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~In The Distance~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~In The Distance~ There is a distance in the space between us... now feeling chained by what use to set us free, doubt and discontent only add to the misery... and I can't see you anymore...thru the distance. There are lies in the space between us, trust and faith have passed us by... to the point we cant even look each other in the eye. I don't believe in love anymore...its off somewhere in the distance. There is anger in the space between us, compromise has lost its grace, resentment grows and takes its place. There is a rage deep inside of me...from its hold...I need to find distance. There is pain in the space between us, old wounds and old scars...forever bleed, did we mistake love for an aching need. I need release from this agony, healing is somewhere...in the distance. There is loss in the space between us, patience and passion lost to living a lie, hearts break, dreams fade, then die. There has already been so much taken, my past follows me ... into the distance. There is an emptiness in the space between us, in my heart there's just vacancy ... loneliness keeps me company, with nothing left to hold us here... its safe to say ... we wont make the distance. There is silence in the space between us, the words to save this just cant be found... listen close...as this love leaves...it makes no sound... and I can hear someone else calling to me...off in the distance. Janet Marie **repost from Dark Passions |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Janet Marie - this is exquisite writing - I loved every line of it - a very sad poem, but still very true - it happens, sometimes love just leaves us so quietly, we are amazed to learn it has gone.....beautifully expressed. Roniece |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
JM, your words have once again touched me deeply. I'm wiping away a tear or two...coming to such a realization, wether it be in love, in friendship, or another aspect of life, is devastating...deeply heartwrenching are your words, but I enjoyed it greatly. *Krista Knutson* "Lonliness is the human condition." *Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"* |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"...as this love leaves...it makes no sound..." Oh Janet, that line just took my breath away. Love tends to do that...it just slips away - silently, and seemingly overnight. *sigh* This really makes me sad, and I can surely relate to the pain you feel. This is the feeling that renders me helpless and afraid of love. You shared it to a "T". (sniff) "Laugh and the world laughs with you..." cry, and you're all alone. My version - pFF |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Janet, this was one of my favorites from Dark Passions. When I read this I can't help but view that million mile distance that usually spans across the living room floor for most of us... *Sigh* - wishing you smiles... Michael |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janet Marie~ Yes in the distance is a far off space In the distance a loving face In the distance arms await In the distance is your fate In the distance souls rectifying In the distance hearts undying An undying love awaits you in the distance A love you'll take with no resistance Because this love you know will be true This love in the distance does await you Sweet Janet I hope this is true, thinking of you Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Beautiful piece of writing and so melancholy...you capture the way love can slip so gently and quietly away wonderfully. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet you have written so eloquently about the misfortunes of love and the beginning of a new love...I hope and pray that love will call your name...and you will once again feel the softness and tenderness of love and the beauty of love. James |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully written Janet Marie. When the lines of communication become distant, it is so very difficult to breach the gap and find the closeness we once had. You've captured this well in this verse. /Kit |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~Here's lookin at you BEG, from a distance~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~BEH~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, I really love this piece. Its sad but hopeful. I like that in a poem, balance, a reflection of a persons strenght in life. I too often see, love in the distance, though I know it is a dream, its a sweet dream.... so here' to dreaming with you my sweet friend. Parker |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
you have expressed your feelings so well in this poem... absolutely love this line..."listen close...as this love leaves...it makes no sound..." |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi Janet! I know it very well. Time and space are two major things rather I'd say obstacles that can keep lovers at the bay sometimes, confusion and mistrust all around. To sustain a love, never a lie or a thought which creates mistrust or anguish should arise. Afterall why you should lie.Is it to create a big impression of yourself or a false pride. Believe me, it just sows seeds of discontentment and pain which you can never mete out.I belive our love can can take its old course but I'm not sure whether I've caused damage beyond repair. I lied just once and it lead to the ruins from which I may never recover. If you find love just carry on with it. Do not let yourself be in pain. If the new love can bring life in you just take it dear and enjoy a happy and funfilled life. Sincerely A_L |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh, your writing brings to mind Such feelings within the heart And once upon a times .. I enjoyed every word! |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
A very sad, heartbreaking poem, but one that glimmers from a ray of hope. A mystery - why love fades away. You captured it. Lori |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Roniece... thank you so much for the"exquisite" and the understanding (love your icon choice BTW)  Krista... that I can effect you with my words is such a compliment... thank you for this,truly. Gen... always like taking your breath away *smile* I know you relate,I try hard not to let it make me afraid to give again...but i understand the whys of what you are saying here. TY. M, ... I know you relate all to well to this one, so many times your poems speak of this, and you are exactly right... sometimes the greatest distance to overcome-- can be between 2 wedding bands-- laying side by side, TY for the understanding. Tracie... THANK YOU for the beautiful hope filled poem... NOTHING touches me more than the gift of a poem...so very sweet of you. Lizzie... thank you for the understanding and compliments..and I love your signature line. sweetbabyjames... I know you relate to this all too well... TY for such sweet hope for me... right back at ya my kind friend. Kit... thank you for the lovely compliment, yes it is always about communication and sharing. Danny ... (BEH)looking back at you too...*smile* TY for always reading, and understanding. Parker... yes, we must always hold on to our hopes and dreams...sometimes they are closer than we know thank you my sweet poet friend. Martie...TY...that was my fav line too... seems to hit home for many of us...thanks. Amazon L...HI TO YOU TOO!! you understand well i see, thank you for the wisdom, we all learn from each other. Coco and Lori...thank you both so much and WELCOME to Passions...its so nice to meet you. THANKS!! jm |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Janet Marie! This says it all about a dying relationship. Very sad when that happens. Denise |
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