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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-05-07 05:23 AM


A thousand dreams
I dream, untold
sleep's mystery
to be unfold
clouds in sky
adrift, to skrye...
(Brush you now,
tear from my eye...)
Laughter.
Silence.
Joke subside...

Behind a screen
a heart in scream,
torrent of a hateful flood---
river of this journey's blood.
Lost amid a labyrinth
of my own device...
Tell me now,
where North Star lies.
Take my hand,
though pain despised
and if in truth,
'tis death of youth--
gladly will I dig this grave,
if all my sin will be forgave--
expelled within relief of sigh...

Plaintive, on this bended knee,
tell me, what's to come of me?

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland
1 posted 2000-05-07 06:07 AM


We seem to share similar bedtime rituals. A powerful poem, I am in awe. The are some times when words can't say enough this is one of those times. I chose the icon of a teddy bear, if you feel down before you go to be you can hug him. Sweet dreams.
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-05-07 10:06 AM


A thousand dreams
I dream, untold
sleep's mystery
to be unfold
clouds in sky
adrift, to skrye...
(Brush you now,
tear from my eye...)
----------------

but my sweet serenity...to dream you must first lie that lovely head of yours down and actually sleep *smile*

this is exquisite my dear...I love when oyu write like this...
love you on bended knee as well  
*kiss kiss* to ya me twin


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave



spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
3 posted 2000-05-11 02:44 AM


You write with such inspiration.
Another poem well done
thanks

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 2000-05-11 08:45 AM


Ah, but would we really truly want to know what was going to happen to us?? Perhaps it would be a blessing, but on the other hand, it could very well be a curse. Either way, a nice piece of writing here  
TerryW
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA
5 posted 2000-05-11 11:56 AM


serenity~
     My dear, you brought tears to my eyes.  I will hold your hand through pain dspised, and if I can, I will point you to the north star and its ever-cleansing light.  Very powerful piece.  But when you think on your midnight plea, remember -- you are not alone.


 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
6 posted 2000-05-11 11:10 PM


Look and see the star my friend. . . there will you draw power from its light. . .and light from its power. . .

Excellent poem. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

7 posted 2000-05-12 05:53 AM


Thanks to all for the kind and thoughtful replies---my most sincere gratitude...
poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
8 posted 2000-05-12 11:32 AM


Serenity, this has got to be the most beautiful thing I've seen from you!  I love how your words just "fall" down the page!  This is a wonderful style you've used here....I loved all the rhyme scheme too.  It really gave this the tearful punch it deserves!  Fabulous work my dear, I'm gonna read it again!  Sad, but beautiful!  (sniff and grin)
Denise
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Posts 22648

9 posted 2000-05-12 11:39 AM


This is wonderfully written, Serenity, I agree!

Denise

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