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~In The Distance~

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Janet Marie
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0 posted 05-05-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

~In The Distance~

There is a distance in the space between us...
now feeling chained by what use to set us free,
doubt and discontent only add to the misery...
and I can't see you anymore...thru the distance.

There are lies in the space between us,
trust and faith have passed us by...
to the point we cant even look each other in the eye.
I don't believe in love anymore...its off somewhere in the distance.

There is anger in the space between us,
compromise has lost its grace,
resentment grows and takes its place.
There is a rage deep inside of me...from its hold...I need to find distance.

There is pain in the space between us,
old wounds and old scars...forever bleed,
did we mistake love for an aching need.
I need release from this agony, healing is somewhere...in the distance.

There is loss in the space between us,
patience and passion lost to living a lie,
hearts break, dreams fade, then die.
There has already been so much taken,
my past follows me ... into the distance.

There is an emptiness in the space between us,
in my heart there's just vacancy ...
loneliness keeps me company,
with nothing left to hold us here...
its safe to say ... we wont make the distance.

There is silence in the space between us,
the words to save this just cant be found...
listen close...as this love leaves...it makes no sound...
and I can hear someone else calling to me...off in the distance.

Janet Marie

**repost from Dark Passions
© Copyright 2000 Janet Marie - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 05-05-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Janet Marie - this is exquisite writing - I loved every line of it - a very sad poem, but still very true - it happens, sometimes love just leaves us so quietly, we are amazed to learn it has gone.....beautifully expressed.

Roniece
Alwye
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In the space between moments


2 posted 05-05-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

JM, your words have once again touched me deeply.  I'm wiping away a tear or two...coming to such a realization, wether it be in love, in friendship, or another aspect of life, is devastating...deeply heartwrenching are your words, but I enjoyed it greatly.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Lonliness is the human condition."
*Mark Twain, in the book "The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn"*
poetFemmeFatale
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3 posted 05-06-2000 01:39 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

"...as this love leaves...it makes no sound..."  Oh Janet, that line just took my breath away.  Love tends to do that...it just slips away - silently, and seemingly overnight.  *sigh*  This really makes me sad, and I can surely relate to the pain you feel.  This is the feeling that renders me helpless and afraid of love.  You shared it to a "T".  (sniff)

 "Laugh and the world laughs with you..." cry, and you're all alone. My version - pFF


Michael
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4 posted 05-06-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Janet, this was one of my favorites from Dark Passions.  When I read this I can't help but view that million mile distance that usually spans across the living room floor for most of us...  *Sigh* - wishing you smiles...


Michael
tracie66
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5 posted 05-06-2000 05:06 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Janet Marie~

Yes in the distance is a far off space
In the distance a loving face

In the distance arms await
In the distance is your fate

In the distance souls rectifying
In the distance hearts undying

An undying love awaits you in the distance
A love you'll take with no resistance

Because this love you know will be true
This love in the distance does await you

Sweet Janet I hope this is true, thinking of you Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....


6 posted 05-06-2000 06:17 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Beautiful piece of writing and so melancholy...you capture the way love can slip so gently and quietly away wonderfully.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
JamesMichael
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7 posted 05-06-2000 07:44 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Janet you have written so eloquently about the misfortunes of love and the beginning of a new love...I hope and pray that love will call your name...and you will once again feel the softness and tenderness of love and the beauty of love.    James
Kit McCallum
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8 posted 05-06-2000 08:27 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Beautifully written Janet Marie. When the lines of communication become distant, it is so very difficult to breach the gap and find the closeness we once had.  You've captured this well in this verse.

/Kit
Danny Holloway
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9 posted 05-06-2000 10:41 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

~~Here's lookin at you BEG, from a distance~~

  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~BEH~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

Parker
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10 posted 05-06-2000 11:55 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Janet, I really love this piece. Its sad but hopeful. I like that in a poem, balance, a reflection of a persons strenght in life.
I too often see, love in the distance, though I know it is a dream, its a sweet dream.... so here' to dreaming with you my sweet friend.

Parker
Martie
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11 posted 05-06-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

you have expressed your feelings so well in this poem...

absolutely love this line..."listen close...as this love leaves...it makes no sound..."


amazon_lover
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12 posted 05-06-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for amazon_lover   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amazon_lover

Hi Janet!
I know it very well. Time and space are two  major things rather I'd say obstacles that can keep lovers at the bay sometimes, confusion and mistrust all around. To sustain a love, never a lie or a thought which creates mistrust or anguish should arise. Afterall why you should lie.Is it to create a big impression of yourself or a false pride. Believe me, it just sows seeds of discontentment and pain which you can never mete out.I belive our love can can take its old course but I'm not sure whether I've caused damage beyond repair. I lied just once and it lead to the ruins from which I may never recover.
If you find love just carry on with it. Do not let yourself be in pain. If the new love can bring life in you just take it dear and enjoy a happy and funfilled life.

Sincerely
A_L
CocoBaci
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13 posted 05-06-2000 06:15 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Oh, your writing brings to mind
Such feelings within the heart
And once upon a times ..
I enjoyed every word!
lorilockheart
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14 posted 05-06-2000 06:21 PM       View Profile for lorilockheart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lorilockheart

A very sad, heartbreaking poem, but one that glimmers from a ray of hope. A mystery - why love fades away.  You captured it.

Lori
Janet Marie
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15 posted 05-06-2000 09:10 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Roniece... thank you so much for the"exquisite" and the understanding
(love your icon choice BTW)

Krista... that I can effect you with my words is such a compliment...
thank you for this,truly.

Gen... always like taking your breath away *smile* I know you relate,I try hard not to let it make me afraid to give again...but i understand the whys of what you are saying here. TY.  

M, ... I know you relate all to well to this one, so many times your poems speak of this, and you are exactly right...
sometimes the greatest distance to overcome-- can be between 2 wedding bands-- laying side by side,
TY for the understanding.

Tracie... THANK YOU for the beautiful hope filled poem...
NOTHING touches me more than the gift of a poem...so very sweet of you.

Lizzie... thank you for the understanding and compliments..and I love your signature line.  

sweetbabyjames... I know you relate to this all too well...
TY for such sweet hope for me...
right back at ya my kind friend.

Kit... thank you for the lovely compliment,
yes it is always about communication and sharing.

Danny ... (BEH)looking back at you too...*smile*
TY for always reading, and understanding.

Parker... yes, we must always hold on to our hopes and dreams...sometimes they are closer than we know
thank you my sweet poet friend.

Martie...TY...that was my fav line too...
seems to hit home for many of us...thanks.

Amazon L...HI TO YOU TOO!!  
you understand well i see, thank you for the wisdom, we all learn from each other.

Coco and Lori...thank you both so much and
WELCOME to Passions...its so nice to meet you.

THANKS!!
jm


Denise
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16 posted 05-06-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent poem, Janet Marie! This says it all about a dying relationship. Very sad when that happens.

Denise
 
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