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Liquid Happiness

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hsystems
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0 posted 05-05-2000 01:37 AM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Liquid Happiness

You drink your happiness out of a glass,
As the sun sinks into the west.
The bottle, half empty, sits close at hand -
By midnight, you'll drink the rest.

Your life is a whirlwind, that 'round you blows,
And freezes your blood to ice
(Three cubes of which now cool your drink:
Your liquid paradise.)

It isn't that you're worse off than most -
You're a common, average man.
But, sometimes, life still screams for more,
When you're doing all you can.

So tonight, for awhile, you'll forget your woes,
And sweep them under the rug.
You'll quench your spirit's thirst,
As you imbibe this legal drug.

When Monday morning rolls around,
Your troubles you will face.
And take your place, among the ranks
Of runners in life's race.

But, for tonight, you've found a way
To minimize your pain.
So, o'er the kingdom of liquid joy,
This evening, you will reign.

© Troy J Hoecherl
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1 posted 05-05-2000 01:46 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Troy,
If you only knew how close to home this touches. I have been there and back (sober for almost six years now) I know the true meaning of this piece far too well.
Thank you for sharing it.

I love you man...lol

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
TerryW
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2 posted 05-05-2000 01:47 AM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Troy,
     Very touching poem.  I know someone that I care for very, very much who suffers the same problem of trying to lose himself inside the liquid happiness.  I felt the power of this one deeply.  Thank you for sharing it.


 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
netswan
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3 posted 05-05-2000 02:10 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Troy this is great!  Love this poem.
It is sad that some cannot be able to
drink for a night of fun, or for getting
away from reality without it being a life
problem.

I don't understand why some have to not
be able to stop --and when I have a friend
that has a drinking problem, I will stand
by their side and not drink while they
are here.  But sometimes, I, too like to
nip for a buzz or a little relaxation and
am one of the fortunate ones that can do
it, too.

hugs from netswan (your sister poet)
who enjoys you and knows you do not
have a drinkin' problem -----)
Nan
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4 posted 05-05-2000 07:24 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Well, I'm certainly happy to hear from netswan that you don't have this problem - Far too many wonderful people do.... It's quite insidious, to say the least... You've done a very good job portraying it, however... Nicely done, Troy....
Lone Wolf
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5 posted 05-05-2000 10:35 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Troy....
Powerful, my friend!!  So very true too.  SPoken like one who has been there.  Sorry I didn't get to read it last night....had to go.  Great writing, my friend!!!



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Zelda
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6 posted 05-05-2000 10:58 PM       View Profile for Zelda   Email Zelda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zelda

I believe this is the first poem of yours that I have read.
I like how you put this to words.  Sad when this happens in real life--that "rat race" can be overwhelming.
Good work.
Z    
DiObear
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7 posted 05-06-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for DiObear   Email DiObear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DiObear

Not only is this well written, but you write about a tough subject with much sensitivity and without any apparent judgment.  Very well done.

Sue
hsystems
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8 posted 05-06-2000 12:43 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Thank you all for your kind comments!  You have brightened my day!


Troy



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DestinysCharm
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9 posted 05-06-2000 01:08 PM       View Profile for DestinysCharm   Email DestinysCharm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for DestinysCharm

Troy, What a fabulous job you've done on this poem. I can relate to what it says I know many with this problem and it is very sad and frustrating. They don't see it like your poem states, they don't see it at all.
A Romantic Heart
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10 posted 05-06-2000 01:31 PM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

I Think You should submitt This to the AAA organization and let them put it on their brochures and pamlets...maybe even a poster!

So many need to hear it!!
doreen peri
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11 posted 05-06-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

These lines:

"But, sometimes, life still screams for more,
When you're doing all you can."

really say it all, troy... thanks for the read... enjoyed your fine writing

-dp
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12 posted 05-06-2000 09:33 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent writing, Troy! So many people I know have this problem. It is a shame, for they are wonderful people who are drinking most of their lives away. You have described it very well.

Denise
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