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netswan
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0 posted 2000-05-07 12:03 PM



Victims

Once when I was very young
I fell underneath his spell
he wove me into his spider web
'til I found I was rather dumb

Oh, how my heart burst in two
when I found him in her bed
She was my very best friend
and I wished they were both dead

For a long time I blamed myself
for losing my very best friends
I just wanted a wedding ring
before I gave him all love brings

They decided to be a pair
and so in a few weeks they wed
and through the many years they were
busy jumping from bed to bed

Now I am glad my heart has healed
for it was never theirs to steal
Life has lots to gain and lose
unprotected sex they did choose

It was just last week that I heard
and I realized their selfish ways
and their silver tongued woven lies
that those two are going to die


I hadn't thought of either of them
not once throughout several years
now I can't find a single tear
for what used to be my best friends

They made their BEDS and so they die
they managed to shorten their lives
How many others did they spread AIDS?
For all their victims - I shall cry

netswan



 Teresa King
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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 2000-05-07 12:18 PM


Such powerful words you have spoken here. Yet their victims are somewhat responsible as well.

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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2 posted 2000-05-07 12:19 PM


really??? wow... geesh... what an eye opener... this is... harsh reality... and well written, netswan... if this is based on real life, then... all i can say is... you've done an excellent job portraying what happned... and if it is based on writing for fiction.. then...i would say... you've done  a great job bringing the reader into it...

all in all... it brings truths to light and makes the reader think... good work!

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3 posted 2000-05-07 01:32 AM


Teresa,
After an eye opening talk with you I can see that my first comment is not completely correct. The babies spawned by the people truly are at no fault. Please forgive my ignorance.

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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4 posted 2000-05-07 09:15 AM


Swan, this is very good,and makes so many good points.
The issue of Aids is one of much concern to me,
I have lost several friends to this ugly illness and know others who are positive.
So many times the assumptions as to how they became infected seems to become more important than offering compassion.
And as always in life...the innocent children become the victims of adults mistakes and poor judgement.
For me personally being the mother of 2 teenagers...the most frightening issue of this is the numbers of teens and college age young adults that are constantly growing as  the newly infected population...though they have been inundated with education on this and have alternatives readily availble that past generations did not...
the message and lessons seem to be...
"lost in the moment"
So many questions...so much pain...
well I ve gone on long enough...
once again, as in previous poems about important reality issues...
this one shows you have your "finger on the pulse" and are trying to offer solutions.
thank you for offering a place to make us think and be aware.
later-swan-gator
jan

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5 posted 2000-05-07 10:45 AM


Very powerful words, Netswan. A disease that may end our existence on Earth. Thank you for sharing with us this poem.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

netswan
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6 posted 2000-05-07 05:17 PM


Thank you -- Jeff - Pandora, JM and ESP -yes, this is strong subject.
Jeff --no need to apologize. -- It is
not just babies born with AIDS it is
married couples where one is cheating
and the other doesn't suspect -- that
person becomes an innocent victim -- It is
teens who take chances at an age where
they feel invincible --

AIDS is dangerous and it is spreading
FAST  The big issues are -- not only educating the children -- but in educating the parents of the teens --

Our town hands out Free condoms ---
Some parents get angry saying it is giving
mixed messages (here is a condom - but
wait 'til you are married)  STILL -- I would
rather give a mixed message then have these
young kids dead.

One decision on a teens part to drink
a beer can change their whole mental state.

JM - I am sorry about your friends that you
have lost to this deadly disease.

I have three sons the youngest is 17 - My sons have been taught about these things ---and it has been one of my biggest nightmares worrying about AIDS -- you can't believe the teens in this town

CONVERSATION with a 15 year old --"I have
only had sex with 12 boys" -----Makes
you want to cry.

And worse, their mother's think these
girls are totally innocent of these
activities --- I think that is really
sad.


Thanks for the comments -- all of you.

netswan

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7 posted 2000-05-07 05:24 PM


Excellent writing...and an important message for all of us to consider lest we all get caught up in thinking we are Cassanova's or butterflies.   James
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8 posted 2000-05-07 05:57 PM


Excellent netswan. . .

Hindsight is always 20/20 isn't it?  Call it Fate, Karma, you get what you pay for. . . and in this case, you got to see what happened. . . you were spared that agony and disease, you built for yourself a better life. . . it didn't seem like it then, but you do know now don't you?  And for that, I am glad. . .

A lesson to all of us. . .just because it seems bad now. . .doesn't mean that it's going to be this way all time. . . what's that line?  "Just beacuse He may not answer doesn't mean He don't care. . . some of God's greatest gifts are Unanswered Prayers. . ."

Bravo to you my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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