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interlude with ione
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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interlude with ione Amethyst mushroomed, a vision within a dream, our minds met just then. In that brief spell where time wasn’t, I understood part of you. I let you all the way in, past my ione persona. You measured trustworthiness, I trusted you as much as I could. You offered a gift, a path of choice, I gave you nothing, really, just misguided love, you’ve had plenty of that. Now the sacking is emerald, the many oils of your ideas by degrees bleeding to white, then to nothing I will recognize. Caught between two worlds, spring bordering on summer, death comes before rebirth. © 2000 CM Bailey |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Great imagery, Corrine -- sounds so sad, though netswan |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hey Corinne - how are you? Wonderful poem here my friend...and sad - it is the emptiness I see. Hugs  K |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, Netswan. Doing Fine, Severn, how is life treating you, dear? Yes, death is sad, the loss of a friend is what we feel most. Corinne |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nicely done, my friend.. Of course, I've come to expect nothing less than greatness from you... I like the final stanza best...  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is awesome Corinne... you always write in such a mannor, that it makes me work to find all the lessons and wisdom in your poems... (which means Im slow and dense) LOL you write with poetic intelligence... how did ya get to be so smart anyway  take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ I found the sorrow of your loss woven into this piece of beauty. 'Now the sacking is emerald, the many oils of your ideas by degrees bleeding to white, then to nothing I will recognize.' HUGS, my friend. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks Nan, a painful journey this one. Janet Marie, you are too kind. Not smart, just a lot of recent heavy experiences, they must have some upside, I guess. Lessons learned, enlightenment, etc. Marge, thanks, hon. It's too difficult to begin to explain... Corinne |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Your pain reflects vividly here, Corinne. Love the referances to Amethyst and Emerald here. Indeed, death comes before rebirth - and sometimes that death is slow and agonizing too... good poem. Michael |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Corinne, your a lot more complex then meets the eye. Your use of imagery humbles me, many a time. This being one of them.... Sorry I seem have failed to respond to this one, not having the words to give it proper compliment. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Michael, sometimes we have to dwell in a dark place in order to rise with the sun. However, I hope it will be a brief visit. I just don't have the strength to hang out in dark places for very long anymore. Park, thank you, my friend, for all your kind words. Your poetry shines with complex imagery as well. Corinne |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
So deep, I could drown trying to grasp all the feelings expressed here... I cannot say for sure if I have understood the gist of what you wanted to say, but I am trying hard... I am hereby trying to add my own flow of thoughts. I hope that you don't mind... ------ Our eyes met just to say hello, Whispering love ever so mellow, Trust, friendship, support, dumped ego, Souls searched, minds met, said "off we go". Days passed, nights flew, Now all I have is left-over strains, All colours and all the hue, Leaving behind melancholy pains. Misery lacks company said the enlightened one, Yes, now I stand saddened and anguished, All that I could I might not have done, Else this heart would not have been bereaved... ----- Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
Corinne, How wonderfully you share all your journeys - light, dark or complex blends. Thank you. Rick |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sudhir, I am very touched by your response poem, thank you for writing this. RAM, just calls 'em likes I sees 'em, sweet poet. Corinne |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne, your poetry always touches my heart... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Corinne, you are becoming wise beyond your years...hold that wisdom close to your heart...Sunshine |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well written, Corinne. I hope your stay in this valley is short lived. I guess we can't really appreciate the mountaintops without these valleys. They are painful though. HUGS Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks Sunshine and Denise, yes, it is here where we grow the most, though we'd rather not. Thank you, Corinne |
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