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danny Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 18 |
FUTILITY raking the leaves of lifes gone past drowning the tears in the crystal glass drying the bones to lighten the task raising the sail to strain the mast giving the gold to obtain the lead opening your hands to contain the spread covering your mouth for what you said brightening the room to go to bed building the castle from shifting sand raising the bet after folding your hand digging the earth from where you stand planting a rose in a dry parched land saying youll miss her whilst waving goodbye admitting its over before you have tried knowing the answer but still asking why saving your money for the day that you die reading the words without taking them in praying to god then committing a sin worrying over stress that you put yourself in saying youll lose when you know that youll win [This message has been edited by danny (edited 05-09-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Danny, wow there was some beautiful images in the poem as well as a natural rhymth. Great piece, gives one a lot to think about. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
danny~ Very, very good! I like the opposing actions and deeds in this one. The opposing parallelism is breathtaking. I like the way you laid it out. Hope to read more of your work soon!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
danny-- welcome to Passions! this was not only an excellent first post, but one hell of a way to make an entrance (pardon my language) the opposing view points was what made this poem really flow together. you write with a lot of wisdom. i look forward to reading more of your work! take care amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Have to agree with what others have said. Nice writing...interesting perspective! A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
There's a great deal said in this poem and the title draws it all together. Welcome to passions |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Hay' Nice body to your work, hope to see much much more of you. Right now I have to jump on my wife, Rosemary. She ate all my chips. Welcome friend. Lucky, Dale If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Welcome to Passions, I enjoyed your poem. Hope you like it here. David2 |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh how true.....Great expression here! Welcome to Passions |
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