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early silence

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bsquirrel
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0 posted 05-06-2000 12:56 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

When morning comes laced with birds,
The air conditioner murmuring high,
The silence can be felt against your skin
Like early morning sex
When you feel the most alone and afraid.

You can put it on a plate, cut it with a knife,
And eat its insides, as the knife and your fork
Echo their metallic chatter, quietly dissipate.

You can launch a tirade with music,
But the notes just sink into its stomach,
Sweeten the air, but don't purify it.

You can pray to the vision of an early morning god
In a simply lost version of salvation. After all,
You're tired, aren't you? Things don't make sense till later.

Even when phones from the other side of the wall ring,
The most you can do is huddle in bed, the sheet
Too light and easily kicked away to remind you of anything comforting.

I don't know what to say, what you could possibly do
To make that quiet go away.

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 05-06-2000 01:12 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

The silence can be felt against your skin
Like early morning sex
When you feel the most alone and afraid.
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You can launch a tirade with music,
But the notes just sink into its stomach,
Sweeten the air, but don't purify it.

You can pray to the vision of an early morning god
In a simply lost version of salvation. After all,
You're tired, aren't you? Things don't make sense till later.

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I don't know what to say, what you could possibly do
To make that quiet go away.
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BSQ...i almost cant respond to this...
it effects me so deeply...
this is the reason I read poetry...
this is the reason I read yours...
when you write like this...
thank you for sharing this one.
i needed it today more than one could know.
know it will be read over and over...
and felt each time.
the last two lines take my breath...
take care poetice soul...
jm/bs


 It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
How one move just puts me by myself
There you go just trusting someone else
Now I know I put us both through hell ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me
And I'm not sayin
We ever had the right to hold on
I just didn't wanna let you get away from me.
~MB20~Leave


Martie
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2 posted 05-06-2000 01:17 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is so well done...you have been able to capture a feeling so well without ever saying what it is....
Janet Marie
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3 posted 05-06-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

told ya Id be back...*smile*
it's better each read...
butterlfy slippers loves this one  
later cool poet friend,
jm
pandora
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4 posted 05-07-2000 12:23 AM       View Profile for pandora   Email pandora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pandora

ummm.. wow.. what's your phone number?

i mean.. you sure can write something, y'know? loved it!!
bsquirrel
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5 posted 05-07-2000 12:51 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

JM,
Glad you liked. I was on a roll this morning (with lots of butter).

Martie,
Thank you. I appreciate your reply.

pandora,
What's my phone number? A sequence of key presses on a phone pad. When properly ended, you either hear my voice or the answering machine. Glad you enjoyed.

Mike
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6 posted 05-07-2000 01:17 AM       View Profile for pandora   Email pandora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pandora

geesh.. talk about incognito... LOL...

i was just trying to say i liked your style.  
-pan
 
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