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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Liquid Happiness You drink your happiness out of a glass, As the sun sinks into the west. The bottle, half empty, sits close at hand - By midnight, you'll drink the rest. Your life is a whirlwind, that 'round you blows, And freezes your blood to ice (Three cubes of which now cool your drink: Your liquid paradise.) It isn't that you're worse off than most - You're a common, average man. But, sometimes, life still screams for more, When you're doing all you can. So tonight, for awhile, you'll forget your woes, And sweep them under the rug. You'll quench your spirit's thirst, As you imbibe this legal drug. When Monday morning rolls around, Your troubles you will face. And take your place, among the ranks Of runners in life's race. But, for tonight, you've found a way To minimize your pain. So, o'er the kingdom of liquid joy, This evening, you will reign. © Troy J Hoecherl All Rights Reserved Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Troy, If you only knew how close to home this touches. I have been there and back (sober for almost six years now) I know the true meaning of this piece far too well. Thank you for sharing it. I love you man...lol All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Troy, Very touching poem. I know someone that I care for very, very much who suffers the same problem of trying to lose himself inside the liquid happiness. I felt the power of this one deeply. Thank you for sharing it. ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Troy this is great! Love this poem. It is sad that some cannot be able to drink for a night of fun, or for getting away from reality without it being a life problem. I don't understand why some have to not be able to stop --and when I have a friend that has a drinking problem, I will stand by their side and not drink while they are here. But sometimes, I, too like to nip for a buzz or a little relaxation and am one of the fortunate ones that can do it, too. hugs from netswan (your sister poet) who enjoys you and knows you do not have a drinkin' problem -----) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well, I'm certainly happy to hear from netswan that you don't have this problem - Far too many wonderful people do.... It's quite insidious, to say the least... You've done a very good job portraying it, however... Nicely done, Troy....  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Troy.... Powerful, my friend!! So very true too. SPoken like one who has been there. Sorry I didn't get to read it last night....had to go. Great writing, my friend!!!  Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Zelda Junior Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 43NOVA |
I believe this is the first poem of yours that I have read. I like how you put this to words. Sad when this happens in real life--that "rat race" can be overwhelming. Good work. Z |
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DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
Not only is this well written, but you write about a tough subject with much sensitivity and without any apparent judgment. Very well done. Sue |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Thank you all for your kind comments! You have brightened my day! Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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DestinysCharm Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 90 |
Troy, What a fabulous job you've done on this poem. I can relate to what it says I know many with this problem and it is very sad and frustrating. They don't see it like your poem states, they don't see it at all. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I Think You should submitt This to the AAA organization and let them put it on their brochures and pamlets...maybe even a poster! So many need to hear it!!  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
These lines: "But, sometimes, life still screams for more, When you're doing all you can." really say it all, troy... thanks for the read... enjoyed your fine writing -dp |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Troy! So many people I know have this problem. It is a shame, for they are wonderful people who are drinking most of their lives away. You have described it very well. Denise |
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