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mete out
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0 posted 05-05-2000 08:26 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for mete out


maybe it was a mistake coming here
where everyone supports everyone
(or thats how it would seem)
i feel kind of bitter
maybe i should quit
i'm to young for this place
maybe i should go
all my supporters are in my world anyway
maybe i dont need this place anymore...
if i keep trudging the same hopefilled path day after day
hour after hour
and having the air punched out of me
maybe im too dumb to be here
maybe i should just quit.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


© Copyright 2000 Louise Parsons - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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1 posted 05-05-2000 11:48 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

       your not too dumb
    and you should not quit
   it's only in your thoughts
      that you do not fit

      everyone is unique
      has their own voice
   but whether you stay or go
will be you own conscious choice
~~~~
mete out, whatever you reference to in this piece, stick around, you never know what may happen.....besides, you might miss something!


 A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

infinat3 sadn3ss
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2 posted 05-05-2000 03:31 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

hello,
      i know you didnt email me to make me reply but i thought i would anyway(i didnt know u had put any on for a while cos i havent been on for ages) . i think i know what this poem is about , unfortunately they seem to have taken your words as a metaphor and not as a direct response .
love always

 freedom is the right to say 2 + 2 = 4
Temptress
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3 posted 05-05-2000 03:50 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Wherever you are...You are not dumb...Do not quit, and a path filled with hope should be at least a little peaceful.   Enjoy your life and endeavour to overcome the everyday norm. Just some thoughts thrown out there for you.

 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"
mete out
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4 posted 05-07-2000 06:55 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***Danny,
Thanks for this, your poem cheered me up somewhat.

yeah, i might miss something, but the wait seems too long and too hurtful to stick.

***cabey,
i'll not disclose the meaning of this hre, theres no real point, but  theres an email for you explaining in too much detail whaty this is about!
thanks as ever!   u r a st*r!
***temptress,
why is it so hard to cope with what others just take in their stride?
thanks for your knid words.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


ESP
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5 posted 05-07-2000 10:44 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

People find different ways to deal with every day norm. Some can conceal pain they are feeling better than others. Don't try to take the world on alone, ok? You know you have support here in Passions, allow yourself to use it. Btw, you are not "dumb" as you put it. You are maybe just having trouble coping at the moment. That's not dumb, it's human. I don't know the real meaning behind all this. All I can say is: Somehow you will find the right way for you. Don't be too hard on yourself meanwhile.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
mete out
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6 posted 05-08-2000 11:34 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***esp
thankyou,lizzie, for your kindness.
i guess we can all remember times when we have felt lonely and blue...i just wisj after 4 or 5 years of it would be my fill.

thankyou all for your wonderfully kind comments...you made a difference to this life of mine.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


RSEvans
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7 posted 05-08-2000 11:42 AM       View Profile for RSEvans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RSEvans

I'm not really sure what this is about, but the meter is infuriatingly addictive...I certainly hope it isn't about here.  I've only been here a few short months but I still haven't figured out if its for the support of the other talented folks here or to cleanse my own insides by writing here.  Go figure.
Enola
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8 posted 05-08-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

maybe it was a mistake coming here
where everyone supports everyone
(or thats how it would seem)
i feel kind of bitter
maybe i should quit
i'm to young for this place
maybe i should go
all my supporters are in my world anyway

Doe this mean what I think it does?  Personally I don't think you're dumb, just under-rated.  I thought that BEFORE I knew who you where.  Please don't quit.


 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.
PericolosoAmore
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9 posted 05-08-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for PericolosoAmore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PericolosoAmore

This was a great poem.
It says a lot. I hope you feel good about were you are soon. it sounds like your friends are very helpful, they'll get you through your problems.
P.A.
Denise
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10 posted 05-08-2000 03:40 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

We all need to feel appreciated, loved and supported. That applies to whatever the underlying theme of the poem is. I can relate to this very well. Here's a HUG for you!

Denise
mete out
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11 posted 05-09-2000 05:33 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***RSEvans,
for me its a mixture of releasing the angry, loving and frustrated parts of my soul, recieving gratification for doing so and also reading other peoples work and marvelling and the diverse subjects and talent contained therein.
thanks for this reply!

***debs,
i suspect you do know what this is about..it was following a conversation with you and tom that got my head going..nevermind..if i quit i'd probably feel so empty...
cheers for your support luvvy  

***PA,
thankyou once again for a lovely reply.
since i write this i have had so much kindness directed toward me i think i am working my way thru it..

***denise,
you are right.
we all need some form of encouragement.
thankyou for doing just that.  


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


Kit McCallum
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12 posted 05-09-2000 05:48 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Oh mete out ... whatever it is you elude to is worthy of another try. It is so "easy" to quit, and so "challenging" to continue. Many here told me just recently that the joy is in the challenge. I'm going by that sentiment  today myself. I wish you the best!

/Kit
angelswing
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13 posted 05-09-2000 05:58 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

Lou, if you quit you will make many people unhappy, we all support you, carrying on is difficult I know, but if you can struggle through then the benifits are more rewarding.
L.of.L. Tom .

P.S. You are neigher to dumb or to young, you speack with the wisdom that many older and more experiensed people never gain .


 With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .
mete out
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14 posted 05-11-2000 10:02 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

***kit,
you are right, the glory is in overcoming the challenge.
thankyou for your reply and thoughts.

***tom,
thanks bakes.
without the support of friends like you, i'd have chucked in the towel long ago.
i'll give the struggling a go.

ps...thanks for the post script!



 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


CocoBaci
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15 posted 05-12-2000 10:06 PM       View Profile for CocoBaci   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CocoBaci

Perhaps upon entering this place
One had the pangs of doubt
Yet now that one has been embraced
One cannot live a day without.
Life beholds many a challenge
The effort to try must always exist.

CocoBaci
Butterflies_dont_cry
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16 posted 05-12-2000 10:28 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Sweet Mete*
I'm not sure what brought this poem to where it is, but if you were referring to leaving here....I for one will not LET you leave  , I also read in one of your replies that you wondered why some feel things more deeply than other...that's what makes you the wonderful caring person that you are, and for that you should NEVER apologize for or feel that that is a flaw...that my friend is what makes you so special!  Your poem showed your deep pain and caused me pain that is the result of great writing!!! **Angel Wing Hugs**
mete out
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17 posted 06-05-2000 10:34 AM       View Profile for mete out   Email mete out   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mete out

hee hee.
i slipped thru your oh so caring fingers didnt i?!

not gonna let me go?
it seems you already did.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.


Enola
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18 posted 06-05-2000 10:50 AM       View Profile for Enola   Email Enola   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enola

Well, it appears that the reason your chums haven't noticed is coz we've left too.  I'm bouncing back though, I feel too empty and lifeless to carry on being lazy.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

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