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Black Winter
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Black Winter |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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The black wave fails to haunt me here, Outside I lived Outside I believed Outside of Outside I was born. I descended to this vacancy in the unwelcoming embrace of a black winter, not that it is of concern, for carved inside memories of your love nurture comfort. Venturing through the bleak garden of cancerous trees in a daze, always I cling to your words as a crutch of stability. In avenues of charcoal sombre ivy, against the reflect of winter hinterland, I crouch entranced by the future frozen as a corpse in snow. My eyes have failed to focus strained by infinite horizons of blinding white. Athena preserved in the hibernation orchard cries for us to be everything all at once, I wander in this desolate grey suffocated with brittle autumn leaves fragile as everything we cherish, drifting I become lost yet what is seen remains imprinted on my skin. I have prayed on this blessed ground for space to dream eternally. Thorns emerge through my slumber awaking me into a frozen agony, flowers blossom from the blood of my scars. There shall be no mercy for the weeping souls. The garden's callous nature demands that its children must suffer in the shadow of a black winter to earn the sanctuary of life. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BrianM~ You've got some beautiful lines laced through this piece. I particularly enjoyed - 'In avenues of charcoal sombre ivy, against the reflect of winter hinterland,' 'I wander in this desolate grey suffocated with brittle autumn leaves fragile as everything we cherish,' Truly more than I expected to find in a 'Black Winter'. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
My favorite lines....The garden's callous nature demands that its children must suffer in the shadow of a black winter to earn the sanctuary of life. enjoyed the poem!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...many deep allusions here...a thoughtful piece, well-written, in a desolute mood that appeals to me...Bravo. |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Brian, Dark, yet intriguing. I liked "Athena preserved in the hibernation orchard cries for us to be everything all at once," You have a unique way of writing. I really enjoyed it! Lori |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this...sort of an old world feel to it..I imagine Knights and Damsels... excellent imagery throughout..  |
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Zelda Junior Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 43NOVA |
There is lots of imagery in this piece. The first of yours that I have read. I would have to agree, you have a very unique style. Nicely written. Z |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very beautiful indeed lots of image comes to mind, and that sometimes even though we don't want to desolate black winters they still come. |
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