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Lone Wolf
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0 posted 05-08-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lone Wolf

The raindrops streak slowly down
My window to the ground
Where will they finally stop
Not sure about every drop
They fall steadily from the cloud
No reason to feel proud
Of all that has passed
A puddle of tears has been amassed

Things said out of anger
Taken seriously is the danger
We both bear the guilt
For the walls that were built
Will they ever crumble
Think we could be so humble
To allow for the healing
Of this awful feeling

Would do anything to make it right
Not having to endure another fight
Let go of the hurt and pain
Purify this wretched stain
Imprinted upon my heart
Repair it and restart
Find a love so very new
Fresh as the morning dew



 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
© Copyright 2000 Jennifer L. Garcia - All Rights Reserved
lorilockheart
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1 posted 05-08-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

LoneWolf,
Your emotions come out so clearly in these words.  Wanting to do something, willing to do anything, yet not knowing what.  I hope it works out.
Lori

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I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 05-08-2000 08:50 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Hon...that's all you can do, go on with your life. Know you are in my thoughts.
Hugs
Ruth
Kit McCallum
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3 posted 05-08-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

"Purify this wretched stain
Imprinted upon my heart"

This is a wonderful phrase LoneWolf, and indeed a wonderful poem. Your remorse and tears speak loudly and sorrowfully.

Best wishes for a brighter day,
/Kit
Lone Wolf
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4 posted 05-08-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Lori...Thank you very much.  They are the feelings in my heart.  Only way I write.  I know it will work out for the best.  

Ruth...I am trying to do just that.  Thank you, you are in mine too!!
Hugs back...  

Kit...thank you very much....yes, they do.



 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Jeffrey Carter
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5 posted 05-08-2000 09:35 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

LW,
Very heartfelt pouring out of your soul. Oh, how this made my heart ache. Feel better soon

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

insect
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6 posted 05-08-2000 10:32 PM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

The rain can be a cleansing and the sun will rise with the morning dew and shine through.
Aimster
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7 posted 05-08-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

LoneWolf--

this piece was written with an amazing intensity and strength of character. something like this isn't easy to post...trust me i know. however, i am very happy to see that you are putting it all on paper and trying to "work it all out." Best wishes to you m'friend as you continue on this journey!

take care,
amy  

p.s...as long as there is rain....there is sunshine, remember that.

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
X Angel
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8 posted 05-08-2000 11:33 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

good poem, poetry can be the healer of a wounded soul   good luck and keep writing
~X~
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9 posted 05-09-2000 09:38 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

By the way...Lone Wolf...It can't rain all the time......Take care m'friend

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

netswan
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10 posted 05-09-2000 09:44 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Excellent Poem - LW

Your pain and strength come through
loud and clear - and so well written --)

Wishing you a good life ahead of you,
my friend

netswan
Lone Wolf
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11 posted 05-09-2000 11:21 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Jeffrey....Thank you and sorry for the heartache, my friend.  I know the rain will end someday...you are very sweet!!  

insect...very true, thanks!!

Amy...no, not easy to post at all.  Had to get it out though...get through those feelings.  Thank you for the wishes and reply, my friend.  I will remember that...  

X...hi again!!  Thank you very much...it helps me a lot.

Netswan...thank you for the wonderful reply and wishes, my friend!!  You always seem to know just the right thing to say...




 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Janet Marie
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12 posted 05-10-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

LW this is such an excellent piece of writing...
it shows such maturity and growth...
in both your poetry and your character.
wonderful to see this strenght growing in you.
take care, jm
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13 posted 05-10-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Lone Wolf~ This is so very tender and heartfelt....made me sigh.... -SEA
Lone Wolf
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14 posted 05-10-2000 01:00 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

JM,
I am humbled by your sweet reply.  Thank you very much.  I think my poetry and character grow more with each passing day.  So nice of you to notice.  
LW

SEA,
Thank you...letting go is never easy, but sometimes it's the only way.
LW
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15 posted 05-10-2000 04:14 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

What's that saying. . . "Into every life a little rain must fall"?

It would seem that you have found an umbrella. . .

Excellent writing. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

ESP
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since 01-25-2000
Posts 2574
Floating gently on a cloud....


16 posted 05-10-2000 05:31 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Be strong, the rain will dry soon...and the sun will dazzle you with happiness! Beautiful poem with emotions so strongly expressed.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
Kellsue
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17 posted 05-10-2000 07:37 PM       View Profile for Kellsue   Email Kellsue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kellsue

Very heartfelt and emotional poem!  Written so well.  You are a very talented writer!

~Kelly


 Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill

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