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angelswing
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0 posted 05-08-2000 07:31 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for angelswing

Lost angels welcomes you .

If only shadows spoke,
I could ask my shadow,
Where Iíd been,
And where Iím coming from,
It could show me the mistakes Iíve made,
I must have made more than some,
How did I end up in this state,
The sun shines shadows long,
And what is this state Iím in anyway,
It just all feels wrong,
A sign I see,
A guiding clue,
To steer me right,
A song,
But the sign has one thing only,
Written there upon,
ĎThe state of Los Angelesí
ĎGoverned by lord major Tomí.

Written by Tom Baker .



 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
© Copyright 2000 angelswing - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 05-08-2000 11:23 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Very interesting!  I thought there for a minute, that you weren't literally talking "state", I thought "state of mind"....very cool how that worked well together!  Does everyone in LA feel that way?  LOL  I believe this is the first work of yours I've read, I'll certainly look for more!  
Enola
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2 posted 05-08-2000 12:03 PM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

You are Lord Major of one thing my friend, but it's not LA or making too many mistakes.....

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


3 posted 05-08-2000 01:54 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Ah, my birthplace...how well you wove that into your work...well done, Sir!  And how is it over there in the UK?  Now, to go about making "long shadows..."

Sunshine
PericolosoAmore
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4 posted 05-08-2000 04:13 PM       View Profile for PericolosoAmore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PericolosoAmore

You know who this is and that i'll always be there for you when you need me.
I like this a lot, plenty more fish in the sea, let them come to you.
L.o.L
P.A.
angelswing
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5 posted 05-10-2000 08:17 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Thanks to all of you, I thought of the idea for this when I was playing with the idea of the double meaning of state and was looking for a state that would give me the effect of coming to the end of a journey or a more spiritual place, and I saw the likeness between the words 'Lost angels' and 'Los Angeles' . I am glad you all liked it .
The wheather her in Britain is quite good actualy . How is it there ?
L.of.L. Tom .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
infinat3 sadn3ss
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6 posted 05-10-2000 03:12 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

i hope you make your shadow very long indeed like everyone should , be remembered .
i love the play on words , very fitting . see ya mate
ESP
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7 posted 05-10-2000 05:07 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Very cleverly written and pretty too!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
angelswing
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8 posted 05-11-2000 04:48 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Thanks loads cabes, the longer the shaddow, the more influence you give, I am going to reply to all yours in a minuit because I still haven't read them all yet .
ESP - Thanks for your support, and I know that I am pretty ! ( oh sorry were you talking about the poetry ) . I got carried away . your reply has cheered me up loads .


 Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.-
TerryW
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9 posted 05-11-2000 12:14 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Tom,
     Very expressive and powerful.  I like the sense of the end of a journey.  But you know, when you finish one journey, you always begin a new one!




 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
angelswing
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10 posted 07-12-2000 12:10 PM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

I know what you mean there, it feels like I am always traveling, I am hoping to get off this same darn motorway soon though, at least the country lanes are a little nicer, Happen to want to take over the wheel for a while, while ( double word score ) I catch my breath ? - No - ahhh well never mind, beter concentrate on the road again, Thanks .
L.of.L. Tom .
  


Don't try, do or do not, there is no try .
- Master Yoda -
 
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