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Wet
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since 1999-07-25
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Brentwood, Tn

0 posted 2000-05-04 10:39 PM


Reflection

A reflection from the water,
My image i see before me.
A ripple causes it to break,
Like my soul inside me.
From the center out,
Waves of madness sepperate.
It causes confusion,
But becomes more calm then before.
I can respect the stillness alround me now,
Before I couldn't,
Until I jumped into the water.

© Copyright 2000 David Danielson - All Rights Reserved
redheart angrybraids
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since 2000-04-16
Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii
1 posted 2000-05-05 12:28 PM


this was simple and to the point, i also could relate the you image of the soul, and the respect for the calm and the wild.
kindly,
redheart angrybraids

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
2 posted 2000-05-05 04:10 AM


Nice poem, tilts towards a suicidal tendency, though, which is not a very honourable way to end....

Simple but effective, check out a few spelling errors though!

Keep writing,
Sudhir

 In any moment of decision,
The best thing you can do is the right thing,
The next-best thing is the wrong thing,
And the worst thing you can do is nothing.
- Theodore Roosevelt

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
3 posted 2000-05-06 05:32 PM


Hi Wet,

This is rally good here I loved the imagery, thank you for sharing.

Cerenity

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