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Dance with Butterflies * * *
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Dance with Butterflies * * * |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ Dance with Butterflies ~ You and me we dance with butterflies - Trembling with laughter in our sighs... Flying high upon eachother's breeze - Sailing free thereon the deepest seas. * * * Brightest blue the sky when I'm with you - Sweetest dreams I have, and they're of you... You and me we soar to heights unknown - Far beyond the faintest stars we've flown. * * * Take my hand let's dance with butterflies - The music that I hear, is in your eyes... -poetFemmeFatale May 01, 2000 |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Awe, now this is simply beautiful. I love it when you write such tender and light rhyme. You are truly one of a kind, Gen. Michael |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
whoever you wrote this for must be a truly fantabulous person. the metaphors and symbolism are great. "with laughter in our sighs" "flying high upon eachother's breeze" "far beyond the faintest stars we've flown." i couldn't pick a fav line so i metioned all of them. i indeed have much to learn... =) good work! We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Butterflies are meant to be free... just like you, just like me. *smile* LOVE THIS ONE!!! I think this is one of my favs by you. my goodness we are inspired of late... I see I have yet another Gen treasure to go read.  later gen-gator jm |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Aahhh...my little trio tribe! LOL Thank you Michael for your words so sweet, and Mr. Halo, my newfound friend, and Miss Janet.... What can I say, except that you've kept me sane these last few weeks girl! Thank you all so much! This little piece just came from the concept of having butterflies in one's stomach, and it went from there....just a few sweet thoughts. Thanks guys and girl!"Laugh and the world laughs with you..." cry, and you're all alone. My version - pFF |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
it be nice to be so tiny that you could see into the eyes of your butterfly lover o yuh they already so darn pretty...nice poem yuh |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pff, I didn't know you cared. Where and when? Loved the poem. *L* |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
This was verty sweet, it touched me. It is very enjoyable to erad poetry so full of sincerety. I also think the mechanics of this work were wonderful. It flowed from beginning to end. I have always believed poetry should be very easy to read and this was that. Thank you for a lovely piece. David2  |
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DiObear Member
since 2000-04-30
Posts 66Switzerland |
Dancing with butterflies... what a wonderful way to describe a relationship. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Pretty,light and fluffy. This one felt like pancakes... |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Yeah I know... digging all thse old ones out of the past guys, but I've got some cathing up to do... besides... poems liek this are worth reading more than once! =) Just wanted to put in a late 2 cents and say what a cool poem it was. I think I'm spoiled on the longer ones you write now. But for a short one they don't get much better. =) Tanx Gen!"Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Ok, back to the top with you!! Gen, you let this one get by me. . .again, another wonderfully romantic poem!! What's gotten into you woman? Great poem... -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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pandora Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 184 |
this is lovely, miss pff... very lovely indeed... enjoyed this...! especially... "trembling with butterflies"... great imagery pan |
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