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Breath Unplugged

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Martie
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   Breath Unplugged

When a spirit is set free
across the chasm there is a breeze
that nibbles ripples into the lake
even when breath is unplugged

it holds a minute
to navigate the loss
and plant a pulse
so quick that robins in cocking head
turn in sweet bewilderment

Listen to the dreams that come
when you are open to dimension
and time spreads itself

and you will know that love
has no boundaries
and that it understands forgiving
before your tear has
left its small circumference on the pillow




[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 05-08-2000).]
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"Listen to the dreams that come
when you are open to dimension
and time spreads itself"

Profound and thought-provoking Martie. This poem is a treasure ...

/Kit
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Very thought provoking. I read this with my own interpretation, it spoke to me deeply, I guess that is what good poetry does!  

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Wonderful, Martie. I can see that robin cocking its head! Love it!
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Martie~
Just one question ...
How do you consistently write the
best poetry I've ever read ?

I want a book of your poetry ! ! !
Yes, I do.

'and you will know that love
has no boundaries
and that it understands forgiving
before your tear has
left its small circumference on the pillow.

So tenderly awesome.
~*Marge*~


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Kit--Thank you so much for thinking this poem a treasure.

Denise--Every reader adds to a poem's depth with their own interpretation. I'm glad you liked it.

Thanks deer for you vision.

Marge--My sis, you say the nicest things!
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Oh, Martie, this is so beautiful!  I was especially struck by the words "love has no boundaries and that it understands forgiving
before your tear has left its small circumference on the pillow" you are able to formulate such feelings on paper so meticulously!  I love this!

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I am glad that you saw this Rosemary, as I knew that you would understand.
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Lovely words Martie...you've expressed boundless love as only you can  
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Martie, I read this, and I am taken aback....The first time through, I read it as if you were talking about death.  But then the ending make me think differently....hhmmm...?  You have a way with sharp, vivid imagery too, that is outstanding!  Such a short poem, with such a powerful imprint to leave on the reader's mind!  WOW.
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You share, so acutely, what it is to finally relenquish ourselves to acceptance of that unplugged, heightened breath, and trust that time "does" spread itself, no longer chained, across all dimensions...wonderful writing, Martie...

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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Yes, I agree unchained, which reminds me... Rosemary just ate all of my sour cream and didn't use one single chip. I'm going to have to send her spirit down to the store, chips with no sour cream... YUK..!

Good work Martie

 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley)
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Ruth--You are so good at making me glad I write.

Jen--It is about death, but also about the spirit which I believe never dies, and if we are open enough, can feel.

Claire--Thank you for your lovely reply and for seeing so clearly.

Lucky--Thanks for making me laugh--you are such a ....hmmm...thinking here....ahhh..scamp..yup...and that's a good thing!

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