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Poet deVine
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0 posted 2000-05-07 11:58 PM


The soft sounds of summer leaves
That dance in the forest cathedral
Songs of birds never heard
Resound in the forest primeval

A place within this world untouched
Never seen by human eyes
A pristine place that hides my soul
Where Angels wings are sighs

Worldly is my everyday name
But my heart holds a passion true
Every day, every moment I live,
I live to love just you.


© Copyright 2000 Poet deVine - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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1 posted 2000-05-08 12:01 PM


Lovely description -- Poet devine
And a truly sweet poem, sigh.

netswan

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-05-08 12:04 PM


PD...
this is an exquisite jewel of a poem!!
I love this beautiful piece...
and that last line...DIVINE.
much like the poet who wrote it.
truly lovely in its imagery and emotions.
take care, jm

Sven
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3 posted 2000-05-08 12:17 PM


*sigh* (doing a lot of that tonight)

This is just too beautiful for words deVine. . . a definite departure for you. . .please come back and visit anytime. . .

Beautiful my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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4 posted 2000-05-08 01:38 AM


simple, beautiful, open-heart poem....just enuff said...
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-05-08 02:13 AM


PoetdeVine~
Now THIS would be a great e-card or I think you should submit it to the main site and ALSO to the Blue Mountain Arts site.

It is a lovely, lovely poem.
~*Marge*~


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wayoutwalt
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6 posted 2000-05-08 02:15 AM


very nice poet d i love it much
Nan
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7 posted 2000-05-08 07:44 AM


I like it all, PdV - but especially the second stanza - the "pristine place that hides my soul"... very nice indeed..
angelswing
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8 posted 2000-05-08 07:50 AM


Very sweet poem - sigh - .  The ' Where angels wings are sighs '. Part is very nice, I have a presence in every poem, a little touch of goodness, piece and sanity . Where an angel touchs only good will come . Thanks very much, it was a great read, that made me tingle .
L.of.L. Tom .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

JamesMichael
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9 posted 2000-05-08 08:35 AM


"Every day, every moment I live, I live to love just you."  I'll take about $1,000 dollars worth of that devotion...as I ....sigh.....James
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10 posted 2000-05-08 09:53 AM


Sharon,this is a truly beautiful piece,especially love these lines .....

Worldly is my everyday name
But my heart holds a passion true
Every day, every moment I live,
I live to love just you.

and I agree with Marge    

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Denise
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11 posted 2000-05-08 01:17 PM


Lovely indeed, Sharon! Just lovely!!

Denise

Tom26
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12 posted 2000-05-08 01:21 PM


i think i was there once in a dream.....

         -tom

Michael
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13 posted 2000-05-08 01:24 PM


Beautiful poem, PdV.  Holds a mystic essance about it. "Worldly is my everyday name" - says it all for me.  


Michael

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14 posted 2000-05-08 01:36 PM


Good stuff!
lorilockheart
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15 posted 2000-05-08 01:56 PM


The line "A place within this world untouched
Never seen by human eyes", really caught my attention.  Physical places and emotional places. I enjoyed this one.
Lori


 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

RSEvans
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16 posted 2000-05-08 02:07 PM


Sharon,  This is short and beautifully sweet.  Thank you for this.
Kevin Taylor
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17 posted 2000-05-08 02:19 PM


I agree with Marge... send it in.

 Kevin

"Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there."


Beki
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18 posted 2000-05-08 04:15 PM


This is beautiful, second stanza my favorite but the last line really brings it full circle. I agree it would be a lovely e-card  
CocoBaci
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19 posted 2000-05-08 04:32 PM


"a pristine place that hides my soul where angels wings are sighs"
This PdV is profound and expressed with such elegance.
CocoBaci

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20 posted 2000-05-08 07:03 PM


Poet deVine,
Wow....wonderful piece.  So soft and sweet!!  Really liked it.  


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Poet deVine
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21 posted 2000-05-08 08:19 PM


Thank you all kindly for reading and replying to this! I will consider sending it to Blue Mountain...Gosh! I am blown away that you all liked it so much! Thanks guys!!    
hoot_owl_rn
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22 posted 2000-05-08 08:55 PM


PDV...this is beautiful, absolutely beautiful.
WhtDove
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23 posted 2000-05-08 11:48 PM


Awww, you're showing that romantic side ya know? I Love it!!!

The end just grabs your heart

X Angel
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24 posted 2000-05-08 11:52 PM


Sharon, it felt almost as if I could have written that poem, I love the way you describe nature and love all together rolled into one beautiful literary package. Exactly my sorta, favorite, wonderful poem!
Kudos
~H

X Angel
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25 posted 2000-05-08 11:53 PM


P.S. THIS should be on a greeting card.

SEA
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26 posted 2000-05-08 11:56 PM


Poet~ Everyone has already said it.....the feelings this piece gives is of love, pure and simple....wonderful.... -SEA
Parker
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27 posted 2000-05-09 12:14 PM


PD, truer words of love were never written. I just love the feel and flow of this. I says so much about the passion of love.

Parker

TerryW
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28 posted 2000-05-09 12:58 PM


Poet deVine,
     You are going to make me cry!   You always have a way of touching my heart, my friend!

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

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29 posted 2000-05-09 07:10 AM


PdV,
Excellent! Beautiful imagery and emotion.
You blew me away! Love the angel wing sighs.
                          Jester

Poet deVine
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30 posted 2000-05-09 08:27 AM


Thank you, thank you, thank you! Again, this blows me away to have this piece so well received!!! I am so grateful to you all for you kind words!  
Meadowmuse
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31 posted 2000-05-09 08:43 AM


I'm glad I saw this this morning...what a beautiful wrapping of writing and loving...yes, definitely submit it, as Marge suggested. Wonderful work, Poet D.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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