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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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POETRY < !signature-->It's the sectional disclosure Of censored neuropathy It's the inverted genius That always seems to toy with me. It's the chandeliers of doom, I see swinging overhead. It's the mystic adoration Come by the voice of the dead. It's passion from the kiss of Night. It's the bond felt by a brother. It's the emptiness knowing you're The Insignificant Other. It's the clinical depression, It's a window to the dark. A Shakespearean impression That has yet to meet the mark. It's a whisper on the starlight It's hope cast the oubliette. It's the longing in the silence Of unwritten minuet. A dream dance with emotion, It's a smile across the eyes. The only truth I've ever held In this world full of lies. Michael Anderson For all behind was dark and drear, And all before was night and fear. How many hours of night or day In those suspended pangs I lay, I could not tell; I scarcely knew If this were human breath I drew. Lord Byron [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 05-03-2000).] |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Micheal, Again, I know just how you feel...you write it so eloquently. We can't let go of our trust, though, and become bitter cynics. It's better to look for the good in others than to suspect the worst. Great poem, Micheal. Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It's a dream dance with emotion It's a smile across the eyes. It's the only truth I've ever held In this world full of lies. ------------------ why am I smiling from ear to ear after reading this poem  man, I love this one..*smile* perfect M, just perfect. Its the gift that you were given... one you so unselfishly share. Its the emotion you evoke inside our hearts... making us reach deep to the place we not dare. Its the magic you create... with every perfect rhyme and verse. It is your wings to fly... your freedom from fate's curse. Poetry is your angel... her words so sweetly inspire. as long as you write... I know you feel hope's desire. You will never be... an insignificant other. You are a friend to all here... our favorite poetic brother. Never doubt you've made an impression... trust me...you've made your mark, You are the crowned poet prince... ruler and majesty of the poetic dark. jm |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~michael i am not as eloquent writer as JM..but i will try lol. This was fabulous hon. You write with such an intensity that amazes me again and again. And you do make each of us reach into our own souls to pull out our poetic best! I agree with Jan...you will never be an Insignifcant other...how can you be, when u mean so much to all of us! take care Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
It's the might of a pen, add a bit of fun, intended pun, one never knows when, words that flow, hurt without a gun. It's a personal delight, to see through the light, with oneself does one fight, gripping the pen with one's might. It's a passionate arousal, at the reader's disposal, a writer's unsaid proposal, and a challenged disciple.... ..... Michael, the theme and the expressions are great as ever from you. Thanks for igniting my passion for verse.... Regards, Sudhir a.k.a. ski (a crazy monster) Take each day as it comes, Consider each day as a flight, Try hard to succeed and fly, Surely then you will reach some height. But if by some chance you don’t, Remember that tomorrow will always come. Learn this well and learn this hard That today’s efforts will pay for tomorrow’s fun. A Crazy Monster, a.k.a Ski |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Michael, you so easily bring tears to my eyes with the emotion you portray... |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Micheal, You've done it again. Smiling very wide. This is stunning. You are truly something special....exactly what I haven't a clue...lol No seriously, I love this piece. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Ka-bam that was hard hitting thanx |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael, so much passion in your words always. Very well done!! |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Geeze, couldnt have said it better myself, in fact, I doubt I could have even come close to saying it this well. Excellent work Michael, and very well stated. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
well, I just echoed mistikman on another poem, he is gonna think I am following him, but yep, couldn't have written this half as well....great writing |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I understand. It is what sometimes is the only reason to get out of bed....  |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Some excellent thoughts, here -- and ones that hold much of truth ... Could use some work on the meter (sorry, but it IS rhymed and structured) -- problem is I like most of the lines where the meter stumbles, so I have no helpful suggestions to offer (not that I even know you would want any -- LOL) Leave it to me to nitpick where I have nothing to suggest ... hehehe  You are very talented, Michael -- I wish I had half the inspiration you do! --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"It's the longing in the silence Of unwritten minuet" Michael, All I have to say is that you are an amazing poet. This poem is so wonderful and eloquent. I can only dream of writing something this beautiful Great work! Proud to know ya! Liz |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
it's beautiful. and it's the pen that stops the pendulum for another chance....at life.... this was a masterpiece. Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I love your poetic style Michael ... such passion amongst the pain. What a wonderful and flowing poem! /Kit |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
A dream dance with emotion, It's a smile across the eyes. The only truth I've ever held In this world full of lies Isn't that the truth, though? I've found poetry (I'll expand here and say my writing) to be my only constant sometimes...my only truth.. There are tons of lines I adore.."It's the longing in the silence, Of unwritten minuet" Particularly struck me. Being of a musical nature and all. Lovely, Michael |
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Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
warmhrt, it may be just a bit too late for me, I'm afraid.  I'll try to remember to look for the good though, even still.Janet, I'm glad I managed to make you smile instead of cry for a change. Thanky you for the dear poem, too. Amy, I'm glad I can influence you in a positive manner. You all mean the world to me too ya know? Sudhir Iyer, Ty so much for the poetic reply. The truest of all compliments for a poet me thinks. Sunshine, I hope they're happy tears... Jeffrey, if you ever figure it out - let me know would ya? Cause I haven't a clue either... Walt, I'll slap you around anytime old friend... Right now it's your turn to wham me tough... Martie, I'm so glad you enjoyed... Mistik, you underestimate yourself... Corazon, TY... Glad you enjoyed, also. PdV, I do my best writing while in bed...LOL Guess I learned that trick from all those stays in the hospital... Kess, well, I didn't do much here but release some emotion - you caught me sluffing again...LOL But hey, if I tried to do everything perfect - what a boring life that would be - don't ya think? Seriously though, I don't mind it when you nitpick at all... you of all people have that right for your poetry is of the highest calibur - and I surely respect that.Elizabeth, your poetry has moved me to tears many times... don't sell yourself short. You have a gift. Irish Rose, I wish I could stop that pendulum sometimes... just to try to catch up to the emotion sometimes...LOL Kit, TY - and I'm glad to see your making your way around the forums so well. I will be looking for more of your work as well. Nicole, Indeed, poetry is the only thing I've ever "known" would always be there for me. In a way, it is my reality as the rest of the world is so often unattainible to me. Thank you all for your kind replies. Michael |
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A.C.Turner Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 83Reading, Pa.Home of Bardfest |
This is so well said. A classic as far as I'm concerned. Peace to you. ACT. |
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