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Sal Besada
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Sal Besada |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Sal Besada Flamingo Guitar caught my ear, sitting alone, Baja bar. Me, my margarita, your fingers fluttering, nylon strings retracting. Licking salted rim, watching you watch lime squeezing, brown eyes meeting. Moonlight café, my chocolat caliente, micrófono kissed, my lips substitute, bay lapping, splashing. Hot breeze, my shoulder turning towards water, the set is over, we lay upon wet sand, your land. © Cinco de Mayo 2000 CM Bailey |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne--I love this poem---what a wonderful scene you have painted, the atmosphere is so real and seductive...reminds me of someplace I have been.... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful! It also sounds very calming. Definetely sounds like a nice time.  Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Hey look who's getting all romantic and sensual now. Very good, more from the womans perspective on desire, I'll have to take notes...... I could use it up here as the summer approaches. Thanks for the view again always so vivid are these. Parker |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ This is just scrumptious ! You bring the scene to life with your portrayal ... softly and sensually taking us there. Exquisite ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Martie, thank you. Was thinking of a place in Mexico called San Jose del Cabo. Thank you, Temptress. Yes, Park, but there's one thing. It's our (women's) perogative to change our minds and our perspectives! Thank you, Marge! I've caught major flack on this one since I used the word "Flamingo" instead of "Flamengo" in the first line, a play on words, but it upset some folks. Oh well. Stirring up the you-know-what as usual. Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Corinne! So very lovely! Denise |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I needed to trip to the Moonlight café, Hot breeze is called for, so back up for another dance. Parker |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Sounds like a lover's retreat....so sweet, ~~nice writing~~ love those margarita's! |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
beautifully sweet and salty. keep stirring, Corinne Rick |
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