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HelmutB
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0 posted 05-07-2000 01:30 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

I miss you so


How can I write in words what I feel
How can I utter what seems so real

So real, but yet so far away
How can I ink these words I cannot say

These words I cannot say
Deep inside my heart the lay

They lay and suffocate my core
While my heart is sore

While my heart is sore and cannot beat
My soul is weary and silently I weep

I weep inside, in chambers dark
While my soul cannot embark

Cannot embark to silent soil
How can I write these words with which I toil

I toil to feel you here with me
My friend, were would I be without thee

Without thee I’m nothing more
Than a stranded fish along the nowhere shore

Nowhere I will have to go
Do I need to say I miss you so?



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

© Copyright 2000 Helmut Becker - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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1 posted 05-07-2000 01:43 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

I am not sure about the other poets here but I find it is hard to express the subjects that are the most personal and precious, such a close friendship. I feel my words cannot do their subject matter justice, I also find it hard to write about happiness without getting into clichés and corny images. Though love is one of the hardest things to write about. It may even defy words.

"Cannot embark to silent soil
How can I write these words with which I toil" a great image, one I am all too familiar with.

Michael
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2 posted 05-07-2000 01:47 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Helmut,

I have missed you!  Welcome back - and ty for coming back with such a gracious poem.  Hope you will be with us for a good while this time through.


Michael
Corinne
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3 posted 05-07-2000 01:51 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Hi Helmut,

good to see you again.

So much grief and sadness in this poem, friend.

Corinne
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4 posted 05-07-2000 02:05 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Helmut! I was elated to see your name here today..doubly so to read such a deep and thoughtful poem from you. Please say you're here for a while...  
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5 posted 05-07-2000 02:19 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, Helmut
My sweet, sweet friend .... you've just painted my day in the rosiest shade of pink !
How your adorable self has been missed by your friends here.
Thank you for taking a moment to let us know you are okay.  I love you !
Hugs - Hugs - Hugs !
I love you !
~*Marge*~


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Kit McCallum
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6 posted 05-07-2000 02:31 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I enjoyed the way you were able to flow from line to line, linking your thoughts from one to the other Helmut. Wonderful style and content ... beautiful.

/Kit
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7 posted 05-07-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Welcome back, our friend...we have missed you, too...
CocoBaci
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8 posted 05-07-2000 04:41 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Helmut, this is absolute beauty in poetry.
I look forward to reading and enjoying more!
CocoBaci
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9 posted 05-07-2000 04:56 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Helmut--

welcome back...and what an entrance you have made with this little piece. this was beautiful hon. i really liked the form and style you used...using each last word or phrase to create the next line. Very creative and beautiful poem!

Take care,
Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
lorilockheart
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10 posted 05-07-2000 06:33 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

Since I am new this is the first I've read of yours.  I really appreciate all your emotion.
Lori


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tracie66
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11 posted 05-08-2000 06:33 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Hey Helmut saw your name and thought I'd pop right in. Great to see you back my friend  
This was so tender and beautiful, thanks for the read.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


HelmutB
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12 posted 05-08-2000 09:11 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Thank you, to all of you for your replies

Brian madden
Thx, I understand what you are saying, and yes at times it is hard to find words without falling into cliches. I sometimes just follow my heart and the word fall into place, rather then to follow my thoughts and get frustrated. Perhaps you should try it.

Michael
Thx, I hope that you are well and that your world is turning. Missed you all, yes I did, I’m still uncertain of as to how much time I can devote to passions. It’s sure nice to see that you are all still there.

Corinne
Thx, You are so right my friend.

PdV
Thx, I have missed you too. I will try to drop in once in a while but I’m not sure how often that will be.

Marge
I’m so glad that I changed the skies for you
You have been a friend all the way through
And I love you too.
Hugs you back

Kit McCallum
I thank thee for these words so kind
Good friends are sometimes hard to find
But in a place called “Passions for Poetry”
Friendship is soooo plenty

Sunshine
“Missed you too”, sooooooooo much

CocoBaci
Thx, I’m glad you liked this small piece. I have to read some of yours yet, but I will do so soon, promise.

Aimster
Amy, thx for your words. I’m glad you liked it. I hope your keeping well.

Lorilockheart
Nice to meet you to, and Thx for your reply. I will also read some of your poetry

Tracie66
Hey and Thx to you too. I will see how much time I can devote to passions. Glad to see your name my friend.

I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem, and from time to time I will check in. It's truly a good feeling to be with friends and to come home now and then.


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

devina
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13 posted 05-08-2000 10:44 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

It's soooo good to see you popping in dear...Need I say that I've missed you??? Nah- I think you know!!! I love your style with this one...You should visit more often sweet man!!!
Much love-
~D


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

HelmutB
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14 posted 05-09-2000 12:36 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Devina
Well thanks for such a nice reply. The Love and sweetness are returned   . I will try to return now and then.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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15 posted 05-09-2000 02:24 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

Helmut!  I'm glad to see you again!  I jumped for your name, and found, of course, a beautiful poem, very haunting and poignant, and sad.  I loved it.
~ ~ ~


 The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G.

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16 posted 05-09-2000 02:36 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

HelmutB~ good gosh, this is so very sweet, I have a friend that I wish I could hear exactly this from, I felt every word, like arrows into my soul. Loved it. -SEA
Martie
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17 posted 05-09-2000 05:57 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Helmut, I hope it's not to late to say I missed you too...so glad to see your lovely poem.
hoot_owl_rn
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18 posted 05-09-2000 06:14 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Helmut my dear, dear friend. Great hugs and love sent your way. I have missed you always although you are never far from my thoughts.  
Meadowmuse
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19 posted 05-09-2000 06:20 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

I cannot let this linger here
without my note to one who's dear
These words have found so many hearts
and through their treasure, love imparts.

L. and S. P.
~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


poetFemmeFatale
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20 posted 05-09-2000 07:33 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

This "linking scheme" is one I've always wanted to try, and you made it look so effortless here.  Very good job you've done with this.  Maybe I'll give it a try now, as you have given me some ambition!  hehe  Hope you do show your face from time to time.  You have been missed, and your list of followers is growing quite long!     
HelmutB
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Rosemary
Thx, I'm happy for the leap of faith you took, moreso that you enjoyed the poem.

SEA
Thx, for the good gosh. I hope that all these arrows didn't harm you. Perhaps these words might be said to you in different verse, soon. I wish that your wish will come true for you.

Martie
A good friend can never be to late. I'm glad you liked it.            

Ruth
My dear friend, I missed you too. I return the hugs and love. Thx for reading. Hope you are feeling well.

Meadowmuse
The one that's dear
Is thanking you here
I'm glad you wrote this sweet reply
I missed you too, I can't deny
The one who writes so soft and tender
Everytime I read I must surrender
L and S.P
(you)

poetFemmeFatale
My Lady, Thx. I thank you for your words. Perhaps you should try this, I'm confident that it will turn out beautifully, knowing the way you can write.  


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Nan
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Jawohl, mein freund... Ich verpasse Sie auch

Aside from the overwhelmingly sad theme (hope all is well), Helmut - the format of this work is wonderful - You've done a great job on this poem - Looking for more here...
HelmutB
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Nan
Thank you for the words that sound so familiar and good to me. I'm happy that you liked this poem. As for the sadness within, well, yes it's true. Because I still do. miss you too.  


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

lorilockheart
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24 posted 05-10-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

Helmut,
I can see how much you miss your friend.

"So real, but yet so far away
How can I ink these words I cannot say"

Oh, but you have - and very well.  
Your words touched my heart.  Thank you.
Lori

 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance.
song by LeeAnn Womack
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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