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~Unrequited~
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~Unrequited~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Unrequited~ Of all the things I've never done ... and all the things I've still yet to do. I'd trade them all away in a heart beat ... to be lying there next to you. For the beaches I've never walked on ... the oceans I'll never see. I'd gladly forfeit their beauty ... to drown in the depths of your intensity. There is so much I've not yet seen or done ... so much of me remains unrequited. Still I'd pass on it all, to live inside your heart ... so sweetly invited. Of all the languages I've not spoken ... all the love songs I've not yet heard. I'd give my ability to speak ... just to inspire in you ... but a single poetic word. For all the delicacies I've not savored ... the fine wines I'll not sip. Without hesitation I would starve ... for just a taste of you on my lips. Of all the pleasures I've yet to know ... the contentment still not found within. They could never compare ... to the ecstasy of this anticipated sweet sin. One might say ... you cant trade away what you don't possess or hold. Still I'd sell my soul in a second ... to have carnal knowledge of your secrets untold. Janet Marie |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
My, my, Jan, this is soooooo very, very sensual. I'm going to take a cold shower now. This is wayyyy....  All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
oops....my bad....lol....hit the button twice [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 05-03-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Ok, you win, opening up my secrets book. What was it I get in trade. I really love this one, carnal... I like carnal. Very versitile your are. Parker |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
OOH!!! I loved this poem, Janet! It was great!  < !signature-->"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde [This message has been edited by LoveBug (edited 05-03-2000).] |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Gosh, this reads with red-hot-love all over it. Don't trade away your pen. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet Marie, these are terrific thoughts. You have woven some fantastic ideas into a very enjoyable poem, easy on the mind and a delight to the eyes. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Of all the poems I have never read... Poets who never said what was in their head i am glad we have you instead Marina |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
If this guy did not know, he better well know now. This was fantastic Janet. You poured your heart out on the line(as to say). If this poem doesn"t get his attention I just do not know what will. Good Luck Kathy |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Jan Could someone please open a window??? LOL. In all seriousness...this was hot, sizzling, BEAUTIFUL, full of love, longing, depth, intensity. I truly enjoyed reading it. What a pretty view into your heart you have given us! Love ya, Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
J.M.* This is one of my favorites I must say....first I thought this was about a love lost then it went to a love not yet acquired....the want for them is about the same...giving it all up for just one sweet moment...to make it all worth it. Written with the style that you have perfected!! Thank you for sharing this **AW hugs** S.S. Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you guys...for these GLOWING replies... I am smiling from heart to soul by them. This poem was a special one for me...I fussed over it more than any others.It was important for me to get it right. Im so pleased it touched you, in what ever way that was... *smile* love ya all, jm |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Janet...(long, sliding to the floor, siggggggghhhhhhhh), first time I've read one of your post. I'm yours...take me away. j. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, You better be careful you might get your wish. *L* wonderful poem. |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow... you'd give all that up, just for li'l ol' me? =) J/K Loved it Jan. Very romantic. And believe it or not I knew what the title meant.. didn't have to look it up in the dictionary or anything! =) "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
Wow Janet, this was beautiful. And I know the feeling all too well... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Wow...I was gonna pick out my favorite stanzas, but they were ALL good, and just kept getting better toward the end! I really liked your list of all the things you wanted from "him"....very sensual list indeed...This really hits home with me right now - that longing you have, the desires you feel - yep....I've been tied up in those now for awhile... Unfortunately, I've been fighting 'em off, and trying to convince myself I'm winning! ROFL If you've got your eye on somebody, I pray he knows he's being watched! LOL You go get him girl! I'm right on your flank, in case he tries to duck right! hehe |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Of all the people i have never met all the things i have never done, all places i have never been all prizes i have never won Of all the joy there is to share all the dreams that can come true there's only one I hold so dear it's to be a special friend to you ~~~~~~~ Enjoyed your poem JM, your writing is superb as always~~ BEH A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Janet Marie, Powerful words, my friend. I know exactly how you feel. It is like you have a window to my soul here. Thank you for sharing this....very great writing!!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Hey Janet, how did I miss this one? You really are reading my mind tonight. . . to trade everything for a chance at the one love that will make you happy. . . *sigh* Excellent poem, my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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