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the pledge and the rose
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the pledge and the rose |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon 
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light's portal cast down from heav'n scattered brokenly, our love sever'n tears and rain fall mingled down no smile to cause from this heart's frown I seek you not among the flowers while dew-drops fall in ardent showers we shall not linger among the blooms we shall not rest a moment too soon I cannot deny this weary heart each moment, each hour, we're apart I crawl now on my humbled knee a prayer, a token, giv'n to thee I offer up a meager gift this pledge is all I have to give I'll love you now, forever more yea past the pull of heav'n's door death cannot our passion quell for you, for I, have loved too well soon my treasure offered up no jewel, no riches can usurp I bargain this my love, my sight to wake with you in soft morn light no fear can now to us be giv'n our love shall not this time be riv'n we dwell in this our earthly haunt knowing life may ne'er end our want know this now, my story well be it heav'n, be it hell we'll wake one morn to gentle embrace no more empty nights to face rest with me in quiet repose and seal our pledge with crimson rose < !signature--> "Our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." --William Shakespeare [This message has been edited by X Angel (edited 05-04-2000).] |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
This was great hun! I loved the end and I even felt that the signature at the end added to it as well. it made me feel kinda warm a fuzzy. (tell anyone and you'll get a box of wet noodles in the mail!) lol "There were times in my life when I was going insane tryin to walk through the pain when I lost my grip and I hit the floor yeah I thought I could leave but couldn't get out the door" - Aerosmith "Amazing" |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Heather...this one is very sweet, touching, and romantic. I can feel the ardorous pledge, the lenghts one would go through, just to keep a loved one near. Beautiful, simply beautiful. The meter was there, the rhymes and rhythm was there, the imagery and message were there...a very well-crafted poem. Congratulations on yet another fabulous creation!  Alicat |
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*~Juliet~* Junior Member
since 2000-05-02
Posts 19Key West |
Very, very beautiful poem. I realy enjoyed reading it! So, so true.  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Yikes... this is so powerful, Angel. "knowing life may ne'er end our want" Indeed - I know that longing... I love the tragic feel to this... the Romeo & Juliet quality of love living by death... if you will. Wonderful work, dear. Michael |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
XAngel~ I enjoyed this. Very Elizbethan. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow... someone is very lucky. This was beautiful. "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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