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Binocular vision .

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angelswing
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0 posted 05-09-2000 06:11 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for angelswing

Binocular vision snails eye view .

A sense of doom,
No piece of mind,
The darkness hangs over me now,
Twisted,
Bent,
Distorted,
Blind,
My sunshine left with you,
The light is gone,
Bright torch blown out,
Yet my flame still burns for you,
It shines the way I can never reach,
But always seems in view .

Written by Tom Baker  



 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 05-09-2000 06:38 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

So few words, yet incredible impact AngelSwing ... I liked the style ... this was wonderful!

Best wishes,
/Kit
mete out
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2 posted 05-09-2000 07:30 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***tom,
this is amazing bakes! i read it over 5 times and each time  the visuals got clearer, the words got more powerful..

i love the lines;
"My sunshine left with you,
The light is gone,
Bright torch blown out,
Yet my flame still burns for you"

fantastic yet again, you delve so deep.
well done mate.
lou  xxx


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


amazon_lover
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3 posted 05-09-2000 05:08 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi
Thats beautiful. When my best friend left I felt the same but my heart still burns for her and only her. Just hold on.

Sincerely
A_L
angelswing
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4 posted 05-10-2000 08:04 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Thanks to you all, this was a poem I wrote while the person that I cared for the most in the whole of the world lost contact with me . I fancied a change in style and tried writing some slightly shorter poems . I think that they still containthe same content but are more snappy and therefore easier to read .
Lou - I loved your last poem and many of your poems have inspired me to new levels and new challenges .
L.of.L. Tom .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
Enola
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5 posted 05-10-2000 08:18 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

Damn, this is really infectious.  I could (and want to ) read it over & over and not get bored of it and lose it's meaning.  I think you should try to write like this more often.  Well done my friend!
LoL.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
infinat3 sadn3ss
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6 posted 05-10-2000 03:07 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

'ello bakes
           this is so simple yet so complicated . prooves you dont need to say much to say a lot . well , my mate . keep it up

 freedom is the right to say 2 + 2 = 4
angelswing
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7 posted 07-12-2000 12:06 PM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Cheers Debs and Cabes, i get my inspiration from my friends and what's inside me so I should be thanking you for being there .
Cabes, I hope you don't mind, but I ripped the style almost directly off you as I admired your short yet snappy, strong and meaningful style, so had a go and turned out beter than my own !
Thanks .
L.of.L. Tom .


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