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daft
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since 2000-05-02
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0 posted 2000-05-03 10:32 AM


There used to be an us
Now there no longer is
The temperature rose
To a great extent
Slowly we melted
Creating a pure figure
And one we shall remain
The existence is forever more
Something completely real & true
In a world full of deception & lies
An eternal bliss
That was started by a simple kiss
An everlasting connection
That no words could ever define
It will remain a secret
Hidden deep within thyself
Throughout the end of time


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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-05-03 11:19 AM


Those connections always remain forever in our hearts. This is another sad yet lovely poem.

Denise

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
2 posted 2000-05-03 11:36 AM


Well, I do not actually find this sad. It is a nice portrayal of life.

We are like pieces of wax, which on making a connections, discover the passions of love, oneness and friendship. The soul is stirred and we become united as one. The inanimate pieces are transformed into a unique caricature, a work of art, open for admiration. This connection is that which is there "forever".

I enjoyed this piece, daft.

Thanks for sharing,
sudhir

 Take each day as it comes,
Consider each day as a flight,
Try hard to succeed and fly,
Surely then you will reach some height.

But if by some chance you don’t,
Remember that tomorrow will always come.
Learn this well and learn this hard
That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun.

A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski


mete out
Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270
england
3 posted 2000-05-04 05:09 AM


***daft,
this poem is very touching.
love is  awonderful thing, to have experienced it can be one of the best things in life, it can also be one of the most heartbreaking.
this poem in some ways is sad, but i found it uplifting,

"And one we shall remain
The existence is forever more
Something completely real & true
In a world full of deception & lies"

nicely done.


 I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.



tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
4 posted 2000-05-04 05:14 AM


daft~
I really liked this and I too didn't find it sad. A very enjoyable read thanks for sharing  
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-05-04 06:32 AM


I enjoyed reading this..."an everlasting connection..perhaps this explains why I like to keep pictures of my old girlfriends around...it makes me feel comfortable and connected...I even have the picture of my girlfriend that I took to the senior prom.  James
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