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bsquirrel
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0 posted 05-04-2000 03:05 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

Large, lifeless stars hung from the ceiling
By wire, twirling slightly with the fan.
As I sat down in the realm of the audience,
I quickly found out how the stars had died.

The poor things -- blown by and absorbing tired breath
Of performers of such rambling length.
Comedy about sex,
Unsubtle guitars struck,
Drowning out the traffic on Sunset.

There was a smattering of talent;
If you could ignore the moderator,.
Speaking with vibe -- f___ the system, right?
Hypocrite reply: "I can only allow four poets. You can't read tonight."

After picking the third ant off my arm
Resting against a cushion the color of paint-swallowed vomit,
I stood up to her, made her face me instead of the cash register,
And asked if I could just read one poem;
One minute, only.

"No. I can't show favoritism," she said as if it made sense
As the next performer went well over the six-minute line.
So, after my friend was done, I left a sliding trail
Of poetic license on the door.
Marking the place for other lambs to stay away.

(as if it matters anyway)

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ESP
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1 posted 05-04-2000 04:54 AM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

Wow, I could see it all happening! Great job here!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
Janet Marie
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2 posted 05-04-2000 08:42 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

I quickly found out how the stars had died.

The poor things -- blown by and absorbing tired breath
-------------
I stood up to her, made her face me instead of the cash register,
And asked if I could just read one poem;
One minute, only.

"No. I can't show favoritism," she said as if it made sense
-----------------
So, after my friend was done, I left a sliding trail
Of poetic license on the door.
Marking the place for other lambs to stay away.

(as if it matters anyway)
----------------

oh...it matters...trust me...it matters.*smile*
man, your just so good at this...
I can feel your emotions...
and see the club...like I was there...
and again heres another poem so heavily influenced by your world...but written so well...it puts someone like me, who's never tasted it...right at the bar sipping it.
...it matters.
cool poem BSQ...
later, jm/bs


bsquirrel
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3 posted 05-04-2000 10:24 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

ESPJM/BS,
Glad you enjoyed. Trust me though; it was no fun at all.

Mike
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 05-04-2000 10:41 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Bsquirrel,
Enjoyed the read.
Martie
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5 posted 05-04-2000 11:16 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Gosh, I know that this is so close to where I live, Silverlake...one of my first loves lived there...really enjoyed your poem, especially the last three lines!
bsquirrel
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6 posted 05-04-2000 11:26 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Seymour,
Also glad you enjoyed. Now that a day has gone by, this seems surreal -- but I was pretty much racing all the way home after it happened. What a byatch.

Martie,
My condolences (sp?). j/k

Mike

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redheart angrybraids
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it made me remember a time when i heard the shouting poet, you are brave to want to stand in front. i was satisfied by the walk of the words, i could feel myself in the crowd, though i would try not to kill the stars.
kindly,
redheart angrybraids
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8 posted 05-07-2000 01:01 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

angrybraids,
I was going to let this thread finally die out, but I just HAD to respond. Damn, I love that name!   And glad you enjoyed.

Mike
 
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