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Tread Upon Lonliness
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Tread Upon Lonliness |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Subliminal shards of humanity, border-line insanity- Tell me how does thou flower grow? Sentimental caresses, meant purely for distress- Show me how to hide my soul… Seasonal awakening, by truths bitter sting- Love me with sheltered heart, Sing your praises, above God’s loving grace’s- Then grin as your form departs… Generously squeeze, life’s hurried disease- Reluctantly from my own lips- Seethe in your sorrow, into lonely tomorrow- As you want nothing more than my kiss… Succumb to your lies, in yourself ye despise- For you tread the path that you lay, Filter love’s sting, tis what your heart brings- Do not falter upon Fate’s dismay… Return to your solitaire, only beware- You shall bleed this heart no more, Live upon bliss, of lust and kiss- As loneliness seeps to the core… Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx for rubbin in the fact that my solitaire on the puter is broken..nonono yuh i love the poem yuh!  |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
WOW! I wish I could use the type of wording you do here as effectively. Enjoyed it. Thanks for the wonderful reading. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Another fine one from you Devina, thanks for sharing this with us Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Another excellent piece from you, Devina, as I am growing to expect... Regards, Sudhir In any moment of decision, The best thing you can do is the right thing, The next-best thing is the wrong thing, And the worst thing you can do is nothing. - Theodore Roosevelt |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Lovely and with a bit of ever-so-gentle sting...true words, 'sis', and I shall keep them in mind---think I too am guilty of this crime...LTY... |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Stinging words D. 'Tis true - nothing leaves a more hollow feeling than empty loving... but oh how many people settle for that... Michael |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"Show me how to hide my soul…" when you figure this one out... please let me know... this is excellent devina, your word choices are perfect... and the pain is all too well expressed. *sigh*(of resignation)... wish we didnt know this kind inspiration quite so well... I know, you know...*smile* take care poet-girl. jm |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
you've caught me reading this one~~~~ nice writing "d" A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Very powerful Devina, I can still feel the sting from the last verse. . . "Return to your solitaire, only beware- You shall bleed this heart no more, Live upon bliss, of lust and kiss- As loneliness seeps to the core…" And yes, a lot of people do settle for this, but I can see that you are not going to be one of them. . . Great poem! ------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Devina~ 'You shall bleed this heart no more' Yes ! Positively POSITIVE ! You are writing some great poetry, dear poetess ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This piece of your work is truly one that has touched many hearts. Bravo 'D' for such excellence! CocoBaci |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Walt- ha ha ha m'dear...you need to get your butt off the computer...and spend some time with your wife!!! *big grin* Thanks hun... Temptress- I'm glad you enjoyed m'dear...unfortunantly the hurt accompanies the words..  tracie- thank you for that!! Sudhir- I'm honored to know you have high expectations hun...thank you!! serenity- We must learn to never just settle...work on it with me???  Love ya sis!!!Michael- tis true dear...but only for so long... Janet- I'm only sad that you know as well as I know!! Thanks girl!!Danny- caught you in the cookie jar, eh? LOL It's ok...it's nice to hear from you!! Sven- you already know me too well m'friend!! Marge- poetess huh?? What happened to "lil D"?? *sigh* guess we all have to have a change for the better!!! Love ya!! CocoBaci- I thank you...if I can be a help anyone, I hope so!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Powerful and darkly sad words, Devina. Your talent has left me breathless.. *Krista Knutson* "Lonliness is the human condition." *Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"* |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Great poem D. So sad yet so true All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Devina this is simply divine. I enjoyed reading this to the max.... James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
--Devina you write with such sadness in this piece from a place that i know came deep within. as with all your work that i have read, you leave me pondering deep in thought afterwards. i read this piece three times...and each time noticed something i didn't before. i was once told that is the sing of excellent..i think they were right at any rate, i enjoyed this very much. take care m'friend.amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Alwye- breathe sweetie...tis just the sound of a broken heart.. thank you!!Jeffrey- My thanks to you hun... James- I'm glad you enjoyed this little piece of me m'friend!! Amy- I'm amazed at how you read into me and my poetry...you've brought me a smile with your compliments sweetie, and I thank you for that!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
All passion and heat, a candles flame, which burns too quickly and is gone, leaving a bitter wick.... Beautiful D. |
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