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Black Winter

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brian madden
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0 posted 05-07-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for brian madden

The black wave fails to haunt me here,
Outside I lived
Outside I believed
Outside of Outside I was born.
I descended to this vacancy
in the unwelcoming embrace of a black winter,
not that it is of concern,
for carved inside memories
of your love nurture comfort.

Venturing through the bleak garden
of cancerous trees in a daze, always
I cling to your words as a crutch
of stability. In avenues of charcoal
sombre ivy, against the reflect
of winter hinterland, I crouch entranced
by the future frozen as a corpse
in snow. My eyes have failed to focus
strained by infinite horizons of blinding white.

Athena preserved in the hibernation orchard  
cries for us to be everything all at once,
I wander in this desolate grey
suffocated with brittle autumn leaves
fragile as everything we cherish,
drifting I become lost yet what is seen
remains imprinted on my skin.
I have prayed on this blessed ground
for space to dream eternally.

Thorns emerge through my slumber
awaking me into a frozen agony,
flowers blossom from the blood of my scars.
There shall be no mercy
for the weeping souls.
The garden's callous nature demands
that its children must suffer  
in the shadow of a black winter
to earn the sanctuary of life.
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1 posted 05-07-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

BrianM~
You've got some beautiful lines
laced through this piece.
I particularly enjoyed -

'In avenues of charcoal
sombre ivy, against the reflect
of winter hinterland,'

'I wander in this desolate grey
suffocated with brittle autumn leaves
fragile as everything we cherish,'

Truly more than I expected to find
in a 'Black Winter'.
~*Marge*~





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2 posted 05-07-2000 12:53 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

My favorite lines....The garden's callous nature demands
that its children must suffer  
in the shadow of a black winter
to earn the sanctuary of life.

enjoyed the poem!
serenity blaze
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3 posted 05-07-2000 01:15 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Wow...many deep allusions here...a thoughtful piece, well-written, in a desolute mood that appeals to me...Bravo.
lorilockheart
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4 posted 05-07-2000 01:23 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

Brian,

Dark, yet intriguing.  I liked "Athena preserved in the hibernation orchard  
cries for us to be everything all at once,"
You have a unique way of writing.  
I really enjoyed it!
Lori
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5 posted 05-07-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I like this...sort of an old world feel to it..I imagine Knights and Damsels... excellent imagery throughout..  
Zelda
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6 posted 05-07-2000 10:36 PM       View Profile for Zelda   Email Zelda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zelda

There is lots of imagery in this piece.  The first of yours that I have read.
I would have to agree, you have a very unique style.
Nicely written.
Z
Rosebud1229
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7 posted 05-07-2000 10:42 PM       View Profile for Rosebud1229   Email Rosebud1229   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rosebud1229

very beautiful indeed lots of image comes to mind, and that sometimes even though we don't want to desolate black winters they still come.

 
 
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