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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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0 posted 2000-05-07 02:45 AM


Animal instinct
passion and lust
groping hands
pelvic thrust...
Kiss the neck,
stroke the thigh,
listen
to your lover sigh...
Passion flared,
desire breeds,
Pacify
the body's needs.
Kiss and tell.
Love and sell.
Lover's love,
become your hell...

So what if the game grows old?
just close your eyes, release your soul,
and screw until your blood runs cold...

Nothing to it.
Sleep right through it.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
1 posted 2000-05-07 02:49 AM


Ouch Serenity ------ a good lover
one could never sleep through  NO Matter
how unnew it is ---)

netswan

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
2 posted 2000-05-07 06:42 AM


The only way to describe the change of direction in this poem is lying out a summer's day and having a litre of artic water be suddenly poured all over you. Sex without love is indeed pointless and worthless. Great poem, I loved the pacing.  
pandora
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since 1999-07-26
Posts 184

3 posted 2000-05-07 10:18 AM


LOL!!!!!!!!!

i love this...!!!!!


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-05-07 10:38 AM


DAMN!!!
well, get me all hot and bothered and then kick me out of bed *smile*
this is awesome girl...
those last two lines...
perfection.

glad I didnt read this late last night...
dont think I would have slept  
later sweet poet-girl.
jm

 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave



Sven
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5 posted 2000-05-07 11:52 PM


serenity, I can feel the sting of this one. . . quite pointed. . .

full of power. . .excellent poem. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Michael
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6 posted 2000-05-07 11:57 PM


I loved this one, dear...
Gads - that last line almost hurts to think about...LOL

Michael


Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap
7 posted 2000-05-08 12:12 PM


Sheesh!  Haven't these people ever heard of CREATIVITY...?  LOL

Methinks at this point, another lover is in order ... as I don't think it would be possible for it to become "hell" with someone you actually cared for ... one would hope that in that case the lack would have been noticed, and steps taken to correct the problem ... but then maybe that's just me...?  

Not sure whether to giggle or cluck my tongue and shake my head, here, girl ... let's hope this isn't autobiographical!  (If it is, see advice above -- LOL)  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

8 posted 2000-05-08 12:32 PM


netswan---do 20 years and call me in the
          morning....smiles...

brian-----and yes, that is EXACTLY how it
          feels...

pandora---(grinning now)  the irony of
          PANDORA replying to THIS--LOVE IT.

j. marie--I think I know you know, y'know?

Sven------Thanx Sveetie--tho I am convinced
          that you couldn't possibly relate.

Michael---Aren't you glad I didn't blame
          THIS one on you?  ROFLMAO..AHHAHA.

kess------methinks everyone here has heard
          of creativity---was someone else I
          had in doubt---but thanks, and
          worry not, I exit smiling...

Thanks to all...glad that no one was offended
(well, WITH THE EXCEPTION OF ONE...AHHAHA...

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