about.
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2 posted 05-09-2000 12:56 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

     Very, very good!  I like the opposing actions and deeds in this one.  The opposing parallelism is breathtaking.  I like the way you laid it out.  Hope to read more of your work soon!

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
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3 posted 05-09-2000 01:25 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster


welcome to Passions! this was not only an excellent first post, but one hell of a way to make an entrance (pardon my language) the opposing view points was what made this poem really flow together. you write with a lot of wisdom. i look forward to reading more of your work!

take care

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Danny Holloway
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4 posted 05-09-2000 02:25 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Have to agree with what others have said.
Nice writing...interesting perspective!

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

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5 posted 05-09-2000 06:16 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

There's a great deal said in this poem and the title draws it all together. Welcome to passions  
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6 posted 05-09-2000 06:39 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky


Nice body to your work, hope to see much much more of you. Right now I have to jump on my wife, Rosemary. She ate all my chips. Welcome friend.

Lucky, Dale

 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley)
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7 posted 05-09-2000 06:40 PM       View Profile for David2   Email David2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for David2

Welcome to Passions, I enjoyed your poem. Hope you like it here.
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8 posted 05-09-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Oh how true.....Great expression here!
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