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your voice could wake the dead

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Corazon
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0 posted 05-02-2000 01:56 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon


your voice
could wake the dead
I know
because I meticulously
did away with
(and buried deep)
the memories of your
kisses soft
touches sweet
embraces electric
I refused life to the sound
of your laughter
and I killed the memory
of the soft moans
and sighs
escaping from my lips when
we were one
and now one ring ring hello
I still love you, you know?
has awakened the dead in me
I just wish I could
teach my body
not to believe your lies.

© Copyright 2000 zoe d. - All Rights Reserved
Temptress
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1 posted 05-02-2000 03:21 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Isn't it a difficult thing to teach something so stubborn?   Great poem you have here.  

 Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"
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2 posted 05-02-2000 03:33 PM       View Profile for hsystems   Email hsystems   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hsystems's Home Page   View IP for hsystems

Corazon - this is fantastic!  I can really relate to it.  I once had a very painful breakup with a woman.  We both agreed that, for us, being "just friends" was out of the question, and we needed to move on with our lives.  But, each time I would start to heal, she would call me up and reopen the wounds.
Ironically, the song that is playing on the radio as I write this is "I Will Survive," by Gloria Gaynor - and I'm sure that you will, but sometimes people can make it difficult!  {{{HUGS}}}


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Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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3 posted 05-02-2000 04:06 PM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

A very deep theme, very well written.  You take me there, and break my heart with your emotions, and lost love.  Excellently done.
A marvelous title - I couldn't imagine what in the world ... until I read the poem.  Oh, that stopped me short.  Yes, a perfect title.
Corazon
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4 posted 05-02-2000 05:50 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thank you so much, am glad you enjoyed...now if only the phone call weren't real
and he didn't have such an effect on me....lol....oh well...I will just *write* him out of me *g*  that's one gift we poets share that I really appreciate  
JamesMichael
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5 posted 05-02-2000 06:23 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is good writing Corazon..I have been experiencing this and I found that as time went by and I met new friends when the phone would ring I was hoping it was one of my new friends and not her...they became more important to me and she became and intrusion...now if she calls I think to myself...oh no...not her again....in the real world they will go away when they figure out you don't want to play...James
hoot_owl_rn
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APPLAUDS!!! This is an excellent piece of writing, it's amazing what memories a persons voice, a smell, a sight...can bring back
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7 posted 05-02-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I was prepared to argue with the title... thinking you were sneaking in a chance to malign my melodious tones jes cuz I wasn't around to threaten you with my baseball bat. LOL

But your poem sent my argument flying... and I sit nodding in agreement and joining Hoot in her applause. *S* Great job!
Alicat
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8 posted 05-02-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Corazon, I can relate heavily to this one...excellent writing!  Yes, it's common, and banal, but all the more striking and powerful.  Such are the best poems..those that can evoke such emotions and memories from things we've all done or been through...such is often overlooked, and I'm very glad you could capture the thought and pen it.


Alicat
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9 posted 05-02-2000 07:38 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very well done, Corazon! Your poems always so clearly speak your emotions.

Denise
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10 posted 05-02-2000 07:53 PM       View Profile for bboog   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit bboog's Home Page   View IP for bboog

C~
  Your poem is well written. I wonder if you might consider a diff. title though? (Just a suggestion) Waking the dead usually implies a loud voice/noise and maybe a title like "Ring, Ring, Hello?" might work better? Anyway, I liked it.
best regards,
bboog
Local Rebel
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11 posted 05-02-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

I'd prefer an alarm clock..... too bad Corazon... those voices from the past are better left.....
warmhrt
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12 posted 05-02-2000 08:43 PM       View Profile for warmhrt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for warmhrt

I know of what you write...and Rebel's right, but that doesn't stop the memories from invading...  Very nice job in describing the attempt to bury longings and emotions that seem to have a life all their own.

warmhrt

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13 posted 05-02-2000 10:13 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~
The title led me in ...
the parallel is that we've all known
that 'voice' that awakened what we thought was 'dead'.

A wonderfully expressed piece of emotion.
Perfect as it stands ... title and content.
You've a wonderful knack of pulling the reader into your emotions ... worked for me.
~*Marge*~
LOL @ 'write him out of me'.


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devina
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14 posted 05-02-2000 11:57 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've done wonderful with this hun...I'm quite breathless now!!!

I've been through this too many times to count girl...your body will ALWAYS betray your mind.. You just take care of you when that phone rings!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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15 posted 05-03-2000 12:04 AM       View Profile for Jeffrey Carter   Email Jeffrey Carter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeffrey Carter

HI Corazon,
I just posted a poem on this same subject. I truly know your pain.

All my love,
Jeffrey

 I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep
SeaDragon
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The title makes it perfect.  Electric touches shocking back to awake and hurt, even if the touch is only the hammer against your eardrum.

 Every word was once a poem ~ Emerson
PhaerieChild
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17 posted 05-03-2000 02:02 AM       View Profile for PhaerieChild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PhaerieChild

Boy!!!! Can I relate to this!! Had a boyfriend once who really grated me with his "voice". Great poem Corazon!

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
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Corazon
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jmlee12345
thanks and yep time and new experiences make it easier to say no  

bowing to the applause of my two ruths…you don't know how much that means to me coming from you two  
but……………..ROFG@maligning my melodious tones ………….*very very innocent look* who me?

Alicat thank you, its amazing just how many different memories this did evoke….thanks again

dsnyder thanks denise, I have trouble writing about anything else than emotions, so am glad at least they come through clear  

bboog thanks for the comments, but no, intended the title to be a bit shocking to describe the feeling of the phone call…

Local Rebel yep…I think so too…guess I was just rattled for a bit, forgot that even insincere "ghosts" can use the phone  

warmhrt I like the way you said they "invade" and yes I agree with rebel too, better in the past…thanks

Marge   thanks, your opinion stands highly with me   am glad you liked

devina thanks much   and yep, I am learning to take care of me….

Jeffrey thank you, will look for your poem…and yes, it seems many here know that pain…sigh

SeaDragon thank you, and yes that is why I chose that title too  

WildChild thanks shawna…
I  wish I could hug each and everyone who could relate so strongly…it is not fun, but am glad you all enjoyed the read
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19 posted 05-03-2000 08:07 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

AWESOME.
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dont you know I know this well
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