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Jone
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 41


0 posted 2000-05-06 10:12 PM


Life is a perpetual land,
Of hate, and sadness.
Life exists,
To make you hate.

You live to love,
but you are a fool.
For there is nothing in this world,
That's meant for you.

You are made,
To be alone.
You exist,
For misery alone.

You are here,
For others to use.
You cannot see,
Because you are abused.

You are not hit,
and you are not bruised.
But you are scared,
Where you shall never heal.

They make you weak,
Day in and out.
They make you sad,
Because you are without.

They are many,
You are one.
They have each other,
You have no one.

There is no point,
In trying again.
For it is pointless,
and useless.
You should just die.

© Copyright 2000 Jone - All Rights Reserved
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
1 posted 2000-05-06 10:47 PM



Jone* This is very powerful and sad.  But in reading I feel a deep understanding and familiar surroundings  

They are many,
You are one.
They have each other,
You have no one.


This stanza........was the story of my life.
If you ever need someone to listen....my e-mail and ICQ # are listed.  
The writing exquisite, the pain showing through every line.  A very powerful piece.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


Kellsue
Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210
Waukesha, WI USA
2 posted 2000-05-06 10:50 PM


There is a lot of hurt expressed in this poem.  You did a very good job of expressing the hurtful and hopeless feelings.

~Kelly


 Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens

We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill

Dawn Eclipse
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula
3 posted 2000-05-06 11:10 PM


Jone~~

That was a very good, but depressing piece.  I've visited that lonely place, but I do know that it does get better.  Hope you feel better.



 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

Twilight Tearstains
New Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 8

4 posted 2000-05-07 12:43 PM


So painful and heartwrenching.  I too have felt like this many times.  Exellent work!  

 ~We are only truly lost when we've lost ourselves~

netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
5 posted 2000-05-07 02:07 AM


Powerful Jone -- such anquish and anger.
I hope all is well -- if not, please email
me --
We have all had those horrid lonely feelings,
and somehow someway we make it through.
If it is just from your imagination.
Darn good job!

netswan

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Posts 2367
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6 posted 2000-05-07 02:09 AM


No doubt....I'm with netswan on this one.

Darn good job

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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