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Erosion

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RSEvans
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0 posted 05-08-2000 11:15 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RSEvans

Love beats down with "pitter-pat"
And fills my heart with puddles
Puddles then streams of this and that
My heart becomes a muddle.

I feel the run-off as it strays
My heart now fleeting streams
I hate these the most, these rainy days
The nights are worse with dreams.

Streams now rivulets of love
Carrying away the top
My heart's surface begins to move
How I wish it would stop.

Rivulets become swollen now
Turning from creek to river
Carving deeper ruts somehow
Carrying away slivers.

Love's rain keeps beating down
Threatening to flood my soul
And I'm afraid that I may drown
Inside this watery hole.

Rivers and vortex, raging flood
My heart is swept away
Eroded now into the blood
Not wanting now to stay.

And then as suddenly as it came
The love is stole away,
But the damage done all the same
My heart will stay this way.


 Knowlege tempered by wisdom...Wisdom tamed by youth.

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poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 05-08-2000 11:20 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh man, how you hit this straight on!  What an awesome comparison!  I would never have thought of it that way!  You are truly amazing sir!  You have captured some real beauty and wisdom in this one, I am SO glad I read it.  *bows humbly*  Bravo!
RSEvans
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2 posted 05-08-2000 11:23 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Thanks sis....actually it came to me when my mower got stuck in a rut in my front yard yesterday, following our torrential rains from Saturday ranging anywhere from 3 1/2 inches where I live to 13 inches less than 45 minutes away.  We actually have people missing work today because they can't get here.
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3 posted 05-08-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Loved the poetic progression from "pitter~pat" to "raging flood"...what an interesting perspective and inspiration...

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau
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4 posted 05-08-2000 12:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I agree! This is most excellent, Rob! I always enjoy reading your poems. They are never boring or run of the mill!  

Denise
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5 posted 05-08-2000 03:35 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Muse:  Thanks.  Glad you liked it.

Denise:  Praise indeed!  I'll have to write one for You...
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6 posted 05-08-2000 04:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! I'd be honored, Rob!

Denise
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7 posted 05-08-2000 05:10 PM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Then go look at For Denise...huh?
Marina
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8 posted 05-08-2000 06:55 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

What a wonderful comparision. I think this is one of your best Rob. i really liked it.

Marina
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9 posted 05-09-2000 06:51 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

Thank you, Marina...this one was special to me as well...not usual.  I may actually print this one out...
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