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My silent please

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Seymour Tabin
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              My silent please

The night was filled with fire flies
With visions cloud and misty eyes.
The moon hung low and half as bright.
The stars were almost out of sight.

The scent of jasmine mocked the air
And haunts my mind with memories glare.
This perfume with its lovers flaunt,
Aroma of my spirits taunt.

I stare into the heedless night,
The fire flies and stars faint light.
And swear at Cupid and his bow,
That struck my heart so long ago.

A thousand things twixt here and dare.
A thousand cuts to clear the air.
A thousand rules beyond declare
A thousand doors with tigers there.

My wishes yearn and gorge the breeze
So loud, I hear the silent please.


© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 05-03-2000 12:03 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Seymour,
This is a fine piece of work, really enjoyed it.

Regards,
Sudhir

 Take each day as it comes,
Consider each day as a flight,
Try hard to succeed and fly,
Surely then you will reach some height.

But if by some chance you don’t,
Remember that tomorrow will always come.
Learn this well and learn this hard
That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun.

A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski

Sunshine
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2 posted 05-03-2000 12:17 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

This is a wonderful play on words...loved it!  Truly!
Meadowmuse
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Sometimes wihin the most quiet beseeching falls the most urgent need. Wonderful writing, Seymour.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau
Martie
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4 posted 05-03-2000 02:06 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Sy, this is excellent!

In the night with jasmine's flair
your heart this longing must declare
and the gates so firmly closed
open and breathe your sigh of love
Janet Marie
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I stare into the heedless night,
The fire flies and stars faint light.
And swear at Cupid and his bow,
That struck my heart so long ago.

A thousand things twixt here and dare.
A thousand cuts to clear the air.
A thousand rules beyond declare
A thousand doors with tigers there.

My wishes yearn and gorge the breeze
So loud, I hear the silent please.
-----------------

****
listen now...
for soft whispers in the breeze.
In between the silence ...
hear the sighs this poem evokes with ease.
****

Sy this is exquisite...truly...
the imagery is of perfection,
and the emotions are fragile and tender.
and as always...I love when you write like this...
beautiful and breath taking *sigh*
the reason poerty was created.
take care, jm
Seymour Tabin
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Sudhir lyer, Thank you so much for the fine comment.

Sunshine, Thank you sweet. *L*

Claire, You are so right. *L*

Martie, Thank you for the lovely poetic stanza. *L*
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7 posted 05-03-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Sy,
Amazing piece of poetry you got here. Should make all the ladies swoon...lol

no seriously it is a great poem

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
A.C.Turner
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8 posted 05-03-2000 04:04 PM       View Profile for A.C.Turner   Email A.C.Turner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A.C.Turner

Great piece. I like the images and wording. Love the title. Peace ACT.
Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 05-03-2000 04:53 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
I've got to admit, you are outdoing me in the rhyme and meter arena
As for the the way you put words together, no one can match it. This is THE BEST. An absolutely superb poem. You only get better with each piece you write (impossible!)
Love ya
LIz
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10 posted 05-03-2000 05:08 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Seymour: This is absolutely lovely... your poems keep getting better and better!
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11 posted 05-03-2000 05:18 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Enjoyed the read, Sy  
Seymour Tabin
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Janet, Beautiful response, thank you. *L*

Jeffrey, Thank you Jeff.

A.C. Turner, Thank you for the great comment.

Elizabeth, you are a doll and I thank you for the wonderful review. Love Sy

Sunshine, Thank you for the lovely. *L*

Balladeer, I enjoyed your enjoy.
Corazon
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love this, the ending just makes you want to close your eyes and envision.....sigh
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14 posted 05-03-2000 08:24 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Oh, Sy! I loved that first verse..then I loved the second..by the time I was done, I couldn't tell what I liked best...this is a great poem sir!  
Seymour Tabin
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Corazon, What a wonderful comment, thank you.

Poet deVine, You have set my heart a twitter
             With your commentary glitter.
*L* Sy


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Nicely done Sy. I don't think you'll have to worry about flying unless of course you fall off the clouds

 If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley)
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Seymour~
When we hear the 'silent' whispers ...
we know another heart thinks of us.

'The scent of jasmine mocked the air
And haunts my mind with memories glare.
This perfume with its lovers flaunt,
Aroma of my spirits taunt.'

The night-blooming jasmine
is sweetly wafting through your thoughts.
I greatly enjoyed you sharing this with me.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~



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Oh Sey...I love the romantic longing that pours out of this...it's exquisite and sweet.  And I had to chuckle when you swore at Cupid!     That gave it a slight scent of agony!  hehe  And I just LOVE fire flies, so I was delighted that that's how it started!  Heck, I just loved the whole poem, and the simple yet delicate rhyme you used is one of my favorite schemes!  What more can I say!!   Bravo sir!  
Seymour Tabin
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Lucky, Nice comment, thank you.

Marge, Your answers are like jasmine. *L*

Pff, wonderful comment, thanks for the bravo.
*L*
Elizabeth Santos
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20 posted 05-16-2000 07:40 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
Went back and reread this one, it certainly deserves another look. It is simply exquisite
Liz
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21 posted 05-16-2000 08:00 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Seymour~
I agree with Lizzie.

Thanks, girlfriend !
~*Marge*~


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