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The Right Moment

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Tia
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0 posted 05-05-2000 01:01 AM       View Profile for Tia   Email Tia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tia

The Right Moment

I see you from a distance
wondering if you noticed me...
wanting you to ease my pain,
to make it go away...

slowly you get off your chair
starting to approach me...
your eyes wide with amazement,
your dying smile.

I stand up
you're almost here...
you open you arms,
but walk right by.

I turned
hoping no one else was there.
But there she was,
a walking image of beauty...that i'll never be.

I'm internally dying for you.
your love, your comfort
to ease my pain...
to make me feel like I am worth something...

I sit down.
closing my eyes...
wondering what it would be like,
to have you love me.....


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Jeffrey Carter
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1 posted 05-05-2000 01:07 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Tia,

First let me say Welcome to our little family.

Second....you have written your heart well in this piece. I can feel your pain. Know it all too well.

Hope to see more of your work soon.

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
A Romantic Heart
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2 posted 05-05-2000 01:08 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

I could relate to your poem! excellant!!!Welcome to passions!!!!
Jeffrey Carter
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3 posted 05-05-2000 01:57 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

back to the top

sometimes post's can move quickly in here so I'm sending this back for everyone

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
TerryW
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since 03-23-2000
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4 posted 05-05-2000 02:01 AM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Tia,
     Welcome to our family!  Very good poem, dear!  Very touching and deeply heartfelt.  Keep writing straight from your heart -- it will always be your greatest inspiration!

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
Sudhir Iyer
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since 04-26-2000
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium


5 posted 05-05-2000 03:14 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Nice start Tia,

WELCOME to the club!!!


Regards,
Sudhir

 In any moment of decision,
The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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Sydney, Australia


6 posted 05-05-2000 07:52 AM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Tia - Welcome to Passions!
This is a lovely piece of writing and I agree with the other's comments that you should continue to write from your heart - well done  

Roniece
tracie66
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since 01-18-2000
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Victoria, Australia


7 posted 05-05-2000 07:58 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Tia~
Great way to get started in here with this one, lovely first post. I felt such a sad longing, you never know one day a surprise may await you.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe




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Mitch B
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Orlando, FL


8 posted 05-05-2000 10:07 PM       View Profile for Mitch B   Email Mitch B   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mitch B

Reminded me of an old saying, "Don’t put yourself in parenthesis…give a chapter all to yourself"
 
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