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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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Dont Look;Just Leap Maybe there’s no way out of hell, But it’s a war I have to wage myself. You’re the reason I’m even here today. I’ll love the pain when these memories fade. I wanna go back and relive the dream. I wanna block it out; wanna hear you scream. Is it something that I’ll regret? Or do I want what I can’t get? If you can live with all my faults, If I could return a couple of calls, We wouldn’t need so many walls. only cry when the angels fall… Maybe there’s no way to love this face. Or see these arms as a resting place. Could be a fear to commit or of love that’s true. Could be a teary smile that sparkles so well on you. But you’ll never know how much I feel. We’re not ready for something so real. Is this something that I’ll regret? Or do I want what I can’t get? If you can live with all my faults, If I could return a couple of calls, We wouldn’t need so many walls. only cry when the angels fall… Maybe there’s no way to move on, Or erase the masks we both drew on. But that can’t be true; no moon’s full forever. If I’m on the last rung, then it can only get better. I’d sell my soul to bring you to me. Then again, perhaps we’re where we’re s’posed to be. Is this something I can’t get? Or do I want what I’ll regret? If you can live with all my faults, If I could return a couple of calls, We wouldn’t need so many walls. only cry when the angels fall… < !signature--> We all got somethin' we need to atone for. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 05-02-2000).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"only cry when the angels fall..." I just loved this line! And I liked how you kept using that stanza over and over for emphasis. Very nice piece here, and it was like I was reading your heart. Fabulous read sir. Thank you for sharing! |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Excellent writing here, Ethan. I'm glad I stopped here. Lot of power beneath the surface here... Wonderfully done. Michael |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
thanks for the replies you's guys. there's replies on y'alls poems from me. =) We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***ethan halo, i am in total awe. in the space of an hour i have read two of your poems and i am amazed... is amazed the right word? i don't know, are there any words? you say all that i need to, only you do it with talent...  < !signature-->I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. [This message has been edited by mete out (edited 05-02-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You’re the reason I’m even here today. I’ll love the pain when these memories fade. I wanna go back and relive the dream. I wanna block it out; wanna hear you scream. -------------- We wouldn’t need so many walls. only cry when the angels fall… Maybe there’s no way to love this face. Or see these arms as a resting place. Could be a fear to commit or of love that’s true. Could be a teary smile that sparkles so well on you. But you’ll never know how much I feel. We’re not ready for something so real. Is this something that I’ll regret? Or do I want what I can’t get? ------------- Maybe there’s no way to move on, Or erase the masks we both drew on. But that can’t be true; no moon’s full forever. If I’m on the last rung, then it can only get better. I’d sell my soul to bring you to me. Then again, perhaps we’re where we’re s’posed to be. ------------ see...I did miss one... this is getting scary... have you been peeking in my pitiful life wow this poem is awesome, reads like a song lyric too. im glad I did this search to see what I missed... going back to look for more... consider your poetry officially stalked tonite LOL later gator jm I think I could need - this in my life I think I'm just scared - that I know too much I can't relate and that's a problem I'm feeling ... If you're gone - maybe it's time to go home There's an awful lot of breathing room But I can hardly move If you're gone - baby you need to come home cuz there's a little bit of something me... In everything in you. ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
I really, really, really liked this one! ---------------------- Maybe there's no way to move on, or erase the masks we both drew on. ---------------------- That was my favorite part. You have such a gift Ethan!! I look forward to reading more from you. "That man has shown himself great who has never grieved in evil days and never bewailed his destiny." --Seneca |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Ethan~ you took my breath away with this one! i have felt this way before as well and a flood of memories played through my mind and heart as i read this one. this could definitely be put into song format and i am sure would sell just wonderfully. excellent just excellent. amy  "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A mournful song, Ethan, well penned! Corinne |
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