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I bite back

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PericolosoAmore
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since 04-14-2000
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0 posted 05-08-2000 03:39 PM       View Profile for PericolosoAmore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PericolosoAmore

And as I wait for you,
Ithink of you,
Idream of you,
But when you're done,
You turn and leave me all alone,
no goodbye is said,
You just leave me.

So then I think,
What's the point,
Is it worth another day,
As you drift away from me,
I slowly let go.

And then you turn to me,
you say 'hi' to me,
spontainiously,
I reply with nohting,
Just turn my head,
And walk away.

You say nothing,
I know it's all over,
You don't even care,
You don't fight back,
But when you do what you do to me,
I BITE BACK!!!

By PericoloseAmore.

© Copyright 2000 PericolosoAmore - All Rights Reserved
angelswing
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since 02-10-2000
Posts 718
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1 posted 05-09-2000 06:17 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

DUDE !!!!!!!!!!!!!
What a hard ase poem, the end was great, I think this one is actualy as good as your first and that takes some doing . You really have found a talent that you never knew you had . Have you read cabes knew one called 'Elevator'? If not, read it I thought the metaphor that he used was great .
Keep the writing coming, I love it .
L.of.L. Tom .
  


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
mete out
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since 02-16-2000
Posts 273
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2 posted 05-09-2000 08:15 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***pa,
this is so powerful.
it more or less knocked me sideways!
you go get 'em, tom was right you have an amazing talent.    


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


pandora
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since 07-26-99
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3 posted 05-09-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for pandora   Email pandora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pandora

just wondering where you came up with your pen name..... it's an interesting one

you've painted a picture of anger mixed with apathy... an interesting concept
poetFemmeFatale
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since 07-25-99
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4 posted 05-09-2000 07:20 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

LOL  I am SO glad I'm not the only one in here who bites!  Now I feel like I have some company.     Have you had all your shots?  I have.     This is a very "unloading" poem!  Glad you shared it!  And hey, welcome to our little ward.  
Enola
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since 02-11-2000
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England


5 posted 05-10-2000 08:10 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

Wow - were'd the insipration for that come from?  Or do I not want to know?  I'm so glad you've carried on putting stuff up, and I tend to agree with Tom, it is as good as your first one.  I hope to get one of mine up there soon,  I've had a complete mental block for the last couple of months.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
 
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