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Marina
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0 posted 2000-05-01 11:02 PM


A Gift of Forever


A small delicate box
Wrapped, with Christmas paper and red lace
She takes it to hand
Pale and drawn, is her distraught face.

The last gift to be opened
Grief has pieced a hole through her heart
And anger holds no answers
Never can we choose, when our loved ones will depart

Unwrapped, and held tight in her hand
A perfect shimmering gold chain
A floating heart, its companion
For one brief moment, she feel’s nothing but pain

As her eyes well to tears
There is a card she must read
Collecting herself
She struggles for the breath, she needs


The words were as clear as crystal
That swirled in her head
A message, so perfect
And this, is what it said

A heart with wings
Will float back and forth, forever
Though you may never see me
For eternity we shall be together

Remember me as I was
Happier times, like the pictures in the hallway
Think of me, my love
For I shall think of you.....always


Marina May 1 2000



[This message has been edited by Marina (edited 05-02-2000).]

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Sven
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1 posted 2000-05-01 11:09 PM


Simply beautiful Marina. . .

Speaks to the power of eternal love. . .

Wonderful. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-05-01 11:41 PM


Marina...
this is exceptional...wow
I got a "warm chill" when I read this.
Its perfect...
so how did ya get to be so sweet anyway  
take care my poetice friend,
jm

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3 posted 2000-05-01 11:49 PM


Marina, this is such a poignant scene, and that you've dedicated it to your mother makes it that much more tender. So lovely, this. Thank you for sharing something so personal.

~ Claire

 Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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4 posted 2000-05-02 12:00 PM


Marina~
Very tender, very touching
very treasured.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Marina
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5 posted 2000-05-02 01:27 AM


Jm...I'm a sugar addict!
Marina
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6 posted 2000-05-02 09:00 AM


Sven, thank you. I think eternal love is what we all seek.

Jm, thank you as always

Claire and Marge thanks to boyh of you.

Marina


[This message has been edited by Marina (edited 05-02-2000).]

TearsFromHeaven
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7 posted 2000-05-02 12:39 PM


Marina,
     I can feel the power of the love in your poem.  It is very strong and heartfelt.  I really like this.  Wonderfully done!



 Trust Instinct. Instinct will keep an animal alive, but Logic can kill a man.

Richard "Rickey" N. Boydstun, Jr.

TerryW
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8 posted 2000-05-02 12:41 PM


Marina,
    Yes, dear, eternal love is the most powerful force to ever exist.  I must agree, this poem has got to be one of the best I've ever read.   I love it!

Love Ya~
Terry



 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Grace
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9 posted 2000-05-02 01:06 PM


Marina,
That was absolutely beautiful,it really touched my heart. Great work!!!!


 

Irie
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10 posted 2000-05-02 01:23 PM


There is a great deal of sadness and love spilled on
this page. This is a painfully beautiful tribute to your Mom.

~Sheri

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11 posted 2000-05-02 02:42 PM


Marina, I think this is the most powerful poem you have ever written.  The last stanza was amazing. I think I held my breath while reading some of this. Bravo

James

Marina
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12 posted 2000-05-02 08:51 PM


This poem is very, very special to me. I wrote it for my mother.  It is a true story of the the day my Dad passed on, Dec 23/97.  The Doctors told us that he would be fine and would see Christmas.  He had been battling Hep. C for a peroid of time, which he has contracted during a blood tranfusion in 1977. Even though we were told he would make it, he knew better.  These were his final words, that he spoke and as always they were for his one and only true love....my Mom.


Marina


[This message has been edited by Marina (edited 05-02-2000).]

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13 posted 2000-05-02 08:58 PM


Sobs and tears here, Marina. This is so beautifully touching. I'm sure your mom will cherish his gift and this poem for as long as she lives.

Denise

Janet Marie
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14 posted 2000-05-02 09:24 PM


Marina, just read your inspiration for this poem...

so VERY touched by you...and this poem.
thank you for sharing this part of you with us.*smile*
jm

Marina
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15 posted 2000-05-02 09:26 PM


In my story telling I forgot to say thank you to all.

TearsFrom Heaven, thank you very much

Terry, I am truly honoured and humbled that you could feel this way.  Thank  you with all my heart.

Grace and Sheri, thank you both very much for reading it and posting such wonderful replies.

James,  is a quit a compliment coming from one who's work I greatly admire. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Marina

Marina
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16 posted 2000-05-02 09:33 PM


Denise and Jm, you snuck in when I wasn't paying attention.

Thanks to both of you and I will tell what my Mom thinks of this poem as soon as she is finished crying!!

Marina

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17 posted 2000-05-03 03:34 PM


WOW!!! Marina girl,
You wrote this with such feeling. This is my favorite of yours. Absolutely beautiful.

All my love,
Jeffrey

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but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

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18 posted 2000-05-03 04:04 PM


~Marina...

You write from a place that I know well. However you express it much better than I! This was simply an awesome piece of work m'friend! God bless you, your mom, and your dad in heaven. May he be resting and in peace along with my Mom.

Take care,
Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

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19 posted 2000-05-03 04:05 PM


Wonderful, Marina, truly lovely.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Martie
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20 posted 2000-05-03 04:14 PM


Marina, I had just posted a poem that I wrote of my mother when I saw this...I was already missing my mom so much, this poem just got to me...it is wonderfully tender!
Marina
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21 posted 2000-05-03 09:17 PM


Jeffery, thank you very much.  There is a great deal of emotion to with one.  It is one of two poems of mine which mean a great deal to me.

Amy, I read your post to this poem several times.  I can honestly tell you have brought tears to my eyes.  Thank you so very, very much for your kind words and your constant support.  God bless you.

ESP, thank you I greatly appreciate your posts.


Who knows...maybe your Mom and my Dad have become good friends!

Martie, your poem was truly beautiful and I am sure it will be treasured always.  I thank you for your support.

Marina

JamesMichael
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22 posted 2000-05-07 07:50 AM


"Think of me my Love...for I shall think of you always"...this very touching poem displays the beauty and the endurance of love.   James
Marina
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23 posted 2000-05-07 12:36 PM


Thank you James.  Eternal love is one thing I think you all seek, although unfortunitly few of us  truly find it.

Marina

lorilockheart
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24 posted 2000-05-07 05:58 PM


Marina,

There are no words that could express my response to this poem.  
All I can say is that I loved it.
Thanks,
Lori

Marina
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25 posted 2000-05-07 08:41 PM


Lori. thank you very !
Kit McCallum
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26 posted 2000-05-07 08:49 PM


This is so lovely and touching Marina ... both yourself and your mother are fortunate to have had such a gentle and loving remembrance from a wonderful man.

Best heartfelt wishes,
/Kit

Marina
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27 posted 2000-05-08 11:45 AM


Kit, thank you very much.  We were indeed fortunite.

Marina

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