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I miss you so
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I miss you so |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I miss you so How can I write in words what I feel How can I utter what seems so real So real, but yet so far away How can I ink these words I cannot say These words I cannot say Deep inside my heart the lay They lay and suffocate my core While my heart is sore While my heart is sore and cannot beat My soul is weary and silently I weep I weep inside, in chambers dark While my soul cannot embark Cannot embark to silent soil How can I write these words with which I toil I toil to feel you here with me My friend, were would I be without thee Without thee I’m nothing more Than a stranded fish along the nowhere shore Nowhere I will have to go Do I need to say I miss you so? The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I am not sure about the other poets here but I find it is hard to express the subjects that are the most personal and precious, such a close friendship. I feel my words cannot do their subject matter justice, I also find it hard to write about happiness without getting into clichés and corny images. Though love is one of the hardest things to write about. It may even defy words. "Cannot embark to silent soil How can I write these words with which I toil" a great image, one I am all too familiar with. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Helmut, I have missed you! Welcome back - and ty for coming back with such a gracious poem. Hope you will be with us for a good while this time through. Michael |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi Helmut, good to see you again. So much grief and sadness in this poem, friend. Corinne |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Helmut! I was elated to see your name here today..doubly so to read such a deep and thoughtful poem from you. Please say you're here for a while...  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Helmut My sweet, sweet friend .... you've just painted my day in the rosiest shade of pink ! How your adorable self has been missed by your friends here. Thank you for taking a moment to let us know you are okay. I love you ! Hugs - Hugs - Hugs ! I love you ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed the way you were able to flow from line to line, linking your thoughts from one to the other Helmut. Wonderful style and content ... beautiful. /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome back, our friend...we have missed you, too... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Helmut, this is absolute beauty in poetry. I look forward to reading and enjoying more! CocoBaci |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Helmut-- welcome back...and what an entrance you have made with this little piece. this was beautiful hon. i really liked the form and style you used...using each last word or phrase to create the next line. Very creative and beautiful poem! Take care, Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Since I am new this is the first I've read of yours. I really appreciate all your emotion. Lori [img]http://www.clipartguide.com/clipart_flowers/flowers_[/img] |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hey Helmut saw your name and thought I'd pop right in. Great to see you back my friend This was so tender and beautiful, thanks for the read. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Thank you, to all of you for your replies Brian madden Thx, I understand what you are saying, and yes at times it is hard to find words without falling into cliches. I sometimes just follow my heart and the word fall into place, rather then to follow my thoughts and get frustrated. Perhaps you should try it. Michael Thx, I hope that you are well and that your world is turning. Missed you all, yes I did, I’m still uncertain of as to how much time I can devote to passions. It’s sure nice to see that you are all still there. Corinne Thx, You are so right my friend. PdV Thx, I have missed you too. I will try to drop in once in a while but I’m not sure how often that will be. Marge I’m so glad that I changed the skies for you You have been a friend all the way through And I love you too. Hugs you back Kit McCallum I thank thee for these words so kind Good friends are sometimes hard to find But in a place called “Passions for Poetry” Friendship is soooo plenty Sunshine “Missed you too”, sooooooooo much CocoBaci Thx, I’m glad you liked this small piece. I have to read some of yours yet, but I will do so soon, promise. Aimster Amy, thx for your words. I’m glad you liked it. I hope your keeping well. Lorilockheart Nice to meet you to, and Thx for your reply. I will also read some of your poetry Tracie66 Hey and Thx to you too. I will see how much time I can devote to passions. Glad to see your name my friend. I'm glad that you enjoyed this poem, and from time to time I will check in. It's truly a good feeling to be with friends and to come home now and then. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
It's soooo good to see you popping in dear...Need I say that I've missed you???  Nah- I think you know!!! I love your style with this one...You should visit more often sweet man!!!Much love- ~D Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Devina Well thanks for such a nice reply. The Love and sweetness are returned . I will try to return now and then. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Helmut! I'm glad to see you again! I jumped for your name, and found, of course, a beautiful poem, very haunting and poignant, and sad. I loved it. ~ ~ ~ The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
HelmutB~ good gosh, this is so very sweet, I have a friend that I wish I could hear exactly this from, I felt every word, like arrows into my soul. Loved it. -SEA |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Helmut, I hope it's not to late to say I missed you too...so glad to see your lovely poem. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Helmut my dear, dear friend. Great hugs and love sent your way. I have missed you always although you are never far from my thoughts. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I cannot let this linger here without my note to one who's dear These words have found so many hearts and through their treasure, love imparts. L. and S. P. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
This "linking scheme" is one I've always wanted to try, and you made it look so effortless here. Very good job you've done with this. Maybe I'll give it a try now, as you have given me some ambition! hehe Hope you do show your face from time to time. You have been missed, and your list of followers is growing quite long! |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Rosemary Thx, I'm happy for the leap of faith you took, moreso that you enjoyed the poem. SEA Thx, for the good gosh. I hope that all these arrows didn't harm you. Perhaps these words might be said to you in different verse, soon. I wish that your wish will come true for you. Martie A good friend can never be to late. I'm glad you liked it. Ruth My dear friend, I missed you too. I return the hugs and love. Thx for reading. Hope you are feeling well. Meadowmuse The one that's dear Is thanking you here I'm glad you wrote this sweet reply I missed you too, I can't deny The one who writes so soft and tender Everytime I read I must surrender L and S.P (you) poetFemmeFatale My Lady, Thx. I thank you for your words. Perhaps you should try this, I'm confident that it will turn out beautifully, knowing the way you can write. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Jawohl, mein freund... Ich verpasse Sie auch Aside from the overwhelmingly sad theme (hope all is well), Helmut - the format of this work is wonderful - You've done a great job on this poem - Looking for more here...  |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Nan Thank you for the words that sound so familiar and good to me. I'm happy that you liked this poem. As for the sadness within, well, yes it's true. Because I still do. miss you too. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Helmut, I can see how much you miss your friend. "So real, but yet so far away How can I ink these words I cannot say" Oh, but you have - and very well. Your words touched my heart. Thank you. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Thank you lori for your reply. Take your heart let it form the line Poetry can be so rewarding and sheer devine You also write with your heart as I can see I'm glad that I met thee THX The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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