Member Rara Avis
Ok, how to start...
First, I must say that I feel this poem 100%. You've penned my life in yours within a few well-wrought words.
Let's dissect this for just a moment, shall we?
I thought you were my reason
For life and breath
A mistake I myself made. I like how in a few words, you described almost an entire relationship. You've shown how someone can become so important to another, that they virtually live to be with that person.
The changing season
Now becomes my inner death
And in a few more words show how damaging that can be if that person "betrays" you. In one stanza, you've taken us from the highest of highs, to the lowest of lows. A-W-E-S-O-M-E!
Soon the season will turn
And then I'll once again shine
Thank you for this glimmer of hope. Once again, in a few words, you've spelled out a vivid picture! I'm glad to see the ray of sunshine blazing through the darkness of this poem!
But give me a moment to burn
In the pain that you have made mine
And finally, this too I understand. Grief is somethign which has to be allowed to run its course. Again, I understand this, having lived it myself. Peace is a hard thing to find at times, and then only at the end of the pain. Once again, you go from one extreme to the other, slamming us in the face with the harsh reality of abrubt and painful change.
I loved this poem, mostly because I empathize with it so much, but also because it was so well written and sincere sounding.