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Standing.... (needs one more verse) HELP!

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0 posted 05-08-2000 10:05 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for redwriter1

Audio available upon request.. Im going to be singing this next Sunday.. I need one more bridge.. to match the rymthm of the one I have...
(think of how you felt when someone left, or died,, and you didnt' get to say goodbye.. you just saw them yesterday, (like the parents of the columbine students)

STANDING


You left me standing here
with my heart holding back it's tears
and now i'm standing here
holding on to you

And now I'm standing here
minutes turn into empty years
my mind is lost by my hearts
holding on to you.....

(bridge)
My senses are useless
my body is numb, no emotion left
everything's frozen in that one moment
in time....................


(last verse)

Don't think that I can move
where would I go without you
I don't know what to do
so I keep standing here......

(please request audio if you know what i'm trying to accomplish here.. the melody and words.. are both trying to express how you stand there.... numb... not able to move.. just.. "stuck" in time)
but I need another bridge lyric.. that follows the "hopeless feeling of.. not knowing what to do"

Thanks guys!!

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Kay-lynn www.mp3.com/kaylynn

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 Kay-lynn
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1 posted 05-08-2000 11:42 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

"My only oath is to stand still,
promise never to go back...
but to stand alone, tho on my own,
without you all I feel is lack..."
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