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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 05-02-2000 10:35 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


I've come to a place
In my life today
Where sadness and pain replace
The happiness you brought my way

You said you'd never go
That you'd be here
I trusted you so
And you took away my fear

You broke my dreams
And crushed my soul
I'm alone it seems
And will never be whole

I thought you were my reason
For life and breath
The changing season
Now becomes my inner death

You killed the hope and the dreams
You laughingly took it all away
Without second thought it seems
As if you knew it would end this way

So walk away, don't look back
And give no thought to me
While I lay here in the black
Hiding so you won't see

Soon the season will turn
And then I'll once again shine
But give me a moment to burn
In the pain that you have made mine



 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

© Copyright 2000 Butterflies_dont_cry - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 05-02-2000 10:42 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Butterfly....
this breaks my heart...
I dont know what to say right now...
this poem is so full of honest sincere pain.
those last 2 lines took my words...
you know Im here...
take care, SS please...
jm
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2 posted 05-03-2000 12:36 AM       View Profile for insect   Email insect   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for insect

Change seems to always happen.
A change that hurts,we usually want it to go away fast but it takes it's time.
A good change seems to go away fast but we want it to last.
You might not be able to stop change but you can try and slow it down or speed it up or just let it take its course.
Metamorphosis,like the caterpillar to the Butterfly.
So fly into a new dream..........
Jeffrey Carter
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3 posted 05-03-2000 12:59 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

BDC,
A change is always sure to come and always right on time. Take care of you and everything else will take care of itself.

All my love,
Jeffrey
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 05-03-2000 01:09 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

ButterfliesDC~

Great big ole' hugs from me to you.
The 'changing season' brings beautiful
new colors into your view.  
Open with the blossoms ... bloom into you.

Hey ... you got my e-mail iffen' you need me.
Love
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


5 posted 05-03-2000 01:40 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Ok, how to start...

First, I must say that I feel this poem 100%. You've penned my life in yours within a few well-wrought words.

Let's dissect this for just a moment, shall we?

I thought you were my reason
For life and breath


A mistake I myself made. I like how in a few words, you described almost an entire relationship. You've shown how someone can become so important to another, that they virtually live to be with that person.

The changing season
Now becomes my inner death


And in a few more words show how damaging that can be if that person "betrays" you. In one stanza, you've taken us from the highest of highs, to the lowest of lows. A-W-E-S-O-M-E!

Soon the season will turn
And then I'll once again shine


Thank you for this glimmer of hope. Once again, in a few words, you've spelled out a vivid picture! I'm glad to see the ray of sunshine blazing through the darkness of this poem!

But give me a moment to burn
In the pain that you have made mine


And finally, this too I understand. Grief is somethign which has to be allowed to run its course. Again, I understand this, having lived it myself. Peace is a hard thing to find at times, and then only at the end of the pain. Once again, you go from one extreme to the other, slamming us in the face with the harsh reality of abrubt and painful change.

I loved this poem, mostly because I empathize with it so much, but also because it was so well written and sincere sounding.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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J.M.* Yes it hurts right now...but this will pass and I'll be stronger for it....at least that's what I keep hearing and soon I too will believe it   Thank you for reading and most of all for being there...**AW Hugs** my S.S.

Insect* Very true! The trick is to enjoy every moment of the good while you have it!
Thank you for reading and for your wish of a new dream  

Jeffrey* Thank you so much for reading and yes the rest is sure to follow  

Marge* Change of season...I thought this would be the perfect title....tis time to do some spring cleaning in this heart of mine  
and your offer of a shoulder and a hug....well there are just no words for what that means to me....so thank you   will have to suffice.

Christopher* You amazed me..... When you have your heart broken, dreams smashed and soul wripped you feel VERY alone....no matter how many people tell you they understand, and it's often the "get back out there and start fighting" advice that comes...it's nice to know that you understand that there is a time for greif. I think that's what the catipillar does while he is in the midst of change....yes he will be a beautiful butterfly soon....but he's loosing who he was...although not as lovely to look at....it was who he was. Thank you for reading and for sharing your thoughts with me, I'm touched.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

Denise
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7 posted 05-03-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Excellently done, Butterflies. I, too, could feel the pain in this. You have described it very well.

Denise
TerryW
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8 posted 05-03-2000 11:22 AM       View Profile for TerryW   Email TerryW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit TerryW's Home Page   View IP for TerryW

Butterflies~
     My dear, I am crying with you.  You took my breath away with this one.  But the pain you will not have to share alone, dear, for your friend is standing right here beside you.

Love Ya!!!!!!


Terry

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.
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9 posted 05-03-2000 11:25 AM       View Profile for TearsFromHeaven   Email TearsFromHeaven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TearsFromHeaven

ButterfliesDon'tCry,
     I can feel your hurt too.  I know what it is like to go through what you are going through.  And your beautiful words describe it so well.   I am a friend of TerryW's and he told me that I needed to be sure and read your work.  He told me you were incredible.  I know now that he told the truth.




 Trust Instinct. Instinct will keep an animal alive, but Logic can kill a man.

Richard "Rickey" N. Boydstun, Jr.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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10 posted 05-03-2000 02:23 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry


Denise* Thank you for reading and for your replies.

Terry* It's a comfort to know that others understand and know that a broken heart is not just a romantic disease but one with a phyisical hurt, thank you for reading and for your kindness. And as I read TFH's reply, It's an honor to be thought of highly, I'm deeply touched. Thank you.

TFH* Welcome to Passions, my work is not up to the scale of the other fine poets here, merely ramblings of what's laying inside, But not to diminish the compliment that you have made thank you so much for your kind replies, this said with a sincere heart, for words without meaning are simply a waste of time and space.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

Parker
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11 posted 05-03-2000 02:53 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Butterflies, this expresses so well what a lot of us have had to deal with and live through. thank you for the read, very nicely done.

As for your last comment about not being up to the level of some of the other poets, your much too modest. Christopher gave his his two thumbs up, so I'd say that puts you right up there. Also your romantic ability, is not to be denied, I for one get weak in the knees at the thought of a romantic dual.... but then again the night is young.

Parker
ESP
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Floating gently on a cloud....


12 posted 05-03-2000 04:16 PM       View Profile for ESP   Email ESP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ESP

After winter comes spring and summer and then they fade through autumn into winter. And it happens over and over. Now maybe winter for you but again will come spring and summer when your grief has run its course. Let tears heal your soul and you will learn and feel much in your path of sadness. You will find love again. Believe that. Beautiful, heart wrenching poem.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."
Butterflies_dont_cry
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13 posted 05-03-2000 04:17 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Parker   perhaps a rematch is in order   now that there is no question of intent    Thank you for your praise, but as you know....we are our toughest critic   Thank you for reading and as always you bring a smile to me my friend.

 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

Butterflies_dont_cry
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ESP   you slipped right past me...Thank goodness for seasons of change...your words have reminded me of why I write, an outlet of pain and a chance to cleanse my soul.  Thank you for reading and for your kindness.
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15 posted 05-03-2000 04:25 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~Butterflies

As always you have my support and understanding. This poem was so sad but so well written and beautiful at the same time. I have come to really love and appreciate your work, and you as a person. They say that in order to know love, you have to know pain. I truly believe in that statement. I also believe sometimes we just have to grieve and let whatever our feelings are come and go. That is the only TRUE way we can move on. I can feel the hurt in this piece and in what you are saying...not only because I too have lived it...but because of the vivid imagery and longing that you paint in this. You write with such an emotional depth from inside, that one can't help but feel what you are feeling, at least on some level. Just remember all of us here at Passions is here for you...myself included. You have a beautiful heart m'friend...and one day sunny skies shall grace your life again. In the meantime, take all the time you need to work this out.

Best wishes always,
Amy


 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
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16 posted 05-03-2000 04:26 PM       View Profile for reeree   Email reeree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for reeree

You really know how to keep someone on the edge of their seat. Every poem that I've read of you so far enlightens me. Keep up the good work and look for me on the rise.
Irie
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17 posted 05-03-2000 07:01 PM       View Profile for Irie   Email Irie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irie

I must say you made me feel this pain with your words.
*ouch*.... It hurts.
And a new season WILL bring wonderful joy to
into your life.
*Hugs*

~Sheri
Corinne
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18 posted 05-03-2000 07:26 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Butterflies don't cry
have you ever wondered why?
They're too busy in the sky,
butterflies flying high.

Fly, butterfly, fly.

Cor
Butterflies_dont_cry
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Amy* You are an angel in the flesh, what a beautiful heart you have.  Thank you so much for all your kindness and for your support...it means so much.

Reeree* thank you   and I'm sure I'll see you soaring soon  

Irie* Words of hope....how sweet to hear.  Thank you for reading and for your heartfelt reply.

Cor* How beautiful that was....thank you!!


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.

Sven
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20 posted 05-04-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

I would be remiss if I didn't say that this is a truly powerful and heartfelt poem. . . the longing and pain are readily evident. . .the words sing with loss. . . the "dark beauty" of this poem is absolutely wonderful. . .

Now then, fly Butterfly. . . spread your wings. . . fly to one who will keep you close. . . and come back to share with us your tale. . .

Simply wonderful. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Butterflies_dont_cry
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21 posted 05-05-2000 06:10 AM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

Sven* A very heartfelt thank you, and I will....if I'm not to old to type by then  
thank you for reading and for your beautiful reply.
 
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