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The Lines in Between

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Sunshine
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The Lines in Between

Softly to the bed sheets it fell
the letter edged with words from hell

“...and the salt of you upon my tongue
took me back
to the sweetness of our youth...”

to him she had given all
to lust he had followed the call.

“…but I cannot love you anymore,
though know you
in my heart will always stay…”

Now aged and spent in fading light
she glared back into the night
the hating spittle on her tongue
the aching pain to again be young…

“…you will be all right,
and you will find another,
love will come back to you…”

To know that in the hour past
he had loved her for the last,
her unknowing, but giving in trust,
now to memory the act would rust.

“...and the salt of you upon my tongue
took me back
to the sweetness of our youth...”

…so he took his age and
with lack of wisdom great
left the woman by his side
to play with new soul mate…

Softly to the bed sheets it fell
the letter edged with words from hell.

5 May, 2000
©KRJ



 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-05-2000 05:30 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is fabulous, Sunshine, sad yet beautifully done! Gee, you're on a roll girl!!  

Denise
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2 posted 05-05-2000 05:38 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

rollin' rollin' rollin',,,keep those doggies moving....yahoo!  Thanks, Denise!
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3 posted 05-05-2000 07:59 PM       View Profile for Dawn Eclipse   Email Dawn Eclipse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dawn Eclipse

That was a very vivid poem!  I love description.  I enjoyed this one very much.  

 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*
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4 posted 05-05-2000 08:08 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Sun, this is amazing...I got a chill reading this...it aches with longing and love lost...
the letter read thru out the poem is such a perfect touch...very creative.
those first and last two lines...are perfect...they are killer!!


 ~as always, Take Care,JM~
--------------
I know it's been a long road
To get these towns behind me and I
Will gladly reap what we may sow--
I am there for you ...
and you're there for me ...
Are you waiting for
Heart in hand
Woman and man
See me where I stand I am
Heart
Heart in hand
~vertical horizon~

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5 posted 05-05-2000 11:03 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Sunshine~
You took it and ran with it ...
nicely done, my dear.
~*Marge*~


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Tia
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6 posted 05-05-2000 11:11 PM       View Profile for Tia   Email Tia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tia

that was a beautiful poem.it's very deep,and it comes from inside.very sad though
good job!
Sudhir Iyer
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Vivid as ever, Sunshine...

Strange though it may sound, sadness starts glowing when you depict it in your words...

Regards,
sudhir.


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The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt
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Thank you all...without all of you, I fear my muse would find elsewhere to play...
Nan
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Don't you be taking your muse anywhere - This is absolutely wonderful... Bittersweet, but sooooo very realistic...Nice job, my friend..
ESP
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Wow! Sunshine, your poem has left such a vivid picture in my mind. The hurt and rejection...
Just be keeping your muse close by you, keep posting!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


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11 posted 05-07-2000 11:41 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Nan, don't think for a moment I'll leave this little nest...I've previewed others...this is the best!

Thanks, Lizzie...I will keep your words close to me...
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12 posted 05-07-2000 12:36 PM       View Profile for pandora   Email pandora   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pandora

wonderfully honest... excellent lines in here... i could identify with this one.. LOL.. well, not really funny...

nice job on this, sunshine!
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It's OK to laugh, Pandora...we all have to relate on some level...thanks!
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