»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #7
»
She Forgot To Take Her Memory
| Open Poetry #7 |
|
She Forgot To Take Her Memory |
|
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
|
I thought it would be easy to get through this on my own That I really didn't need her I could face this world alone She forgot to take her memory with her when she left me here alone Every time I think I'm over her It reminds me that I'm wrong I'd be back to my old self within a day- two at the most But when she left she forgot to take with her, her ghost She forgot to take her memory with her when she left me on my own And every time I think I'm over her I'm reminded that she's gone I would like to thank Micheal for helping me with this piece.  You will never know how grateful I am.Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Jeffrey D. Carter - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Very beautiful Jeffrey...I see you two have bonded well.  I loved the whole concept of "taking her memory".....you've done well with it. *curtsies* |
||
|
netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Hey great poem Jeffrey -----such a great image of memory with a ghost to haunt you. Michael, so wonderful to take Jeffrey under your wing ---------- hugs to you both AND WELL DONE netswan |
||
|
devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This could be an awesome song!!! Great feeling, even better emotion...need I say more? Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
||
Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, sweet Jeffrey~ This is stunning in it's portrayal of your heart right now. You will see ... 'Another Love Will Come' and I want to be around to see it light up your face and your poetry. It will happen, hon ... honest. Love and hugs and kisses and all that wonderful mushy stuff !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Jeffery, this is perfect...now I know what your reply meant yes..it feels this way..but in time the memories get sweeter. and yes this does sound like good old fashioned tear jerker country song... tell M, to get out his guitar...*smile* great job Jeff. ~as always, Take Care,JM~ -------------- I know it's been a long road To get these towns behind me and I Will gladly reap what we may sow-- I am there for you ... and you're there for me ... Are you waiting for Heart in hand Woman and man See me where I stand I am Heart Heart in hand ~vertical horizon~ |
||
|
Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Jeffrey, I guess you know that I can relate to the feelings you've so aptly expressed with this piece...whether it be death or another form of separation that keeps us from the one we love, the ghosts of memory are there far beyond the physical presence, and can transcend all time and sensory boundaries. I'm glad you're writing about it...take care, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
||
|
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dear Jeffrey~ Yep damn them for not taking their memories with them, makes moving on and getting on with your life a whole lot harder. Hope the hurt starts to fade a little soon. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
||
|
Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Your words and sentiments are moving Jeffrey ... if we could only place our memories in a box, to be taken out and dusted off only when we want to, it would be so much easier. Alas ... only time can heal the wounds. Beautifully written from the heart! /Kit McCallum |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent portrayal of loss, Jeffrey. Beautifully done! Denise |
||
|
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thank you all for the warm replies. They are truly appreciated. I love you all. Micheal, Break out that guit-fiddle buddy...lol Thank you again Micheal for all your help. All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
||
|
Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
nicely done, I hear a song in this too |
||
|
Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Hey been there, done that! Nicely put. Marina |
||
|
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thanks Beki, See Micheal, these ladies want to be serenaded m'friend. So break out that guitar and I'll break out mine...lol...but you get to sing...I don't want to scare 'em off...lol All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
||
|
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Sorry Marina, you snuck one in there on me Thank you for reading and replying All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
||
|
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is wonderful jeffery...sad but wonderfully and expressively written..great job |
||
|
Brandyn Sand Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 82Columbia, SC |
Very nice! Cooperative efforts are wonderful, aren't they? ;-) |
||
|
Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Jeff You have the stunning capability to write at such a great depth! This is one of my favorites from you most definitely! I loved the title, and the flow of this piece. I am glad to see you and Michael have bonded. You both are awesome poets! Hon, I wish for you a new love who will treat you right. I also am sending lots of sunshine and rainbow filled days your way. Much love, Amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
||
|
TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Jeffrey, What a lovely poem. I know how that ghost of memory lingers all to well. But trust me, even that ghost will fade in time. It just takes that -- time. Time and the support of all the friends who care about you! Love Ya~ Terry ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
||
|
LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Jeffrey, this is a wonderful poem. Yes, you may walk away from a person, but their memory is always with you. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
||
|
Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Great writing, Jeffrey. Haunting images and words....wow. You and Michael seems to work well together!! Looking forward to more... LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ha, a collaborational effort...no wonder it sings like a song...and back to the top, where it rightly belongs... good stuff, Jeff...now, was Michael the inspiration or just the "tweaker?" |
||
|
msstt Junior Member
since 2000-05-03
Posts 23Huntington,Ind |
Wow this was GREAT.And letting you know that memories are forever.And should be kept in safe places.Tricia |
||
|
Michael
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Hehe...well you were talking guit-fiddle at first and I was thinkin' about a good ol' red-neck roust, playin' music on pots & pans & old scrub boards....LOL But since you mentioned guitar - well, let's do this thing up right then... That's my e-ticket there. Hey, Jeffrey, this poem is "all you" - don't be swingin't too much credit my way. I'll give a tip or two anytime you need one, bud. This one turned out wonderful for you. Michael |
||
|
Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A beautiful job Jeffrey, written from your heart as all your work is. And yes "they" would be much easier to get over if they took their memories....but when it stops hurting it's nice to remember the good times too. Thank you so much for sharing a piece of your heart with us. |
||
|
GOETHE New Member
since 1999-10-16
Posts 9Weimar, GDR |
good job. hehe. keep it up. [This message has been edited by GOETHE (edited 05-04-2000).] |
||
|
WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Very cool Jeff! I've been there before and you described it perfectly. I like the title... "She forgot to take her memory" perfect... =) Thanks man, Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
||
|
desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx |
nice work jeff! I liked this one. of course I am a melancholy poet at heart, so I'm biased. hehe good work to you though. "There were times in my life when I was going insane tryin to walk through the pain when I lost my grip and I hit the floor yeah I thought I could leave but couldn't get out the door" - Aerosmith "Amazing" |
||
|
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I am very much overwhelmed by all the replies this got. I love you guys, everyone! It is through you that I get my inspiration. Reading all your wonderful poetry has taught me alot about my writing, and I am very grateful. Thank you all for being so supportive. Love to you all, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
||
|
canada New Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 2 |
man your poem was written very wounderfuly and i'm glad i got this chance to read it |
||
|
Zelda Junior Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 43NOVA |
Very haunting piece you have here. Love's ghost lerking... Nicely written thoughts. Z |
||
|
Tia Junior Member
since 2000-05-05
Posts 41massachusetts |
This is a wonderful poem Jeffery. keep writing from the bottom of your heart. Tia I'd rather have someone hate me for who i am,than to have someone like me for who i'm pretending to be |
||
|
DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
Jeffrey, I'd have to agree with so many who have already written their comments... this should have music to go with it. Maybe some sweet notes would even help to ease the pain. Very nice poem. Sue |
||
|
Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very beautiful, I do believe I heard a song like this.. Memories like the corners of my mind... memories also help us in looking ahead to more memories lest we forget. hehe Isn't it ironic.. I believe that's a song too. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
