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Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London

0 posted 2000-05-03 01:35 AM



Last Train of Thought
~~~

A  lonely  railway  station
with  a  pale  moon  shining  down
An  unkempt  lowly  trash  collector
holds  the  lifes'  work  of  a  clown
~
A  far  off  distant  whistle
a  fast  approaching  train
Crackling  flame  of  open  fire
in  a  hearth  I  stare  in  pain
~
While  twilights'  Erie  haze  reflects
the  setting  of  the  sun
The  leaping  flames  suppress  the  need
of  basking  in  the  fun
~
A  headlights'  gleam  cascading
a  sadness  through  mournful  wail
The  slow  approach  perpetual
in  the  cadence  of  wheel  and  rail
~
The  old  600  rambled  in
as  steam  from  ballast  rose
And  brought  with  it  a  gentle  rain
that  soaked  right  through  my  clothes
~
Conductor  shouting
'all  aboard'
as  hearth  receives  my  notes
I  climb  aboard  the  train  of  thought
while  distant  thunder  strokes
~~~




[This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 05-03-2000).]

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2000-05-03 02:07 AM


Why Rex Allen , Rex Allen, ---this was lovely cinematogrophy---(spelling?)  kept waiting for the punch line---and got it at the end--something lonely 'bout a train....

Loved this...(almost as much as you...)

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-05-03 02:08 AM


Rex this is EXCELLENT!!
some of your best work i think!!
so much emotion and imagery blended with
the trains images...
very well written and thought out!!
a most enjoyable read!
take care, jm

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
3 posted 2000-05-03 07:31 PM


serenity ... Janet Marie
Thankyou both for your kindness

Denise
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4 posted 2000-05-03 09:11 PM


This is wonderful Rex! I love it!

Denise

Martie
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5 posted 2000-05-03 09:30 PM


I love trains...this poem was so well done..great imagery and the flow...super.
Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
6 posted 2000-05-04 06:09 AM


Denise ... Martie
thankyou for the nice replies

A.C.Turner
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7 posted 2000-05-04 09:00 AM


This is good poetry. Wonderful imagery and great choice of words. Peace. ACT.
WhtDove
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8 posted 2000-05-04 10:36 AM


BRAVO!!!  This was just smashing!
I love the wording you've used here, and the last staza was amazing! I really truly enjoy reading your work  

poetFemmeFatale
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9 posted 2000-05-04 10:41 AM


I've always wanted to ride a train...this was really a nice ride in itself!  To me, trains are something of the past, that we yet hang onto.  With all the technology of today, they just seem so...dated, you know?  I'm glad we still have them around...one day, I will ride one too.     Great piece sir, and I like the little twist in the title.
Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
10 posted 2000-05-05 12:25 PM


A.C.Turner ... thankyou for reading ... glad you enjoyed this poem
... WhtDove ... a special thanks to you, lovely lady ... you know how to make my day

poetFemmeFatale ... thankyou ... nice to here from you ... I like trains ... Have a large H O set ( big kid )

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