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~Distant Grows our Hearts~
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~Distant Grows our Hearts~ |
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Twilight Tearstains New Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 8 |
Empty air wafts between us As silence lingers gently Our eyes are slowly wandering Wanting simply not to see. Whispers once soul-consuming Now in the distance sigh In a starlit net of tears I wonder if I should even try. You touch me with a silken kiss But absent is your heart And I remember love within When we both played the part. In horizons far away from here Perhaps our fire burns But we will not travel there And find the love we yearn. Instead we lightly smile As our spirits soar apart And cry among the lost and lonely While distant grows our hearts. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WoW...what a wonderful first post. Very touching and I felt a little sad when reading this. Welcome to passions, can't wait to read more of yours  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
How very well expressed...and how acutely sad this is. I, too, look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you for sharing this one. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Welcome to Passions. . . This was truly a sad poem. . . I would say to not just give up so soon. . . there are some loves that are worth trying again. . . if there is something between you, try to work it out. . . It seems as though you had a very wonderful love. . . don't let that go, unless you've tried everything. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Welcome to Passions, Twilight. What a smashing entrance. Beautiful, yet sad, poem. Well written netswan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh my, as I quietly sigh, May I say this first of your poems is great! CocoBaci |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Well you certainly know how to make an entrance. Welcome to Passions You will find many a kindred spirits here. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Twilight~ This is a beautifully stated piece. The beauty of your thoughts almost overshadows the sadness. Welcome to Passion's. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautifully put--and without a hint of bitterness--I envy that...Welcome... Enjoyed this much. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Intriguing poem this was. Truly hit home with me. Welcome to Passions, indeed. Michael |
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Twilight Tearstains New Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 8 |
*blushing* Thank you all so very much for the lovely replies and the gracious welcomes....although they aren't needed, because I've been here a while. hmmm, now who am I?  But once again, I thank you all. ~We are only truly lost when we've lost ourselves~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*SMILING CAUSE I THINK I KNOW* either way...awesome poem... and if you know know me, then you know I relate all to well... your poem was laced exquisitely with sadness and loss..but no anger..very nice. take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
first off welcome to passions and enjoy your stay...with work as exquisite as this...i hope you stick around for a long time! this took my breath away with its sadness and longing. you write with an amazing honesty that grips a hold of the reader and makes them feel what you feel. very nicely done. best wishes to you! amy p.s. i like your user-name ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Tia Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41massachusetts |
that was a beautiful poem...you wrote it with your heart. i hope to see more of your work. tia I'd rather have someone hate me for who i am,than to have someone like me for who i'm pretending to be |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
See, Mike and I KNEW you weren't new! HA! So we did ourselves a bit o' research...hehe. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Oh,  But I will say that I LOVE this poem. My fave part being:Now in the distance sigh" Because it's so poetically smooth and because I have been here before Chris |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful poetry. All else I can say is when it seems to be slipping away, get a firm grip on it, and yank it back with as much fury of love as you can muster. Nothing slips away unless we loosen our grip and let it seep through. We are stronger than we think, and anything is possible. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Twilight Tearstains New Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 8 |
LOL at Christopher! Knew I wasn't new, eh? I'm sure a good deal of you know who I am anyway. I only picked a new name to hide this from a few people you can say..so, it served it's purpose. Thank you all so much for the lovely comments! btw, a special thank you to you, Temptress. I really needed to hear that. I need to hang on, to keep him close to me. And I can do that. *puts on her strong face and forces a smile* ~We are only truly lost when we've lost ourselves~ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Very beautifully done, very touching. |
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