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Kevin
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0 posted 2000-05-05 01:10 AM


I dreamt of you last night
it was nice to see your face
without having to fight
through the confines of this place

I still can see your smile
I cant hide the hints of mine
still knowing all the while
that my dreams I’ve left behind.

I know we’ll never be
sometimes things just work that way
you mean everything to me
and my love grows with the day

You may keep your love for him
but your smile stays with my heart
the light it shines will never dim
its glowed within me from the start


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Marina
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1 posted 2000-05-05 01:41 AM


Kevin, there is nothing more painful then loving one who does not love you any longer.  Or perhaps never did.  Very well written.

Marina

TerryW
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2 posted 2000-05-05 01:44 AM


Kevin,
     Very well written.  I, too, know what it is liketo love someone who loves someone else.  Very nice way to let your feelings out.   Thank you for sharing!

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 2000-05-05 03:37 AM


Nice poem with flow of true emotions. I liked this one, particularly the lines

...
but your smile stays with my heart
the light it shines will never dim
its glowed within me from the start

Keep Writing,
Regards, sudhir.

 In any moment of decision,
The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt

~ViXeN~
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4 posted 2000-05-05 07:50 AM


Kev,
This is so beautiful! =-)
Wow, i think we all know how you feel in this situation, you expressed it really well
... She's a lucky girl. =-)

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-05-05 08:01 AM


Kevin~
This is lovely with a touch of sadness.

'I still can see your smile
I can't hide the hints of mine'

A beautiful line, sweetie.
~*Marge*~




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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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6 posted 2000-05-05 08:06 AM


Kevin - this is lovely - written with sadness - but still lovely   I hope your sadness won't last too long

Roniece

Kevin
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7 posted 2000-05-05 10:24 PM


marge, good to see ya =)

shan, still cant do it =(


everyone else thanks, i hope it wasnt to identifiable, keep smiling

Tia
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8 posted 2000-05-05 11:17 PM


that was a very nice poem.i know what it is like to feel like that.good luck in the future...
Tia

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