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Erosion |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA 
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Love beats down with "pitter-pat" And fills my heart with puddles Puddles then streams of this and that My heart becomes a muddle. I feel the run-off as it strays My heart now fleeting streams I hate these the most, these rainy days The nights are worse with dreams. Streams now rivulets of love Carrying away the top My heart's surface begins to move How I wish it would stop. Rivulets become swollen now Turning from creek to river Carving deeper ruts somehow Carrying away slivers. Love's rain keeps beating down Threatening to flood my soul And I'm afraid that I may drown Inside this watery hole. Rivers and vortex, raging flood My heart is swept away Eroded now into the blood Not wanting now to stay. And then as suddenly as it came The love is stole away, But the damage done all the same My heart will stay this way. Knowlege tempered by wisdom...Wisdom tamed by youth. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh man, how you hit this straight on! What an awesome comparison! I would never have thought of it that way! You are truly amazing sir! You have captured some real beauty and wisdom in this one, I am SO glad I read it. *bows humbly* Bravo! |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Thanks sis....actually it came to me when my mower got stuck in a rut in my front yard yesterday, following our torrential rains from Saturday ranging anywhere from 3 1/2 inches where I live to 13 inches less than 45 minutes away. We actually have people missing work today because they can't get here. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Loved the poetic progression from "pitter~pat" to "raging flood"...what an interesting perspective and inspiration... ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree! This is most excellent, Rob! I always enjoy reading your poems. They are never boring or run of the mill!  Denise |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Muse: Thanks. Glad you liked it. Denise: Praise indeed! I'll have to write one for You... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! I'd be honored, Rob! Denise |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Then go look at For Denise...huh? |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
What a wonderful comparision. I think this is one of your best Rob. i really liked it. Marina |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Thank you, Marina...this one was special to me as well...not usual. I may actually print this one out... |
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