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Tread Upon Lonliness

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devina
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0 posted 05-06-2000 02:19 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for devina



Subliminal shards of humanity, border-line insanity-
Tell me how does thou flower grow?
Sentimental caresses, meant purely for distress-
Show me how to hide my soul…

Seasonal awakening, by truths bitter sting-
Love me with sheltered heart,
Sing your praises, above God’s loving grace’s-
Then grin as your form departs…

Generously squeeze, life’s hurried disease-
Reluctantly from my own lips-
Seethe in your sorrow, into lonely tomorrow-
As you want nothing more than my kiss…

Succumb to your lies, in yourself ye despise-
For you tread the path that you lay,
Filter love’s sting, tis what your heart brings-
Do not falter upon Fate’s dismay…

Return to your solitaire, only beware-
You shall bleed this heart no more,
Live upon bliss, of lust and kiss-
As loneliness seeps to the core…




 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

© Copyright 2000 Tanya Nicole Bustamante - All Rights Reserved
wayoutwalt
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1 posted 05-06-2000 02:24 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

thanx for rubbin in the fact that my solitaire on the puter is broken..nonono yuh i love the poem yuh!  
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2 posted 05-06-2000 03:26 AM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

WOW!   I wish I could use the type of wording you do here as effectively.
Enjoyed it. Thanks for the wonderful reading.


 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"
tracie66
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3 posted 05-06-2000 04:59 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Another fine one from you Devina, thanks for sharing this with us  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 05-06-2000 05:02 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Another excellent piece from you, Devina, as I am growing to expect...

Regards,
Sudhir

 In any moment of decision,
The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt
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5 posted 05-06-2000 05:30 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Lovely and with a bit of ever-so-gentle sting...true words, 'sis', and I shall keep them in mind---think I too am guilty of this crime...LTY...
Michael
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6 posted 05-06-2000 07:21 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Stinging words D.  'Tis true - nothing leaves a more hollow feeling than empty loving... but oh how many people settle for that...


Michael
Janet Marie
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7 posted 05-06-2000 09:06 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"Show me how to hide my soul…"

when you figure this one out...
please let me know...

this is excellent devina,
your word choices are perfect...
and the pain is all too well expressed.
*sigh*(of resignation)...
wish we didnt know this kind inspiration quite so well...
I know, you know...*smile*
take care poet-girl.
jm
Danny Holloway
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8 posted 05-06-2000 10:52 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

you've caught me reading this one~~~~
nice writing "d"

 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Sven
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9 posted 05-06-2000 12:15 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Very powerful Devina,
                     I can still feel the sting from the last verse. . .

"Return to your solitaire, only beware-
You shall bleed this heart no more,
Live upon bliss, of lust and kiss-
As loneliness seeps to the core…"

And yes, a lot of people do settle for this, but I can see that you are not going to be one of them. . .

Great poem!

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Marge Tindal
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10 posted 05-06-2000 12:34 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Devina~

'You shall bleed this heart no more'

Yes !  Positively POSITIVE !
You are writing some great poetry,
dear poetess !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



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CocoBaci
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11 posted 05-06-2000 04:42 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

This piece of your work is truly one that has touched many hearts.
Bravo 'D' for such excellence!
CocoBaci
devina
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12 posted 05-07-2000 09:53 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Walt- ha ha ha m'dear...you need to get your butt off the computer...and spend some time with your wife!!! *big grin* Thanks hun...

Temptress- I'm glad you enjoyed m'dear...unfortunantly the hurt accompanies the words..

tracie- thank you for that!!

Sudhir- I'm honored to know you have high expectations hun...thank you!!

serenity- We must learn to never just settle...work on it with me??? Love ya sis!!!

Michael- tis true dear...but only for so long...

Janet- I'm only sad that you know as well as I know!! Thanks girl!!

Danny- caught you in the cookie jar, eh? LOL It's ok...it's nice to hear from you!!

Sven- you already know me too well m'friend!!

Marge- poetess huh?? What happened to "lil D"?? *sigh* guess we all have to have a change for the better!!! Love ya!!

CocoBaci- I thank you...if I can be a help anyone, I hope so!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Alwye
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13 posted 05-07-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Powerful and darkly sad words, Devina.  Your talent has left me breathless..

 *Krista Knutson*

"Lonliness is the human condition."
*Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"*
Jeffrey Carter
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14 posted 05-07-2000 10:28 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Great poem D. So sad yet so true

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

JamesMichael
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15 posted 05-07-2000 10:28 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Devina this is simply divine.  I enjoyed reading this to the max.... James
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16 posted 05-07-2000 11:18 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

--Devina

you write with such sadness in this piece from a place that i know came deep within. as with all your work that i have read, you leave me pondering deep in thought afterwards. i read this piece three times...and each time noticed something i didn't before. i was once told that is the sing of excellent..i think they were right   at any rate, i enjoyed this very much. take care m'friend.

amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
devina
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17 posted 05-08-2000 10:49 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Alwye- breathe sweetie...tis just the sound of a broken heart.. thank you!!

Jeffrey- My thanks to you hun...

James- I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece of me m'friend!!

Amy- I'm amazed at how you read into me and my poetry...you've brought me a smile with your compliments sweetie, and I thank you for that!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

RSEvans
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18 posted 05-08-2000 11:02 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

All passion and heat, a candles flame, which burns too quickly and is gone, leaving a bitter wick....
Beautiful D.
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