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0 posted 05-05-2000 05:57 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael


I feel it swelling within me
filling my lungs
with love
with life

Aspiration soaring
no boundaries
no chains
unto fullness
of being


How can it be
I can take no more in?
This life I so love,
this vigor endlessly
encompassing me
How can I be so limited
in my indulgence
so fragile
in my expectation

Fret not
I shall cling
to that which is mine.
I shall be content
in my portion
not mingling with greed

But no,
even now I feel it
starting to slip away,
bleeding me
of all gifts
once presented me


The dream is grounded
hope belied
ambition donning
the shackles of
my own creation
waning now
in memory ever

~ deflated ~

Michael Anderson

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 05-05-2000).]
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1 posted 05-05-2000 07:24 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

Correct me if I'm wrong,
But I feel a sense of confusion and emotions swirling
out of control.
A glimps of happiness, then feeling unsure to
feeling empty.
Well, this is what I have interpreted here, and I'm known to
misinterpret much of the time.
In anycase Michael, Well done...


[This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-05-2000).]
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2 posted 05-05-2000 07:56 PM       View Profile for Dawn Eclipse   Email Dawn Eclipse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dawn Eclipse

That was a beautiful poem, but somewhat sad.  I enjoyed it very much.  

 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*
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3 posted 05-05-2000 08:55 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

wow..this caught me off guard...
its so rare you dont rhyme...
I see your trying some new styles..
this one reminds me of a Chris poem in its presentation. yes? no?  
very cool M,(even if ya did crash)*smile*
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4 posted 05-05-2000 10:53 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Ahh my dear friend. You are doing the pulling yourself back up thing. Once we think we might have some ground beneath us again it slips away. Don't worry dear heart, it will come. Each time you inflate you rise higher and more securely. Don't be afraid to let your friends support you. ((hug))

Well written as always.  

 When you are old and grey and full of sleep,
And nodding by the fire, take down this book,
And slowly read, and dream of the soft look
Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep;

How many loved your moments of glad grace,
And loved your beauty with love false or true,
But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you,
And loved the sorrows of your changing face...

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5 posted 05-06-2000 12:00 AM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear


Like Janet Marie points out, this seems to be a different style for you.  You must be gifted to be able to write so differently and so well.  I especially liked the lines... 'so fragile in my expectation.'  I think I've been guilty of that before.

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6 posted 05-06-2000 05:02 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky


Touching, very touching. You are definitely blessed with soul. Heart felt my friend. Your writing is like the express way, your always on a curve. Nicely done. I love "donning"...


 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name.  (Michelle A. Bartley)

[This message has been edited by lucky (edited 05-06-2000).]
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7 posted 05-06-2000 05:34 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I can relate well to the angst here--but please--no CRASH--I've had enuff of that for one sometime today...
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Floating gently on a cloud....

8 posted 05-06-2000 06:06 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

A wonderful piece of writing here, Michael....I am sure many can relate to this.

Love and hugs,

 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
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9 posted 05-06-2000 07:42 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is lightly done, has an open quality to it that I've not seen in your other work. I like it a lot (surprise?)....I hope you find that dream you search the meantime your poetry touches so many who are in the same place as you...that's a good thing.  
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10 posted 05-06-2000 08:17 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I've seen a few different styles in your writing Michael .. each type I have enjoyed tremendously. This is a wonderful verse full of vivid emotions ...

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11 posted 05-06-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Only you could manage to "crash" with such style m'dear.. Beautiful free verse too btw...

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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State of constant confusion!

12 posted 05-06-2000 07:26 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter


 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
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13 posted 05-06-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Michael -----Your poems have been catching
my eye - since I have joined.

This is good -- though I have come to expect
no less from you --- LIKE this style
It is cool.

YOU will get those feet on the ground.
it is not too bad to take two steps forward
and only slip back one -- in that way -
you will get ahead ----one day you will
surprise yourself and see you are going
three feet forward and sliding back only
one -------)  Chin up Michael.
Life throws us loops to make us grow
up good and strong.

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14 posted 05-06-2000 08:02 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Great poem and love the format....very creative.  Sadness, especially at the end.  Great writing!!

 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
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15 posted 05-07-2000 02:43 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Sheri, you pretty much nailed it.  It's from a feeling of soaring - feeling unconquerable - to a complete crash and feeling of despair I tried to relate here... well done on the analysis too...LOL  

Dawn Eclipse, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.

Janet, how dare you compare me with that scoundrel... well, I've never been so complimented in my life...  

Marilyn, hard to reinflate with holes in the lungs... but I try.  

Sue, I think we are all guilty of that at one point or another...

Lucky, sometimes I think I'm not only runnin' the curve but grinding the rails as well... Glad you enjoyed my friend.

serenity....                  How's that?

Lizzie, I hope so... that is why I write.

PdV, thank you so much - truly was "experimental" for me.  Glad you enjoyed.

Kit - thank you so much.

Devina, me thinks I had a little frost on the wings...  with a little sun and warmth, who knows - maybe I'll be flying again soon...  

Jeffrey, ????...LOL

netswan, Giving it my best shot...TY

Lone Wolf,Sadness becomes me at times...LOL  So glad you enjoyed...  

Thank you all for the kind replies.


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