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Silent River, Flow

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 05-07-2000 11:31 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

(He said it.)
deep within,
a power failure
of my soul...
(He did it.)
did it once again
instantly, I'm withered, old...
(He broke it.)
so it might stay the same
(shattered)
chards of love remain...
(He's sorry.)
as he always is,
(abortion)
Cupid's arrow missed.

I heave no sob,
whimper no weep,
silent river,
down my cheeks...
So common now
that I forget,
and wonder why
my face is wet...
© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Sven
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1 posted 05-07-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

serenity. . . the feelings of absolute loss and pain are very evident here. . . sometimes, we even wonder why we feel anything anymore. . . but you will survive my friend. . . it's all you can do. . .

an excellent poem. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

bobbycat
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2 posted 05-07-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

This makes my heart ache for you....I know this isn't much, but here's a {{HUG}} reserved just for you.  Your words cry out in pain...the line "power failure of my soul" especially got me.  Wonderful work.

Bobbycat =^..^=
Janet Marie
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3 posted 05-07-2000 11:49 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

(He said it.)
deep within,
a power failure
of my soul...
(He did it.)
did it once again
instantly, I'm withered, old...
(He broke it.)
so it might stay the same
(shattered)
chards of love remain...
(He's sorry.)
as he always is,
---------------
silent river,
down my cheeks...
So common now
that I forget,
and wonder why
my face is wet...
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    *****
tis for love we cry ...
my sweet serenity.
and for the losses...
that always seems to follow.
But the tears we cry,
shall not fall in vain,
their presence gives proof...
that tho broken --
our hearts are not yet hollow.

(sorry) its late and me muse has left me
(literally)...
but this poem will be with me for a long time...its perfect!!
I do so love the way you write me twin.
blowing kisses to the south *smile*
jm

 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Marge Tindal
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4 posted 05-08-2000 02:47 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Serenity~
So sorry to read the sadness in your 'river'.
The title grabbed me ... it's got a magic pull.

The tears may be silent ... but the flow is inevitable to reach the other shore.
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~


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serenity blaze
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5 posted 05-08-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thanks to all for such sweet replies...Serenity is grateful...
X Angel
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6 posted 05-09-2000 01:04 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

I have to agree that the line "Power failure of my soul" made this poem for me
Good job
~X~
Aimster
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7 posted 05-09-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

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my sweet serenity, what sorrow and extreme sadness this poem held. however it was still beautiful. you see in my opinion, tears aren't a waste of time...they truly do cleanse the soul. and with all good comes bad, it's inevitable. a wise woman once told me...in order to know love and happiness and to truly appreciate it...we must also have had to experience true loss and pain (she was right) i can feel the sadness in your poetic "voice" in this one. i pray that this passes soon for you...however i know all too well that taking time for one's self to really grieve is the most important thing one can do. in the meantime...try to focus on something good in your life...surely there is something there!

take care...(you'll be in my thoughts)
amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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8 posted 05-09-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

This is terribly haunting, and very well written.  The words "power failure of my soul" especially moved me, and the last stanza.  Oh, that last stanza.
~ ~ ~

 The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G.

danny
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9 posted 05-09-2000 03:44 PM       View Profile for danny   Email danny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for danny

simply beautiful and regretfully sad i hope you reach a place where the pain lessens good luck for the future i hope you have brighter days to come
poetFemmeFatale
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10 posted 05-09-2000 04:43 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Oh wow girl...I don't even know what to say, except that this just ached with emotion.  I know that river you speak of...be strong.
hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 05-09-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Despite the sadness of this piece...this is excellent!! Perhaps one of the best I've seen from you and I like so many of your poems.
"(He broke it.)
so it might stay the same
(shattered)
chards of love remain"
WOW!! what can I say, those words speak volumes.
serenity blaze
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12 posted 05-09-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Much grats to all---esecially hoot owl for the lovely compliment---wish I could blame this on hormones....sigh...but all is as it should be...another day tomorrow...Another GROUP HUG for the entire forum....thanks...
Denise
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13 posted 05-09-2000 08:56 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Serenity, I too think this is one of your best and you do have so many great ones! This is just excellent writing!

Denise
spiked
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14 posted 05-11-2000 02:34 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Beautiful poem
feel the sorrow
CocoBaci
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15 posted 05-12-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Such an igniting poem
This left me almost breathless
Your expressions are the purest of kind
CocoBaci
Drauntz
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16 posted 06-02-2007 02:11 PM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

such a beautiful one. sad romance. but beautiful poem.

love it.
aziza
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17 posted 12-01-2007 06:47 PM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

I am always at a loss of what to say when I read your poetry.  It is so powerful and it hts me hard - this is really amazing.  I feel the depth of pain in the words - and, again, I marvel at you, the poet.

A
 
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