How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #7 Archive
 She Forgot To Take Her Memory   [ Page: 1  2  ]
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

She Forgot To Take Her Memory

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Jeffrey Carter
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 04-08-2000
Posts 2424
State of constant confusion!


0 posted 05-02-2000 11:53 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

I thought it would be easy
to get through this on my own
That I really didn't need her
I could face this world alone

She forgot to take her memory with her
when she left me here alone
Every time I think I'm over her
It reminds me that I'm wrong

I'd be back to my old self
within a day- two at the most
But when she left she forgot
to take with her, her ghost

She forgot to take her memory with her
when she left me on my own
And every time I think I'm over her
I'm reminded that she's gone

I would like to thank Micheal for helping me with this piece.
You will never know how grateful I am.
Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Jeffrey




 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
© Copyright 2000 Jeffrey D. Carter - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 07-25-99
Posts 2961
Arkansas


1 posted 05-03-2000 12:01 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Very beautiful Jeffrey...I see you two have bonded well.     I loved the whole concept of "taking her memory".....you've done well with it.  *curtsies*
netswan
Senior Member
since 03-28-2000
Posts 1395
Washington


2 posted 05-03-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for netswan   Email netswan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit netswan's Home Page   View IP for netswan

Hey great poem Jeffrey -----such a great
image of memory with a ghost to haunt
you.

Michael, so wonderful to take Jeffrey
under your wing ----------

hugs to you both
AND WELL DONE
netswan
devina
Member Elite
since 10-28-1999
Posts 3189
Northern Cali


3 posted 05-03-2000 12:05 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This could be an awesome song!!! Great feeling, even better emotion...need I say more?  

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 11-06-1999
Posts 43042
Florida's Foreverly Shores


4 posted 05-03-2000 12:11 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Oh, sweet Jeffrey~
This is stunning in it's portrayal of
your heart right now.

You will see ... 'Another Love Will Come'
and I want to be around to see it light up your face and your poetry.
It will happen, hon ... honest.

Love and hugs and kisses and all that
wonderful mushy stuff !
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 01-22-2000
Posts 18986


5 posted 05-03-2000 12:11 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Jeffery,
this is  perfect...now I know what your reply meant  
yes..it feels this way..but in time the memories get sweeter.
and yes this does sound like good old fashioned tear jerker country song...
tell M, to get out his guitar...*smile*
great job Jeff.

 ~as always, Take Care,JM~
--------------
I know it's been a long road
To get these towns behind me and I
Will gladly reap what we may sow--
I am there for you ...
and you're there for me ...
Are you waiting for
Heart in hand
Woman and man
See me where I stand I am
Heart
Heart in hand
~vertical horizon~

Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 12-27-1999
Posts 3317


6 posted 05-03-2000 12:20 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Jeffrey, I guess you know that I can relate to the feelings you've so aptly expressed with this piece...whether it be death or another form of separation that keeps us from the one we love, the ghosts of memory are there far beyond the physical presence, and can transcend all time and sensory boundaries. I'm glad you're writing about it...take care, my friend.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau
tracie66
Member Elite
since 01-18-2000
Posts 4587
Victoria, Australia


7 posted 05-03-2000 05:47 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Dear Jeffrey~
Yep damn them for not taking their memories with them, makes moving on and getting on with your life a whole lot harder. Hope the hurt starts to fade a little soon.
Tracie~


 Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 04-30-2000
Posts 16920
Ontario, Canada


8 posted 05-03-2000 07:03 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Your words and sentiments are moving Jeffrey ... if we could only place our memories in a box, to be taken out and dusted off only when we want to, it would be so much easier. Alas ... only time can heal the wounds.  Beautifully written from the heart!

/Kit McCallum
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 08-22-99
Posts 23002


9 posted 05-03-2000 09:00 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellent portrayal of loss, Jeffrey. Beautifully done!

Denise
Jeffrey Carter
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 04-08-2000
Posts 2424
State of constant confusion!


10 posted 05-03-2000 12:35 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Thank you all for the warm replies. They are truly appreciated. I love you all.

Micheal, Break out that guit-fiddle buddy...lol Thank you again Micheal for all your help.

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
Beki
Senior Member
since 09-15-99
Posts 1615
Newport Beach, CA, USA


11 posted 05-03-2000 12:37 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

nicely done, I hear a song in this too  
Marina
Member Elite
since 02-10-2000
Posts 2267
Pickering, Ontario


12 posted 05-03-2000 03:23 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Hey been there, done that! Nicely put.

Marina
Jeffrey Carter
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 04-08-2000
Posts 2424
State of constant confusion!


13 posted 05-03-2000 03:24 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Thanks Beki,

See Micheal, these ladies want to be serenaded m'friend. So break out that guitar and I'll break out mine...lol...but you get to sing...I don't want to scare 'em off...lol

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
Jeffrey Carter
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 04-08-2000
Posts 2424
State of constant confusion!


14 posted 05-03-2000 03:28 PM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

Sorry Marina,
you snuck one in there on me

Thank you for reading and replying

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
Corazon
Senior Member
since 02-02-2000
Posts 1301


15 posted 05-03-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

this is wonderful jeffery...sad but wonderfully and expressively written..great job  
Brandyn Sand
Member
since 04-21-2000
Posts 82
Columbia, SC


16 posted 05-03-2000 04:00 PM       View Profile for Brandyn Sand   Email Brandyn Sand   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Brandyn Sand's Home Page   View IP for Brandyn Sand

Very nice! Cooperative efforts are wonderful, aren't they?  ;-)

 
Aimster
Member Elite
since 02-19-2000
Posts 4367
Charlotte, NC


17 posted 05-03-2000 04:08 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~Jeff

You have the stunning capability to write at such a great depth! This is one of my favorites from you most definitely! I loved the title, and the flow of this piece. I am glad to see you and Michael have bonded. You both are awesome poets! Hon, I wish for you a new love who will treat you right. I also am sending lots of sunshine and rainbow filled days your way.

Much love,
Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
TerryW
Senior Member
since 03-23-2000
Posts 787
Louisville, Mississippi, USA


18 posted 05-03-2000 05:57 PM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Jeffrey,
    What a lovely poem.  I know how that ghost of memory lingers all to well.  But trust me, even that ghost will fade in time.  It just takes that -- time.  Time and the support of all the friends who care about you!    

Love Ya~
     Terry

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
LoveBug
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 01-08-2000
Posts 5015


19 posted 05-03-2000 06:50 PM       View Profile for LoveBug   Email LoveBug   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveBug

Jeffrey, this is a wonderful poem. Yes, you may walk away from a person, but their memory is always with you.

 "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant
since 03-16-2000
Posts 5900
Lansing, MI USA


20 posted 05-03-2000 11:25 PM       View Profile for Lone Wolf   Email Lone Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone Wolf

Great writing, Jeffrey.  Haunting images and words....wow.  You and Michael seems to work well together!!  Looking forward to more...

LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Caelestus
since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


21 posted 05-04-2000 09:22 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Ha, a collaborational effort...no wonder it sings like a song...and back to the top, where it rightly belongs...

good stuff, Jeff...now, was Michael the inspiration or just the "tweaker?"
msstt
Junior Member
since 05-03-2000
Posts 23
Huntington,Ind


22 posted 05-04-2000 09:35 AM       View Profile for msstt   Email msstt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for msstt

Wow this was GREAT.And letting you know that memories are forever.And should be kept in safe places.Tricia
Michael
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 08-13-99
Posts 6333
California


23 posted 05-04-2000 02:48 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Hehe...well you were talking guit-fiddle at first and I was thinkin' about a good ol' red-neck roust, playin' music on pots & pans & old scrub boards....LOL

But since you mentioned guitar - well, let's do this thing up right then...  That's my e-ticket there.

Hey, Jeffrey, this poem is "all you" - don't be swingin't too much credit my way.  I'll give a tip or two anytime you need one, bud.
This one turned out wonderful for you.


Michael

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 03-06-2000
Posts 3768
Michigan


24 posted 05-04-2000 06:44 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

A beautiful job Jeffrey, written from your heart as all your work is.  And yes "they" would be much easier to get over if they took their memories....but when it stops hurting it's nice to remember the good times too.  Thank you so much for sharing a piece of your heart with us.
Jeffrey Carter will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #7 >> She Forgot To Take Her Memory   [ Page: 1  2  ] Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors